I have this story I’m making called “How To Be a Failure 101” and I’m trying to look for a good description. I’m not sure if this works so I’m wondering if anyone has any ideas for it?
"Tanisha Callahan was “all-that” until after she graduated high school. Things went wrong after that. Will she be able to pick herself up, or continue to be a failure?"
Yes I like that but this is a suggestion
Tanisha Callahan was queen bee in high school. But when things go down heel after graduation. Will she always be a failure or can she pick up the pieces.
Thank you! I’ll see what I can do with this
I can see that this has already been addressed, but it may help to have another opinion on the matter, so here it is:
I honestly think that your original description doesn’t need to be changed too much. The only thing I would fix is the second sentence because it basically repeats what you said in the first. Instead, I think the middle sentence should serve a more transitional purpose to the third one. Kind of like:
“Tanisha Callahan was “all-that” until after she graduated high school. Now that her life has pushed her to her knees, will she be able to pick herself up, or continue to fail?”
Wow this is pretty great!! Thank you
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