I’m from the U.S. My name is actually Amaris lol but decided to take off the A since people have a harder time pronouncing it.
And thank you!
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- Story title: Pregnant by the bad pregnant robot(?)
- Genre: Comedy
- Story description: Love , laughter and drama collide in this wacky adventure with little life lessons along the way. Will the ships survive? Or will you fail to take the crazy? (the plot is memes)
- Your Instagram @somekid.episode
- Your Episode user: Some kid
- Story cover:
- Link to your story:
http://episodeinteractive.com/s/5368334378139648
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Nice story, good cover.
- good directing
- good coding
- proper intro
- proper outro
- animations
- good lenght
- backgrounds
- CC
- nice theme
On the down side
Summary
I would point out 2 things that always bother my from story to story.
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bombarting readers with punch of CC -> CC of the main characters is ok but i recommend moving the CC of thise 2 LI’s to the actual point where they are introduced -> makes things more natural and to be honest gives unexpected excitement.
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bombarting readers with many characters and their descriptions -> this should be done step by step and interactivly -> too much information leads readers to remember non of this new info, to be honest I also don’t really remember any of their age or who they were… i just remember they were a band -> just try to avoid bringing in too many characters at once
And that’s it. Just a few things to take in consideration.
Overall it’s a nice story and I will recommend it on my IG @episode.merlin
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On the good side
- nice intro
- backgrounds
- animations
- lenght
- directing
- good outro
On the down side
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thank you for this! i will def take it into consideration! thank you!
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The looping background is supposed to be that way and those speech bubbles have text effects. I’ll go through another run-through for matching speech bubbles.
I’m fine with how I started, Action does not have to be thrown in the readers face is how I see it. I actually wanted it to start off with a normal "slice of life with Rossabelle as a young adult and let the chaos descend afterward.
Thank you for the review, sorry it didn’t pique your interest.
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Hi love! Do you also review unpublished stories? 
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Yes of course 
Nice one
- good intro
- really nice usage of overlays
- advanced directing
- good theme
- nice story
- good lenght
- backgriunds
- animations
- diversity
- funny
Overall
Summary
- There were some weirdly fast entering/exiting tge scenes but it didn’t bother me.
- weak cliffhanger and no proper outro
I’m gonna recommend the story on my IG account @episode.merlin
Good
On the positive side
- nice intro
- advanced coding
- good usage of overlays
- CC
- good lenght
- backgrounds
- diversity
- sexuality options
- animations
- good cliffhanger
On the down side
Summary
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the beginning seemed endless -> it took so much time to read all the explenations, CC and choices -> some of it can easily be removed because we can already read it from the story description
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speechbubble issues -> wrong placement, covering faces
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choices matter but there are no actual choices except the choosing sexuality
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thank you so much!!!
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Would love to get a review from you! 
Story title: Scarlet Rose
Genre: Fantasy
Story description: For 16 years, you are locked away from the world to hide your powers. What happens when you escape? Not every fairytale has a happy ending - will yours?
Your Instagram @: @charlotte.episodes
Your Episode user: Charlotte
Story cover:
Link to your story: https://episodeinteractive.com/s/5027860695023616
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Thank you so much! I’ll be sure to work on your critiques.
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Real nice one
You have it all
- good intros
- nice beginning
- nice theme
- advanced directing
- advanced coding
- CC at the right time (not bombarting the readers)
- choices
- point system
- diversity
- good story idea
- backgrounds
- good usage of overlays
- proper cliffhanger
- good outro
I would definitely continue reading this story
But …
Summary
- the chapter was suuuuuper long -> it took me 33 minutes to finish it and to be honest I speed tapped in some parts after already reading it for 20 min. This is something you seriously have to consider. Keep the chapters between 13-15 minutes long.
Luckily your story is really good and hopefully people won’t start to question the lenght but we also have to think that the readers may not have the 1,6h to spend on 3 chapters.
Are the rest of the chapters as long as the first one or…?
I would really like to read more but as a working grown up I really don’t have the time for longer chapters. I truly hope you’ll continue writing though, because this story is really going somewhere.
Please take apart as many contest as you can and promote your story everywhere.
Overall, I’m gonna recommend your story on my IG account @episode.merlin
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Hi,
I’d love to hear your thoughts on my story.
Title: Godless
Author: Daisysford (Instagram @daisysford)
Description: A strange planet, a sexy Captain and a risky mission. What could go wrong? Disaster strikes and trouble follows you wherever you go. Can you survive?
Choices Matter//CC//LL
Genre: Action (Sci Fi)
CC: Yes
Number of Chapters: 4
Link: http://episodeinteractive.com/s/6103254762192896
New Title Cover
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Thank you soso much for your thorough review and detail 
I honestly appreciate it so much! And yes I think you bring up a really good point about the story length 
that’s definitely something I need to work on! the next two chapters are shorter but from when I timed it, I believe the length will still be 20 +/- 5 minutes 
thank you for spending your time and energy on this and it really does encourage and inspire me 
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Definitely continue with this story
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Good one
- nice intro
- good story idea
- advanced directing
- point system
- backgrounds
- good lenght
- nice usage of overlays
- animations
- choices
- nice cover
- good outro
I’m definitely gonna recommend this story on my IG account @episode.merlin
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Story name Beguile
Genre romance drama
Username @Sunshineepisode
Description: She an exotic dancer, she has feelings for no man until she encounters an irresistibly hot, sexy “gold digger” who wants her. Can she resist?
Story title: Vias Vitae | Limelight
Genre: Drama
Story description: June will meet a rich boy and find herself between him and her beloved boyfriend. “A criminal world” vs "an intrigue world of the rich. It’s up to you where it comes to an end.
Instagram: @viasvitae
Episode user: Charline K.
Story cover:
Link: http://episodeinteractive.com/s/5691832169201664
Thanks for the chance to ask for a review.
I really appreciate that you take the time to do some reviews. <3
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