Is This Rushed So Far?

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Can someone tell me is this rushed so far? If yes, can you please suggest me how to fix it?:heart:
warning: only half of episode
note: i’ll fix some animations and proportions

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I personally wouldn’t read it since I’m not into fantasy like I use to be.

You have some grammar mistakes but overall it’s good. But it does seem rushed! No need to rush, take your time.

:sparkles::point_up:t4:

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I mean does plot seems rushed? Do things happen too fast?

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The fairy queen gave a mission to Fay (sorry if it isn’t her name) but I don’t see it rushed. Since she was talking to her friend. Maybe you can wait a few days and then Fay can go to Earth to help the boy.

Since you mentioned that Fay doesn’t know how to act like a human, maybe a few days of learning can be useful. Plus it adds more to the story!

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okay thank you! that seems good…but maybe i should make that part (when queen gives fay a mission) at the end of the story so everything wouldn’t go that fast

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Yeah, whatever you think suits best.

I just think it’s a bit of rushing which it isn’t always good since you want to build momentum, yah know?

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Maybe give some background before the queen gives Fay the mission. For example, who she is and what she does.

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I agree :point_up:t4:

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That way the readers can connect to the characters more.

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yes…I thought about that too like Fay’s opinion on their world and Earth for example how she thinks that fairies started acting like humans and she doesnt like that

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Good luck on the story @mateepi

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thank you sm :heart:

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Hi! I just read it. It seems a bit rushed, but I think I understand what’s going on overall and the plot seems quite interesting. :blush: Here are some possible suggestions to kinda help ease the reader into it. Possibly give us a bit of a backstory on what’s going on with Fay and why she has those tasks from the fairy queen. I like the banter going on with Fay and her friend and the use of the thought bubbles, but maybe you could stretch out the scene a bit and maybe give us a little preview of what’s to come for that mystery effect. Of course, these are just personal preferences - everyone has a different opinion.

Good luck on your story! :kissing_heart:

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Thank you so much! As my portal is really glitchy I’ll try to do as best as I can. :heart:

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Course! Feel free to PM me if you have any coding/other issues and lmk when your story is out! Again, good luck! :upside_down_face:

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thank you again! im just worried if i tell the backstory and why they have to do those tasks that i’ll reveal too much…can u please tell me some main questions on what should i reveal?

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Np! Maybe give hints as to why they have to do the tasks or other elements of your story. For example, in a conversation, you could bring something up but remain sort of murky about it and have a flashback that doesn’t reveal too much. Flashbacks are always awesome in my opinion. :blush:

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Thank you! :heart:

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Of course! Any time. :upside_down_face:

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