saying sorry for it been bad. that is always a turn off. instead of saying sorry, wait with publishing and fix it instead, if you feel like you need to say sorry for your story its not ready to be publish
so author enterd the screen despite already been on it.
Cassidy and petra entered at the same time. aka walking up in each other. I recommend put a @pause for 0.2 between them entering. or better yet use spot directing
wow good friends who insult each other
I hate all the characters personality that is more of a personal preference and not a thing you should change, I dont like rude characters.
you gave me the choice to say no to the date but she is going anyway, remove that choice. because it’s not a choice. or at least make more of it . like the guy trying to say how about it not been a date, we could just hang out