New Comedy Story-- Check it out!

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Hi everyone, read my new comedy story, and tell me what you think. I hope you enjoy it!

Title: The Last Adventure
Description: Desperate, Jocelyn requests the aid of the legendary Captain Harley & his crew of jumbled pirates. Follow their comedic adventure as they discover what true treasure means.
Episodes: 3 (more to come)


#2

I love your story description! It seems really unique! Reading Ep 1 right now, and I plan to continue, but I’ve got one piece of feedback-

there’s one narrator box that says “* sea gull call through the air *” I personally found this really awkward, and feel like you could describe it better by saying something like ‘The call of a seagull echoed through the air’ there’s also something similar with the cannon bit.

overall good job though! it’s interesting :slight_smile:


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