Firstly, I want to say that I’m not a professional reviewer and all opinions are my own!
I want to begin by saying that I loved your chapter length and I think you capture the spirit of high school very well (with those teens dancing on the table in their birthday suits and the usage of insults like dork lol).
I feel really bad for our MC Jasyln, since her parents are so freaking awful. This must make her life harder than it already is
Your directing was good and I didn’t notice any weird issues with it. So great job in that regard! In addition, the use of backgrounds was great like when you used school themed backgrounds for the setting.
Grammar and spelling were also good however in the beginning you write: “A coming of age story - a girl learning to trust herself, even with everything around her comes crashing down.” I would replace with with when instead. It sounds so much better if you make this small change.
Title: Jinxed Hearts. Genre: Drama Description: Dorothy and Ethan’s love faces trials as secrets unravel. Will it endure betrayal’s tumultuous journey?
Firstly, I want to say that I’m not a professional reviewer and all opinions are my own!
I want to begin by saying that I loved the length of your chapter and I absolutely love how you fleshed out your characters and introduced them to us! One thing I really liked was instead of just telling us that the MC’s mom died, you showed us in flashback, which I thought was very well directed. (Your directing is very good. It’s clean and not butchered at all. Good on you for making it flow smoothly!) Your use of overlays is also super well done and fits the scenes appropriately!
I also loved how you ended episode 1 off on a cliffhanger. This is an excellent idea because it will get the reader craving for more. They’ll want to continue your story to see what happens! So good ending point for your episode
You wrote the emotions of the character’s very well, such as the LI’s reluctance to wanting a forced marriage, and his mom’s persistence that he has to. Well, in fact, it seems like she is threatening him! And playing the “I took care of you your whole life” card and “gave you the best education money can buy” is so low. Oh man, that seriously sucks! I really do feel bad for him. Sometimes I’m thankful my upbringing was kind of neglectful because no one can play this card with me But I feel sooooo bad for people who experience this and I’m sure some people will be able to relate to this
It’s nice of you to add customization because a lot of readers would prefer that. I love the dynamic between her father and her. It’s so warmhearted and makes me go “awww, I wish I had that” The interaction between the LI and MC was very brief but it’s only the first chapter, so IMO, that is OK! I’m sure future episodes will build on their relationship. I like the types of careers you chose for them, and what backgrounds they came from, because I’m getting “rich meets poor” vibes and that’s a very popular trope! I’m sure you’ll get a lot of reads!
Grammar and spelling were insanely excellent, but at one point, when the MC (Dorothy) is in the bath tub, she thinks: “That man is a glued to his work.” I would just recommend to remove “a” to make it sound much nicer.
Thank you for the opportunity and I hope you enjoy
Story: Salt in the Wound by Cerisaro Link:
Genre: Romance/drama/mystery Style: Limelight Description: Her first love transfers back to her school after a year of not hearing from him. What if they cross paths? Will new feelings bloom? Or will her hatred outweigh these feelings?
Firstly, I want to say that I’m not a professional reviewer and all opinions are my own!
I want to begin by saying that your chapter length was good. I usually prefer shorter episodes but I’m sure your your chapter length will make a lot of people happy
Your directing was excellent and the character’s names are very beautiful. I loved when we could read about what some of their names meant. I also liked how you did a pronunciation for their names. It’s important to say the name right! A lot of people, outside my culture, tend to mispronounce my real name too
Thalia’s name is really pretty btw
OMG so the “Lyrin stole the hierloom” shocked me. What a twist! In addition, I love how you color coded your points system choices (connection and disconnection). I find that the colors are well suited.
I like the backgrounds you used and your art is really beautiful. Grammar and spelling was excellent (and it was interesting, in a good way, how you split your dialogue up into different speech bubbles), but I did notice a mistake.
You wrote “would be sat down in the same room as me” but it should be something like “sitting down in the same room as me.”
Thank you so much for your review! I loved hearing your thoughts about my story And I had a feeling about that error being incorrect I should have went with my gut feeling Thank you sm for noticing it, I’ll fix it! Side note: a lot of people get my actual name wrong too, so I feel you
But I feel sooooo bad for people who experience this and I’m sure some people will be able to relate to this 
The interaction between the LI and MC was very brief but it’s only the first chapter, so IMO, that is OK! I’m sure future episodes will build on their relationship. I like the types of careers you chose for them, and what backgrounds they came from, because I’m getting “rich meets poor” vibes and that’s a very popular trope! I’m sure you’ll get a lot of reads!
How did I overlook that mistake though 
Luckily, Jem is very easy to say 
Even my mom, who’s not fluent in English, can pronounce it 
good luck with your story 