Just published my new story! (1-5)

[XeranaX]

Finally after spending 4 months writing and editing I have published my story Assassins by Xerana! I would love for you to check it out and give any feedback

[IsabellaMason]

Congrats!

[XeranaX]

Thank you !!

[space_bunnies24364]

Congrats, wishing you all the best, I hope it does really well!

[DarkXBear]

Hey there, well done I will go and read your story I bet it’s amazing once again well done be proud of yourself

[XeranaX]

Thank u so much!

[XeranaX]

means a lot, thankies ^-^

[pineapplegirl1]

Congratulations! Excited to check it out

[_bebii]

heyy, so i’ve read your story and i’d like do give you a short feedback

positive;
_nice backgrounds/overlays
_beautiful cover
_good dialogues; way of speaking matches with each characters personality, ++humourous and diverse

things you can work on;
_add periods (.) after each sentence
_the pauses between narrators were too long. yk when tiping to read the next text, i had to wait a few seconds. (but not always tho)

otherwise, everything’s fine. keep up the good work!

[_bebii]

also, i can’t read episode 5. is it already coded or…?

[XeranaX]

Thank you so much for taking the time to read it and give feedback! I really appreciate it. I definitely have been trying to figure out when to slow the story down with pauses, I’ll definitely focus on the narration aspects! Full stops as well haha, I’ll try remember to put them in.

[XeranaX]

episode 1-5 r fully published