Need help with extra lines

I have this scene here and I feel it goes to fast. anyone who could help me add more to it

the story if anyone wonder

Summary

INT. LA SUSHI RESTAURANT - NIGHT with TABLE CHINESE to 1.037 -5 44 in zone 3
@cut to zone 3
@overlay TABLE CHINESE moves to layer 20
@WADE spot 0.667 45 210 in zone 3 AND WALTER spot 0.667 137 210 in zone 3 AND MR LORATO spot 0.667 256 210 in zone 3 AND YURI spot 0.704 199 260 in zone 3 AND JANE spot 0.703 -49 269 in zone 3
@WADE faces right AND WALTER faces right
@YURI moves to layer 0 AND WALTER moves to layer 2 AND WADE moves to layer 3 AND MR LORATO moves to layer 4 AND JANE moves to layer 1
@overlay TABLE CHINESE moves to layer 5
@YURI walks to spot 0.612 -74 281 in 3
@zoom on 960 242 to 324% in 0
MR LORATO (talk_gossip)
So how is it going in school Wade

@zoom on 652 242 to 324% in 0
WADE (talk_happy_agree)
Alright, Uncle

    WADE (talk_happy_hand_raised)
We are getting ready for summer vacation

@zoom on 960 242 to 324% in 0
MR LORATO (talk_happy_smile)
Are you going on camp this year

@zoom on 652 242 to 324% in 0
WADE (talk_shrug)
No i am to old for that.

    WADE (talk_sheepish)
Also there is mom's wedding.

@zoom on 770 231 to 324% in 0
@WALTER faces left
WALTER (talk_arms_crossed)
Has she turn full bridezilla yet

@zoom on 652 242 to 324% in 0
&JANE walks to spot 0.703 197 243 in 2
WADE (talk_awkward)
No, but Billie has

@pause for a beat
@zoom reset
@WALTER faces right
&WALTER is arms_crossed AND WADE is blush AND MR LORATO is laugh_crack_up
JANE (talk_afraid)
Exusme me, are you Don Lorato

@zoom on 931 262 to 503% in 0
&JANE is idle
MR LORATO (talk_neutral)
Yes can i help you miss

    MR LORATO (idle_awkward)
(why does she seem so familar)

@zoom on 682 225 to 239% in 0
&WALTER is think_loop
WADE (think)
(isnt she the girl who asked about sushi)

@zoom on 855 325 to 445% in 0
JANE (talk_awkward)
My name is [JANE] [LAST]

@zoom on 936 287 to 445% in 0
MR LORATO (talk_repulsed)
Did you just say [JANE]
(That name- that is why is familar)

&JANE is deepbreath

@zoom on 862 331 to 445% in 0
&MR LORATO is idle
JANE (talk_afraid)
Yeah you knew my mom [MOM] [LAST]

@zoom on 934 273 to 445% in 0
&WADE is shush
MR LORATO (talk_think)
I dont think i know anyone with that name

@zoom on 859 320 to 464% in 0
JANE (talk_sheepish)
No you knew her as [JANE] justice

@zoom on 944 265 to 464% in 0
MR LORATO (shocked)
(what the actual hell)

       MR LORATO (blush)
(I admit the similarity is amazing )

(Is Walter pulling a joke on me?,)

@zoom on 675 238 to 210% in 0
&WALTER is idle_jawdrop
WADE
( I have no idea what is going on)

@zoom on 939 266 to 221% in 0
@MR LORATO spot 0.698 265 245
@MR LORATO is stand_up
@MR LORATO is applaud_loop
MR LORATO (talk_happy_hands_open)
Okay Walter very funny you had me, good joke

@zoom on 675 238 to 193% in 0
WALTER (talk_neutral_deny)
I am not behind this

@zoom on 851 331 to 445% in 0
&MR LORATO is idle
JANE (talk_scared_flashlight)
I am not jokeing

@zoom on 933 324 to 445% in 0
MR LORATO (talk_angry_accuse)
Listen here girl, [JANE] Justice has been dead in 16 years

@zoom on 840 359 to 445% in 0
JANE (talk_sheepish)
Well actually she is kinda alive

    JANE (talk_sad_loop)
Also she was an undercover agent

@zoom on 950 324 to 445% in 0
MR LORATO (talk_startled)
You are speaking gibarice
@zoom on 675 238 to 193% in 0
WALTER (talk_angry_arms_crossed)
I think you should leave miss

@zoom on 849 328 to 582% in 0
&WADE is startled_surprised AND WALTER is talk_confused_mind_blown AND MR LORATO is idle_jawdrop
JANE (scream)
YOU ARE MY DAD!!!

