Hey everyone, welcome to my review thread! 
Since I did this on IG, I decided to do it on the forums as well! I have a lot more free time up until September 2024. I do have a summer job but it’s pretty chill/fun and I heart it 
Anyways…
Rules:
- There’s no guarantee I’ll read the full episode/chapter (but I usually will… I think)
- I might not end up reviewing it (I am doing this for free, btw) BUT I will make it a duty/goal and aim to review all the stories
Lol, this sounds so contradictory 
- The reviews will be posted on this thread (along with a screenshot, possibly).
- Do not ask if I will continue your story. I might or might not.
- Don’t rush me, svp (that’s French for please).
Use this format if you want a review:
Story name:
Link:
Genre:
Style: LL/limelight, INK, Classic
Description: (optional)
Cover is optional.
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Hiii, thank you so much for doing this! 🩵 Here is my story:
Title: Beyond Life
Genre: Sci-fi + romance (slow burn)
Description: A glitch in the system causes two strangers to realize that the world isn’t what they thought it was. Together, they try to discover the truth, and what’s real.
Style: LL
Link:
Beyond Life link 
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Hi, can it be an unpublished story too?
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It can be, but all my reviews will be public!
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My review for Beyond Life by @Ela.stories 
Firstly, I want to say that I’m not a professional reviewer and all opinions are my own! 
I want to begin by saying that your directing is amazing! It’s very smooth and your use of overlays is perfection! The little smoke coming out of the cigarette was a nice touch to your story. Lol, the overlay cigarettes really lived up to what the chapter was going to contain. Also, your grammar and spelling is very good. I didn’t find anything off. So, great job in that regard! 
Your story also does a good job of drawing out emotions from the reader. Like, I felt Peter’s mom’s pain and oh man, when Aubrey was confronted by her ex, I wanted to smack her ex and send him into outer space, preferably in the direction of a meteorite 
Peter getting angry at the game is so me. Like, it was super relatable haha. I honestly hate losing and can’t blame him for going into rage mode 
Honestly, pretty much everything was great for a first chapter. One thing I recommend is perhaps giving readers the option to skip the flashes. I know you gave a warning at the beginning of the story, which is good, but having an option in your story would be nice!
Some screenshots
Overall, amazing job, you should be proud of yourself 
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Hi!
Would love to hear your thoughts!
Story name: 6 Elementals: The Past
Link: 6 Elementals: The Past
Genre: Adventure
Style: LL/limelight
Description: 6 Elementals could save Erendor. But what if it’s not that easy? Switching to the dark side, breaking rules, and making sacrifices. Friendship, love, and unity vanish. 1 Li
Cover:
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My review for His Sweet Treat by @Abinaya
Firstly, I want to say that I’m not a professional reviewer and all opinions are my own!
Your first episode was really good! You started off your episode by adding a scene which will hook readers in, so great job in that regard! A intriguing intro is always an excellent and smart idea. The directing was clean and easy to follow. Like, I didn’t notice any butchered directing at all. Good use of zooms, too!
Additionally, you did a fantastic job of showing the emotions of the characters. I can understand why Valentina does what she does. You also made me curious to know more about her family back home. Also, is it bad that I actually felt sad for her ex-fiance? 
I think they need to clear some things up because the way he described her abandonment made my heart ache 
Overall, your first chapter was very interesting! Your grammar and spelling is very good, but at one point, RAFAEL says “I said who let you” but I think that “I said who let you in” would sound better, IMO. Also, when Valentina thinks “But I had no choice but to hold eye contact…” You can also begin the sentence with “I had no choice but to hold eye contact…” so as to repeat the word twice. Either way, whatever you choose is fine, because it still sounds nicely written, regardless.
Some screenshots
Fantastic job, I think that your story will hit 100 reads in less than a week, because it’s really good
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Thank you so much for you review and your insight on my characters!! 
Tbh I felt bad for him too lmao And I’ve changed the dialogue you’ve pointed out <3
Too sweet!! Success with your review thread and thank you again 
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6 Elementals: The Past by @KikiMoon
Firstly, I want to say that I’m not a professional reviewer and all opinions are my own!
