New authors post your story

New authors that post their story. I will read only the first episode and post a review.
I am sorry but my review can be a bit harsh.
Please don’t post your story if you don’t want a review

Moved to Share Feedback section as that’s where review threads live! Feel free to review this tutorial, it has a lot of info about where to organize posts on the forums :slight_smile:

I’m a first time author and would love to get some feedback. Here are the details of my story:
Title: H & V: Lie to me
Author: Alexandra Mar
Genre: Drama/Mystery with romantic subplots
Description: After only serving 3 years of a 25 to life sentence, Aiden Suarez is mysteriously released. But wait, what’s that? Oh right, “Aiden Suarez” no longer exists.

Plot - Your plot is really interesting, it is new and refreshing. I was able to connect to Aiden easily. I love the fact you used the first episode to explain his relationships with wife, mother and fake friends and connecting them all to the main plot.
All scenes were important, I enjoyed the first episode and I love it!!!
I saved it to my a favourite.
The cliffhanger at the end of episode one OMG!!!

Direction - You displayed excellent use of basic directing and average use of advanced directing. I noticed some wrong spotting like when Aiden’s mother fight hugged him. She was too big and he was so small, I was confused, I thought he was a dwarf not a child. I was confused with some of the directing’s tho.
You also expressed not only an excellent but impressive use of OVERLAY! KEEP it up!

Choices- You gave more than enough!!! 10/10

Grammar/ Spelling - I didn’t notice any tho.

Comment- Your storyline is impressive and I must say you are not just a first time author but you showed that your story isn’t 48 hours work.
The hard work and effort is obvious!

I love the fact that the main character is a man and I was sad when i found out the mother dead. May her soul rest in peace!

Keep going and don’t let limited reads or anything stop you!!!
You story was good!

Free free to check out my story, I am also a first time Author

Title- Retaliation

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Thank you so much for taking the time to read it and write this thoughtful review. I really appreacite it! I will take into consideration your notes and work on my directing :blush:
I just finished reading the first chapter of your story, I’ll PM you my thoughts.
Once again, thank you so much for your review. Even though the lack of reads can sometimes be disheartening, I know that nothing comes for free. I need to work for more reads, and it is reviews like yours that help me identify the things that are working and the things that need to improve.

Title: New Life Experiences
Author: Sarah Todd
Episodes: 3 (Ongoing)
Genre: Drama
Description: Arielle is dealing with her parents divorce, and not in a good way. She is nothing but trouble lately. Can she pull herself together before she completely ruins herself and everyone around her?

I am still learning how to do the directing stuff and the choices, so if you any pointers, that would be great!

Hi, I would love a review on my new story!

Title: Reformed
Author: Cordelia M
Description: - Reformed bad girl falls in love with bad boy who reminds her of her past - cliche, right? But what if Violet isn’t truly reformed? What if she’s secretly still badder than Carter’s ever been?

Thank you! :yellow_heart:

Such a cool cover! I LOVE it!


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Hi, @youngblackboy!

Thank you very much for creating this thread, this is very kind of you! Constructive criticism is exactly what I am looking for!

If you are interested in reading a story with several mini-games and where CHOICES REALLY MATTER then, please, give my story a try. I promise, the story will keep you hooked :blush:

My story details:

Name of story: H & V: Fate
Author: Alex Af
Genre: Thriller
Episodes: 4 (completed)
Summary of story: Young ambitious journalist hunting down a powerful tycoon who has made a fortune based on lies. But who really is a villain here? Choices matter.
Link to story:

I love your cover😍

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Title: Stained love
Author: Micah
Description: Charlene is alone and pregnant with 2 sets of twins, the trouble is, each set of twins have a different father, one or both could be gay. Will she ever be with who she loves? LGTB.
Episode: 3

Hey! I’d love to have some feedback on the story :blush:

Title: Dear Evan
Author: BeatrizEpisode
Genre: Drama\Romance
Description: What happens when your boyfriend’s life is in your hands? Lies, danger, love, and betrayal, will you be able to survive all that? CC + Choices Matter


Author: E.Z.
Genre: Fantasy
Style: Ink
Chapters: 8 (on going)
Instagram: @e.z.episode
Description: He starved himself for three hundred years in order to abide by a woman’s promise. Everyone in Devildom is waiting for him to die.


Story: We will meet again.
Author: Stev1997
Style: Ink
Chapters: 5 (on going,)
Description: Veronica lives a dangerous life, with her demons. What will happen when her secrets get out? Can Luca help her? Will there be love or? You decide.
Drama is coming.
Genre: Drama/romance

Thank you for doing this!
Story - Beneath The Surface
Authors - Liv B and Aimee
Genre - Action
Chapters out - 2
Description - Being a FBI agent was always your passion, but there is a dark side to every dream. Secrets appear and it’s up to you to find the truth. Can you discover it and finally move on?

My story:


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