Need help continuing my story

I have a story started and I need help continuing it if anyone is will to help I will send you what I have and if you have any ideas that would make it better are just how to get to the end it would help a lot I know where I want it to go it’s getting there is the problem I’m having plz reply

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Change the topic to Writing Partner that would help for people to notice this topic!

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I could help you by giving you some ideas based on what you’ve worked on!

Ok well the story is call my vampire lover it mite be easier for you to read it on episodes because I have 4 chapters done and trying to figure out the 5th and its a lot to explain my name on episode is Care Bear and its my only story

Okay, I’ll make sure to check it out!

ok

let me know what you think?

Okay… I’ve read through chapters 1-4. What would you like me to advise/help you with?

this is what I have so far for the 5 th episode
INT. BLACK - NIGHT
CARE BEAR
Hey guys I know I haven’t wrote in a while I had to wait for my laptop to come in but now I’m back and I will be writing on this account from now on so as always I hope you enjoy.

INT. GHAMALI BEDROOM - DAY

@JENNA changes into pjs

@JENNA enters from right to screen center

label outfits

    JENNA (think)
(What do I want to ware?)

choice “school outfit 4” {

@JENNA changes into school outfit 4

    JENNA (think)
(Do I want to ware this)

} “school outfit 5” {

@JENNA changes into school outfit 5

    JENNA (think)
(Do I want to ware this)

} “school outfit 6”{

@JENNA changes into school outfit 6

    JENNA (think)
(Do I want to ware this)

}

    NARRATOR
Are you sure you want to ware this?

choice “yes” {

    JENNA (think)
(Ya lets go)

goto next
} “no” {

    JENNA (think)
(I want to try something else)

goto outfits
}

@JENNA exits left

label next

EXT. HIGH SCHOOL EXTERIOR - DAY

@JENNA enters from left to screen left

    JENNA (talk_call_out)
Jessie I have to tell you something come here

@JESSIE enters from right to screen right

    JESSIE (talk_forward)
Hey Jenna whats up you seem really happy.

    JENNA (talk_excited)
Well I am I know how I'm going to tell him.

    JESSIE (talk_reassure)
Really thats good when are you going to tell him?

    JENNA (talk_forward)
Later today after school we are supposed to hang out today.

    JESSIE (talk_unsure)
You sure thats a good idea?

    JENNA (talk_reassure)
Ya I don't see why it wouldn't be a good idea we are just going to his house to watch a movie or something.

    JESSIE (talk_forward)
If you say so good luck.

    JENNA (talk_forward)
Thanks so I'll see you later?

    JESSIE (talk_forward)
Of course see you later.

@JENNA exits right AND JESSIE exits right

INT. CLASSROOM DESK - DAY

@JENNA enters from left to screen left AND ALXE stands screen right

@ALXE faces left

    ALXE (talk_forward)
Hey babe how are you today?

    JENNA (talk_forward)
Fine so are we still hanging out later?

    ALXE (talk_forward)
Ya if you still want to that is. Do you?

    JENNA (talk_forward)
Yes I do.

    JENNA (think)
(Even tho we have to talk)

INT. BLACK - NIGHT

    NARRATOR
After school.

EXT. HIGH SCHOOL EXTERIOR - DAY

@JENNA enters from right to screen left AND ALXE enters from right to screen right

@JENNA faces right

    JENNA (talk_forward)
Alxe you ready to go?

    ALXE (talk_forward)
Ya lets get going

@JENNA exits left AND ALXE exits left

INT. SIMPLE LIVING ROOM - DAY

@cut to zone 2

@ALXE enters from left to screen right AND JENNA enters from left to screen left

@ALXE faces left

    JENNA (talk_awkward)
Alxe can we talk about something important?

    ALXE (talk_forward)
Ok what's up babe?

    JENNA (talk_unsure)
Well the thing is I think we should break up because I think my feelings for you have changed and I would still like it if you and me could still be friends.

    JENNA (talk_unsure)
I hate that I'm hurting you but I feel like if I wasn't honest about my feelings it would hurt you a lot more if it went on any longer so I hope you understand.

