Last question : Need help doing choices PLs


#1

I want them to be able to choose if they want to read the author’s note or not.

Here’s the script (if you can edit it for me that’d be great):
NARRATOR
Would you like to read the Author’s note?
choice
"Yes"{
@MSANONYMOUS enters from screen left to screen left
music music_butterfliesbuild
MS ANONYMOUS (wave_extreme)
Hey my lovely readers <3.
MS ANONYMOUS (talk_apathetic)
I know you guys are probably wondering, "Why is this episode so short?"
MS ANONYMOUS (talk_explain_neutral)
That’s because this is the pilot of story.
MS ANONYMOUS (talk_handsonhips_neutral_loop)
I promise the next chapters will be longer.
MS ANONYMOUS (talk_whisper_unsure)
Pssst… If you have a snapchat feel free to add me: BNMFXO
}
music off
INT. BLACK - NIGHT
NARRATOR
} “No.” {
@MSANONYMOUS enters from screen left to screen left
MS ANONYMOUS (talk_accuse_angry)
I can’t believe you don’t want to read my author’s note!

music juvie_radiosong
@MS ANONYMOUS is eyeroll_sarcastic
MS ANONYMOUS (talk_whisper_unsure)
Well before I let you go, add my snapchat: Bnmfxo
@MS ANONYMOUS is wave_extreme
}

INT. BLACK - NIGHT
NARRATOR
To be continued…


#2

You have an extra ending bracket between the Snapchat and music off.

Get rid of this whole section:
}
music off
INT. BLACK - NIGHT
NARRATOR


#3

Also be careful about doing short pilot chapters. You want to get a reader hooked, and a short chapter won’t do that.


#4

Thank you for the advice/feedback. I will make it longer :slight_smile: bc I myself, hate it when chapters are short so yeah i will make it longer! :slight_smile:


#5

you’re literally a life saver, tysm


#6

Glad you found the help you needed, closing thread! :v:t2:


#7