My new story (jackpot)


#1

I just published a story.
Please read It and tell my what you think.

  • Name : JACKPOT
  • Genre : Mystery,Action,Romantic
  • Description : Your life changes when you inherit the number one casino from your gradpnfather.Will you save a casino or will you givi it to your brother. (CC) (Choice matters) Two endings.
    Episode 4 coming out very soom.

I think almost every person on this forum helped me with this story.Thank you for that.(At the end of epsode 2 you will see credits,find your name there.

2cf8f9499816de6367279b3d89b5a8a9f2dfec70_1_690x384


MY NEW STORY (Limelight)
Read my story,new
New story,by new writer
REVIEW MY STORY,tell me what you think
#2

I will Read it!


#3

Omg its really Cool!
There are some Problems:
• The Character Layers
• Wrong English-Spelling

Hope this will help you make the Story better!

AND Yes i will continue reading!


#4

Yeah I know about spelling,but I’m not from English-speaking country and It’s hard to write a whole story without some “errors” I will definitely try to make.it better.
Also can you tell me where is the layering promblem,so.I can fix it?


#5

About the Layer Problem:
At the Beginning of the Scene, where Rose was dancing with Peoples I saw errors.


#6

Thank you for telling me I will go fix that now


#7

No problem! :smile:


#8

Oh and Btw, I recommend using Audio/Sounds to make it even better!