Need help with my 1st chapter 🙂

As in the title - my story already has some views and I’ve been writing it since January/February (I’m writing 11th chapter now).
I already changed the 1st chapter once, but… I still don’t know how to rewrite it to make it more interesting 🤷
The story is fantasy and the first chapter is just a description of the world and an introduction to the MC story.

I’m looking for someone who would be willing to read chapter 1, maybe give some ideas for a rewrite?
Criticism welcome, without pointing out the mistakes I won’t know where they are and how to correct them :blush:

Story link:


u still need help?


I’d love to, once I get the time I’ll PM you everything I find out! :white_heart: :+1:t3:


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