Hey there, I just came across this thread and thought your story sounded really interesting. I was not disappointed, it was amazing. I really love the attention to detail, like with how you flipped the overlays for incoming calls to make it look like characters were actually reading it. All the hologram effects looked amazing too, felt like an illusion 
My only critique was that I saw a few background characters with ashy lips, which you might want to change to make it look more natural and realistic, but other than that it was really amazing and I do hope you continue writing it 
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