Hey I would love to do a R4R with some people who want honest feedback about their stories! Not sugar coated, or I might hurt your feelings, A REAL HONEST R4R I mean how will we improve if we just say “Aww babez that was real sweet”, when we are actually thinking " OMG you published it and you can’t get there, their and they’re right?"
Title: Elements
Genre: Fantasy, Romance
Style: Limelight
Chapters: 3 and more coming
Description: You are a troubled teen, who decided to use detention as an experiment class. Now you and your “friends” have super powers? Water, Fire, Earth and Thunder - with Love interests, Mini games and CC
Author: Em
This is not a R4R for the weak hearted!
So if you want help and someone to actually tell you what they think, then send me your link
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Why not? Here’s my link. Let me know when you start and I’ll start yours and send SS here.
Story: Dare to Kiss!
Author TamiRose
Style: LL
Genre Romance/Comedy
Description Neoni, independently strong, confident and all about her business. But, that all changes when a nosy spy unnecessarily enters her life. Will she get rid of him or fall in love?
I’d love to do r4r with you. We can give each other some constructive criticism to improve our stories!
Title: Eat Your Heart Out
Author name: F/N
Description: Wishing for an angel to disentangle your life takes a strange turn when an unholy creature appears. Will the love of the enigmatic detective or the lust for a fierce vampire?
Style: Limelight
Episodes: 4 (Ongoing)
Link to story: http://episodeinteractive.com/s/5898407973683200
Additional notes: CC, Choices matter, LL.
Instagram: @fnepisode
If you want a proofreader I would be happy to help! I’ll send feedback by Saturday (so if you’re in U.S.A America then I mean Friday). @EmStar I don’t have a published story yet but I’d love to help you with yours.
First of all you’ve got 301 reads that’s impressive and I like the idea of your story I will give you my honest feed back because I believe it’s more helpful and also I am not perfect either which is why I am doing this
This sentence doesn’t really make sense…
it should be written like this
“This isn’t blood, I accidentally dropped ketchup on my self” or something like that.
Break up the speech bubble, in my opinion it kills the story, because instead of being in a flow with the story you have to stop. But that is just my opinion.
How did you flip the room and camera angle? I really like that. And also the gained a point, how did you do that? I find the “if “ “else” things really confusing.
Like I said, this isn’t sugar coated feedback this is my honest opinion. So don’t feel upset or discouraged, you’ve done well
I’m just bored of having to read stories for views and they have no rhythm and boring to read.
But I liked yours and wanted to read more
I don’t understand their friendship, like they are horrible to each other lol
I like your directing of this story and the overlays and your grammar is good … but I felt like the story was a bit slow for me, but that’s my opinion and you’ve got 260 people that have read it and think differently so I hope you don’t take it too personally
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