I want to begin by saying that your directing was very cool! I also LOVED how you color coded the lines said by each character. For example, Akash’s dialogue being in red was super cool to me. It matched her color scheme. Your use of magic overlays was very stunning as well. So, your intro scene was very epic! I liked how you mentioned how the choices in your story work. The hoop mini game was really fun and interactive! The way they both got whisked into the magical portal had me LOL’ing, not gonna lie
In addition, I love how you say “end of journey” in regards to your episode. It’s very unique. I also love fantasy a lot, so I found your chapter fun to read. (Fantasy is one of my favorite genres). Erendor gives me LOTR vibes! BTW, thanks for the flash warning! That’s really important to add in! So good job in that regard FYI, the name of the evil king is also the same name in a novel/comic project series that I’m writing up, so that was cool to see 
The spelling and grammar was great. However, in regards to the line “Erendor was created by the God of Nature (also known as the Elemental God) to be a place for all Elementals and people and to live in peace and harmony.” would sound better as “Erendor was created by the God of Nature (also known as the Elemental God) to be a place for all Elementals and people to live in peace and harmony.” so remove “and”
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Overall, it was a great first chapter so awesome job, I can tell you worked really hard and it paid off
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I also want to say that even though it’s in adventure, I think it suits fantasy too 
Both genres work for it
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Story name: My Mercenary
Link Episode Writer Portal
Genre: Drama
Style: LL
Description: It’s the Golden Age of Piracy, and your safety is in jeopardy. Your father hires a mercenary for your protection. But he never intended for Darius Blaise to show you the world in a new light.
Would love to hear your thoughts 
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My Mercenary @em_stories
Firstly, I want to say that I’m not a professional reviewer and all opinions are my own!
I want to begin by saying that your directing was very smooth. It flowed nicely and there wasn’t any weird butchered directing. I also think the vibe of your story matches what you were going for (which is a historical vibe). The map looked very cool and the outfits also matched the time period of your story. I love that even though you’re writing in the historical period, you’ve incorporated diversity into your story and full CC.
In addition, your spelling and grammar was good and it had a historical tone to it. Like, the way they spoke reminded me about a medieval show lol. I like how you set up your intro and your ending. Nice use of tappable overlays.
One thing I recommend is that I noticed in the Q and A, you defined mercenary. I think it would be a good idea to include a definition in the intro of the story but this is entirely up to you!
Some screenshots
Overall, amazing job on your 1st chapter
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Thank you for reading! That’s a good idea about the intro - might add it in 
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Thank you for taking the time to do this! 
Story name: Intoxication
Link: Episode Writer Portal
Genre: drama
Style: LL/limelight
Description:
Jade Riley + Liam Davis are inseparable, but their love might cost Jade a lifelong friendship.
Story name: O Son Where Art Thou: Happily Ever After
Link: Episode Writer Portal
Genre: Comedy, Drama
Style: LL/limelight
Description: You got your happily ever, but you’ve also ran into a few problems. Find out in this sequel to O Son Where Art Thou.
Intoxication by @denaxepisode
Firstly, I want to say that I’m not a professional reviewer and all opinions are my own!
I want to begin by saying I loved that your chapter was short. I love shorter episodes as a reader (it’s my preference). I would recommend adding a yes or no option for the tappable menu because I wanted to customize my characters but accidently pressed start, to start the story XD
Grammar and spelling appeared fine. To add on, I’m going to be honest and say that I wasn’t super sure what exactly was going on in the first episode, I’m so sorry. (This is probably because it was very short, but again, I do love shorter episodes). But I can tell that you worked hard and your story has so much potential
A screenshot
Overall, good effort on your 1st chapter but I do recommend to jazz up the directing & dialogue just a little bit so you can draw more readers in
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O Son Where Art Thou: Happily Ever After by @Whatever1
Firstly, I want to say that I’m not a professional reviewer and all opinions are my own!
I want to begin by saying I loved that we could customize their names. I also loved how you described their jobs/duties (when you cut to the mom at her workplace, that was a nice coding move). Additionally, I like that the kids look like the mom and dad.
Grammar and spelling were good however I found that your dialogue could be stiff as well as sort of awkward at times and you did write “well” a lot. I would recommend cutting back on the amount of times you use it. When the grandmother says “how’s it going as a stay at home dad” there should be a ? at the end of the sentence.
When the dad says: “Why thank you and me and [NAME] thought it would be an excellent arrangement” should be edited to make the sentence flow smoother. “Why thank you” was also used excessively. I recommend not having too much repetition of the same phrases/words.
Some screenshots
So cool seeing FlowerGriefer’s bubble bath background and overlay XD 
Overall, good effort on your chapter, I can tell you worked hard
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Story Name: Run Away ~ Love
Link: Episode Writer Portal
Genre: Romance/Drama (High School Based)
Style: LL
Description: You run away from your abusive home and end up living with your crush. A relationship blooms, but the obstacles of adolescence never go away.
Thank you in advance for this !
