I’m just so happy reading this that nfoanfieafia. ;_; And lol please, trust me, the directing and plot of your story is great. The directing is something I’ve been trying to improve, cuz it looks stale sometimes if there aren’t so many zooms…
Yes, I did try to write MC in a good, confident light. It was about time I stopped reading stories with the “awkward, shy MC” who doesn’t “just sleep around/is still a virgin”. I write it based on my own experiences with such double standards, so thankfully her raw development, but also a softer, weaker side of her is decent so far.
I feel disappointed still somehow with how I portrayed Jason. Don’t get me wrong, he’s set to being an abusive piece of garbage. It’s just I wanted to elaborate more on emotional abuse too, and the eventual rise of abusive levels that horrid people can climb. I wanted to create a foil of him, someone mysterious and complex, but also a sweet person that can still be sexy and alluring. Seems like a lot of stories lack this, and I’m usually never one to excuse passive behavior IRL too.
And Christ, I’ll admit on one thing. The Johnny/Ronnie (and Lonnie, the one who got shanked lmao) was probably one of my favorites, if not my favorite, scenes to direct and write. Thankfully, it’s not just them, but the other “grunts” who are dumb to the point of being exaggerated. Still cracks me up whenever I preview the scene and their damn presence appears lmfao.
I don’t know when exactly you read Chapter 5, but I made some edits. Decided to just out Ruben as a bisexual man in a certain scene. If he’s going to be a male self-insert of me, might as well make him one. But a healthier, sexually fluid one that comes off as more diverse and not based on other stereotypes. Figured it’d be unfair to just include lesbian women, and might as well add some more substance since it’d be ironic if I DIDN’T include more LGBT people.