Story review for @chelliebelliex
Story title: Among the Stars by Chelsea Alexis
Covers and art were amazing. I really enjoyed intro as well. Only error I saw was placing speech bubble with number of chapter in the wrong place at the end of episode. (End od Chapter one… thanks for reading at the end of chapter), so have a look at that.
When it comes to directing everything was smooth and perfect. I love how you use overlays and zooms. I didn’t spot any mistake when it comes to spot directing either.
I did spot one spelling mistake in e1. It was during MCs dialogue with grandma when grandma said Ive made breakfest, change e with a so you will have the right form: breakfast.
I love the idea of this story! It’s really unique and interesting. Character diversity was great as well, I really enjoyed meeting new characters with different back stories.
You used a lot of transitions and flashes, I understand that’s important for effect on readers and it was used really well, but I would put another warning in the beginning. It may be disturbing for someone so I would just warn them in advance
Chapters were too long. It’s great that you want to give us a lot of information but in my opinion it was too much.
What I enjoyed the most about your story were choices. Great job!
Overall rating: 9/10
I think this story( after fixing tiny errors) deserves so much more attention! I can see how hard author worked on this. Keep up the great job.