Need a proofreader for 2 chapters of a story

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So I just completed 2 chapters of my story, and I would really appreciate if someone could proofread them and tell me if there’s anything missing or any errors as the coding was complicated. (Advanced choices, if else, etc.)
I’m a 17 yo new author so It’s difficult for me to manage time and school. (Tho I tried.)

So I’m afraid if it’s too short or a good length? I really struggle with finding the perfect length tbh.

Story name: Like Me Back

Description: No one you’ve ever liked, has liked you back the same way. But will the arrival of a seemingly perfect stranger change everything, if not nothing?
(M/F Love interest, Choices matter, Customisation for MC and LI)

Here’s the link: (hope you like it)

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So I’ve read the first chapter now and it’s amazing! The length is perfect or at least for me. I’ve only found two spelling faults.
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It should be: You really have drank way too much haven’t you?
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And this should be: I just drank two glasses of wine and started feeling like this.

Now I’m going to read the next part

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And the second chapter is really good too!
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Only here it should be: Then why did you save me, Romeo?

Good job in writing!

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AAH thank you so much you’re really a lifesaver!! :sob::heart: I’m so relieved that the length was fine aaah.

I’m so grateful thanks!! (Also I love your customisation of colette!)

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Thank you! Tho the part you mentioned was intentionally written like that (in shakespearan english lol) :rofl:

Im so happy you read it :pleading_face::heart: thank you so much for your help!!

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Yeah I thought so but wasn’t sure… My bad!

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No problem haha! Btw was the length of the second chapter ok? I coded it much quicker than the first one so I’m a bit unsure.

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Yeah you don’t have to make all chapters very long cause I know how much time it takes-

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Moved to Share Feedback since you’re looking for proofreading. Make sure to check out our Forum Tutorial for more info about creating topics, and feel free to PM me if you’ve got questions. :smiley:

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Omg yeah😭 it’s so stressful haha!! I really appreciated ur feedback btw🥺

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Correct way: You really have drunk way too much, haven’t you?

Sorry, just had to say it :sweat_smile:

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Oh sorry- English is not my first language if you didn’t know that already. ( ˘･з･)

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Oh yeah I was wondering so too! As drunk is usually preceded by “have” and drank isn’t. Thanks for clearing the confusion!

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Thanks still for your help​:heart::heart:

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