    JENNA (talk_unsure)
I hope you can still be friends with me because even tho we're not together anymore I will still always be there for you as a friend and I hope you will be there for me as well.

    ALXE (talk_sad)
I understand but can you tell me will there ever be a chance for us again?

    JENNA (talk_sad)
I'm sorry but no I wish there was but my feelings have change and I hope you find someone who deserves you.

    JENNA (talk_sad)
I just hope you will still be there for me because I will always be here for you and I will always care about you and I will understand if you don't want to.

@ALXE faces right

    ALXE (talk_sad)
We will have to see what happens I need some time to think about all this I will see you at school on Monday.

    JENNA (talk_sad)
Ok bye and again I'm sorry.

    ALXE (talk_sad)
Bye.

@JENNA exits left

    ALXE (cry_sob_loop)
(I will miss you so much)

INT. CLASSIC LIVING ROOM - DAY

@JENNA enters from left to screen left

    NARRATOR
Ring Ring

    JENNA (idle_phone_hold)
It's Chris

    JENNA (talk_phone_excited_loop)
Hey Chris whats up?

INT. FANCY LIVING ROOM - NIGHT

    CHRISTOPH (talk_phone_happy_loop)
How did everything go?

INT. CLASSIC LIVING ROOM - DAY

    JENNA (talk_phone_sad_loop)
It was hard but I did what I had to do.

INT. FANCY LIVING ROOM - NIGHT

    CHRISTOPH (talk_phone_neutral_loop)
Are you ok?

INT. CLASSIC LIVING ROOM - DAY

    JENNA (talk_phone_happy_loop)
Ya I'm fine am I still coming over

INT. FANCY LIVING ROOM - NIGHT

    CHRISTOPH (talk_phone_neutral_loop)
Sure if you want I can pick you up.

INT. CLASSIC LIVING ROOM - DAY

    JENNA (talk_phone_happy_loop)
Sure why not I don't have school tomorrow but I have to leave my mom a note

INT. FANCY LIVING ROOM - NIGHT

    CHRISTOPH (talk_phone_neutral_loop)
Ok I'll be there 30 see you soon.

INT. CLASSIC LIVING ROOM - DAY

    JENNA (talk_phone_happy_loop)
Ok see you soon

@JENNA exits right

INT. GHAMALI BEDROOM - DAY

@JENNA enters from left to screen left

label sexy

    NARRATOR
What do you want to ware

choice “red” {

@JENNA changes into red

} “pink” {

@JENNA changes into pink

}

    NARRATOR
Are you sure this is what you want to ware

choice “yes” {

    JENNA (think)
(I'm ready let's go)

goto alxe

} “no” {

    JENNA (think)
(I want to try something else)

goto sexy

}

label alxe

@JENNA exits left

INT. CLASSIC LIVING ROOM - DAY

@JENNA enters from right to screen center

    JENNA (write_notepad)
(Mom be back later if not I will call)

@JENNA exits left

EXT. PHILADELPHIA HOUSE - NIGHT

@JENNA enters from right to screen right AND CHRISTOPH stands screen left

@CHRISTOPH faces right

    JENNA (talk_flirt)
Hey handsome.

    CHRISTOPH (talk_flirt)
Hey beautiful.

    CHRISTOPH (talk_forward)
You ready to go?

    JENNA (talk_forward)
Ya lets go

@CHRISTOPH exits left AND JENNA exits left

INT. FANCY LIVING ROOM - NIGHT

@CHRISTOPH enters from left to screen right AND JENNA enters from left to screen left

and I don’t know where to go from there

Maybe you could continue with a scene of Axle in a bar or something like that (maybe partying with his friends) but he’s still upset. And he sees Jenna with Christoph outside. Or… you could flip the situation and Jenna meets up with Christoph for a dinner and then at the end of the dinner they say goodbye, Christoph gives Jenna a kiss on the kiss and they say goodbye BUT Axle is inside a bar and sees them from inside.

That’s actually a really good idea thank you so much we should write a story together some time like over e-mail or something let me know if you interested

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