Hey, I’ve read the first 3 chapters and I think that it’s a great story. I also like the characters a lot, but there are a few things that I’ve noticed.
-In chapter 1, there’s a small glitch, I think that one of the characters was supposed to do an animation, but the guy says the name of that animation instead.
-In chapter 2, the dark blue and the purple haired girl overlap each other.
These problems could be easily fixed by changing the code a little bit and shouldn’t be a big problem.
One thing that could be a problem however, is the fact that the chapters are really short. This could be really frustrating for people who spend their passes. If I’m really honest, I would reccomend to combine some chapters in 1 chapter.
But other than that, it’s a really good story! I’m definitely going to follow your story.