@zoom on 787 255 to 520% in 0
@pause for a beat
@zoom on 673 245 to 520% in 0
@JANE is flirt_fingersnap
@zoom on 919 327 to 520% in 0
@pause for a beat

@zoom on 849 328 to 582% in 0
JANE
(Why the hell did i scream)
@add Knife Clean to YURI

&YURI spot 0.390 46 319
@zoom on 921 328 to 582% in 0
MR LORATO (talk_angry)
Listen i do not find this funny
&zoom on 902 338 to 211% in 1
&JANE walks to spot 0.613 201 289 in 1 AND MR LORATO walks to spot 0.638 242 278 in 1 AND JANE is walk_scared AND MR LORATO is walk_rear AND WALTER walks to spot 0.667 100 209 in 1 AND MR LORATO faces right AND JANE faces right
@pause for 1

@YURI moves to layer 3 AND JANE moves to layer 2
&overlay TRAY create
@overlay 5973885830823936_TRAY shifts to 19 198 in zone 3
@overlay 5973885830823936_TRAY scales to 0.164 0.164 in zone 3
@overlay TRAY opacity 1 in 0
@overlay TRAY moves to layer 8
@overlay TABLE CHINESE moves to layer 9
&YURI walks to spot 0.589 154 298 in 3 AND YURI is walk_neutral AND JANE is idle_terrified AND MR LORATO is rear
&overlay 5973885830823936_TRAY shifts to 128 228 in zone 3 in 3
@overlay 5973885830823936_TRAY scales to 0.164 0.164 in zone 3 in 3

@remove Knife Clean from YURI
@remove overlay TRAY
@add Knife Bloody to YURI
&overlay OPENTRAY create
@overlay 5973885830823936_OPENTRAY shifts to 126 231 in zone 3
@overlay 5973885830823936_OPENTRAY scales to 0.165 0.165 in zone 3
@overlay OPENTRAY opacity 1 in 0
@pause for 0.1
&YURI is startled_surprised AND MR LORATO is mortified AND JANE is slap_face_receive
&overlay 5973885830823936_OPENTRAY shifts to 167 133 in zone 3 in 2
@overlay 5973885830823936_OPENTRAY scales to 0.165 0.165 in zone 3 in 2
@MR LORATO faces left AND JANE faces left

    YURI (talk_startled)
I am so sorry

@overlay REDBLOOD create
@overlay 5973885830823936_REDBLOOD shifts to 210 237 in zone 3
@overlay 5973885830823936_REDBLOOD scales to 0.043 0.043 in zone 3
@overlay REDBLOOD opacity 1 in 0

&JANE is idle
YURI (talk_unsure)
Oh no your are bleading

&overlay NAPKIN create
@overlay 5973885830823936_NAPKIN shifts to 227 217 in zone 3
@overlay 5973885830823936_NAPKIN scales to 0.127 0.127 in zone 3
@overlay NAPKIN opacity 1 in 0
@MR LORATO spot 0.638 261 276
@zoom on 871 256 to 626% in 0
@pause for 0.1
&overlay NAPKIN shifts to 208 233 in zone 3 in 0.7
&overlay NAPKIN scales to 0.127 0.127 in zone 3 in 0.7
MR LORATO (admire)
Here i have a napkin

@remove overlay REDBLOOD
@remove overlay NAPKIN
@zoom on 902 338 to 211% in 0

@JANE moves to layer 4
@JANE walks to spot 0.433 82 379 in 1 AND JANE is run_cry AND MR LORATO is idle_awkward
@pause for a beat
@pause for a beat
@zoom on 878 220 to 893% in 0
&MR LORATO is idle_jawdrop
&overlay BLOOD PAPER create
@overlay 5973885830823936_BLOOD PAPER shifts to 215 212 in zone 3
@overlay 5973885830823936_BLOOD PAPER scales to 0.141 0.141 in zone 3
@overlay BLOOD PAPER opacity 1 in 0
@pause for a beat

Before this have Mr.larato (sorry idk how to spell his name) say this

MR.LARATO (arms_crossed_angry)
What!!!
What do you mean she’s alive?
And how the actual hell do you know this?

After it says she was an undercover agent say this

MR.LORATO
Where are you getting this information from and why are you telling me this?

JANE (idle_awkward)
add a plotwist try something like this
I-
I read her diary.
I’m so sorry, I didn’t mean to invade her privacy.
But IM YOUR DAUGHTER

MR.LORATO (idle_shush)

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thanks ill add some of those

Np let me know if you need more help and I’ll try and come up with some lines

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