Hey, I have some feedback for the first couple of chapters. Really intriguing story!
First of all, I loved how the police officers came up with the theories about the murder! Your story shined the most during the crime investigation scenes for sure,
One directing critique I have is that you should place characters immediately before panning to another zone. I noticed that a lot of your characters pop up randomly on screen, and this helps you avoid that.
The grammar was pretty good! I didn’t see any errors, and the sentences were pretty well-structured.