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#1

Hi! I’m Jill and I am an aspiring author myself, so I know how important a feedback is. So, if you need me to give a feedback on your story, I’m happy to help! Place your request here and I will like it to show you that I have received it. And then you will only have to STAY CALM AND WAIT FOR THE FEEDBACK)))

I do 2-3 reviews a week, so, no pressure, please! I will read no more than 3 chapters of your story. And then I will PM you the feedback!

Conditions:

  • If you want the review, please, follow me on Instagram @jill_popsicle

After you follow me, please, leave a request in this thread and I’ll be all over your story sooner or later :joy:


#2

Hey, welcome in the Episode Community

I would appreciate your feedback :slightly_smiling_face:

Titel: Wherever I go
Author: Alisha Sophie
Chapters: 9 (Ongoing)
Genre: Drama
Description: Mia and her twin brother Cody lost everything. They try to get their lives back on track, but it ens in a lot of heartache and drama. Will everything be all right in the end?
Instagram: episode.alishasophie
Link: http://episodeinteractive.com/s/4613203588415488


#3

Hi! Welcome the community you awesome Episode user! Feel free to check out this link: Official Tutorial/How-To for the Forums (V2) Also, good luck with your future stories xoxo. In addition, don’t stress over what your feedbacks should include-write them the way you want, you make the rules :wink:


#4

Hey, @Jill_Popsicle! Thank you creating this thread! I’d love some feedback on my story. Here are my story details:

Title: Fantastical: Silhouettes
Author: aprilish
Genre: Fantasy/Romance
Style: Ink
Blurb: Arion’s ready to risk it all to make her dreams come true. Leslie sees him every day, yet fails to recognize who he is. Watch them fall in love…without ever meeting each other.
Link: http://episodeinteractive.com/s/6116658762874880
My Instagram: @aprilish.episode

Thank you so much! Looking forward to hearing your feedback! :two_hearts:


#5

Hey, @Alisha.Sophie @JemU776 @aprilish
Thanks for the welcome! I’m excited to read your stories! I’ll write my feedback after I read a few chapters and get a feeling of the story. Till then! :wink:


#6

I am writing a new story, is this a good story line?
Summary: Hazel is an ordinary girl. One day she wakes up and she is supermodel Arielle. She thinks that it happened because of either this magic candy her younger sister gave her to eat and she wished to be Arielle as she ate it or either she was actually in a car accident and her brain which was still alive had to be transferred into Arielle’s body as everyone was telling her. Arielle can’t tell anyone or she will be killed. Hazel finds out Arielle used to be an early witch who was just learning. Hazel also has this mystery guy who she was talking to on an app find love. The mystery guy seems to know more than normal and knows that she has a surgery and now is Arielle. Arielle starts to learn witchcraft and modeling. She also joins her old high school in order to become friends with her close friend Travis. Arielle visits a fortune teller and the fortune teller tells her that there is no such thing as “magic candy” and laughs. However, the fortune teller takes into lots of consideration of how Arielle used to be an early witch. They say if you do a spell wrong it takes something from you. Later Hazel wants to meet the mystery guy who ended up being Travis. Travis knew she was his mystery girl all along. Travis says he knew everything because he is also a witch and did a spell to show the truth of what happened to Hazel and who killed her. Travis told her that Arielle performed a spell in order to be the golden angel model in the new years show but she did it wrong and she vanished. Hazel took over her body and Arielle’s soul was gone. Hazel needed to get Arielle back, she wanted her old life back. Hazel and Travis decide to be taken into the spirit world in order to get Arielle back. They tell Arielle’s witch friend Lily and Lily tells them a spell for it. They are in the spirit world and they have to find Arielle before time runs out and they will be separated from their body forever. They look for Arielle and there are a lot of creepy people and it’s like a maze of just dead people. They find Arielle in a mall with lots of clothes just chilling. Arielle sees them and smacks Hazel for taking her body. Hazel gets mad and says it’s all her fault for messing up the spell. They need to make it out before time runs out. They make it out finally and Hazel returns in her body and so does Arielle. Arielle thanks them and Hazel is happy to be herself again. Her and Travis fall in love.

This is basically a short version of what happens. The way I direct and reveal things will add more effect to the plot. Also there are many little things that I will include in the story.


#7

Hi, welcome! I would love a review for my story! It would be very helpful to have a review on the first few episodes of my story! Thanks!
Name: Girl of Deception
Author: IDONTKNOW
Genre: Adventure
Description: Aria Lamar has it all. She’s rich beautiful and successful. She’s also an selfish, arrogant jerk. Little does she know that’s all about to change.
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8 episodes
Link: http://episodeinteractive.com/s/5855942598328320


Thank you so much for you time and honesty!


#8

Can I request feedback on my first story?

Title: Projection!
Author: Karlon Artis
Genre: Comedy
Style: Limelight
Description: Harry Stevens is looking for his big break in the world of musical theatre. But what will it take to get there?
Link: http://episodeinteractive.com/s/6046875219918848


#9

Hi Jill!
This is the beginning of my first story, and I’d be really grateful if you could reply with some feedback! There’s only one chapter so far, I’m working on the second one! I just want to see if it’s something people are going to want to read :slight_smile:


#10

Some update: I am very glad you all sent me your requests. I’ll try to do 3-4 reviews a week. I’ll like your message as I receive it. I’ll be able to review the first three chapters and then I’ll PM you my honest feedback. I have finished the first feedback today. So, I’ll start reading the next story in the next few days! Thank you all for patience!


#11

Hi! Thank for creating this thread!
My story : Let the demon inside


Genre: Supernatural romance
Description: You have to move back to Dimwood. What will you find there? Love, death or supernatural friends?
Link: http://episodeinteractive.com/s/4876381520789504


#12

Hi there!

I would love for you to read and give feedback on my story.

my instagram is @sg_episode if you would like to follow me.

‘A Brush with Love’
Sophie, a make-up artist from the UK, moves to LA after landing a role working on hit LA TV show ‘Starstruck’. A change of plan on her first day catapults her into the life of Ben Holden, one of the shows actors.

thank you so much - happy to be patient!


#13

Hi, my name is Dani!
Here’s my story:
Title: Darkness
Author: Dani
Style: Ink
Description: If you can’t get away from darkness, you learn to live with it… A vampire story with action, adventure, mystery and, of course, romance!
This is not a cliche vampire story!
Episodes: 12 (more to come)
Link: http://episodeinteractive.com/s/5439290271858688
Instagram: daniepisodewriter

I hope you like it :black_heart:


#14

AN IMPORTANT UPDATE!!!

Hi! I’m Jill and I am an aspiring author myself, so I know how important a feedback is. So, if you need me to give a feedback on your story, I’m happy to help! Place your request here and I will like it to show you that I have received it. And then you will only have to STAY CALM AND WAIT FOR THE FEEDBACK)))

I do 2-3 reviews a week, so, no pressure, please! I will read no more than 3 chapters of your story. And then I will PM you the feedback!

Conditions:

If you want the review, please, follow me on Instagram @jill_popsicle

After you follow me, please, leave a request in this thread and I’ll be all over your story sooner or later :joy:

@IDONTKNOWREAL @kahotshot @carleebby @Nierido @SG38 @daniepisodewriter


#15

@IDONTKNOWREAL
I have finished 2 reviews already, your story is up next)


#16

Followed:)


#17

I just followed! It’s Jill_popsicle not Jill.popsicle, right? :slight_smile:️:grin:


#18

I’ve just followed :slight_smile: