My First Story! Please read!

Hi!!! I just published my first story, would love some feedback on the first 3 chapters!
Title: Finding Happiness
Author: Yasmine.Rose (me)
Genre: Romance/Drama
Style: Limelight
Episodes: 3 and more coming soon
Description: Star is a nurse in an abusive relationship with Oliver. What happens when she falls for one of her patients. Will he help her escape Oliver?
(The characters are customizable but their names aren’t. )


I’ll check it out :slight_smile:

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Okay, I didn’t know, Thanks for telling me :blush:

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I’ll read it, it looks interesting :smile:

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I’ll check it out, but I was thinking about the description of it is very similar to loads of other stories I’ve looked at. I’m not recommending changing the description, maybe just the wording?
So, instead of
“What happens when she falls for one of her patients. Will he help her escape Oliver?”
Maybe something along the lines of
“When she falls for one of her patients, will he help her escape?”
I know it looks nearly exactly the same, but at the same time it is shorter and doesn’t use the “What happens when…” that I’ve seen so many times

That’s just an idea, you can ignore this if you like :slight_smile:

Thank you! That actually does sound better :smile:

Happy to help :blush:

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