Oof sorry so much questions in one day, but im trying to get this done,

qawaii-mandi · June 14, 2019, 4:15am

So I’m trying to put a choice in a choice but one of the choices for the choice in the choice is appearing in the choice that contains that choice. HALP.

The script:

TIDE (think_rubchin)
(Do I wanna go?)
choice
“Of course!”{
TIDE (idle_happy_loop)
(Of course!)

EXT. BOAT - DAY

    NARRATOR
At the party...

@TIDE changes into TIDE_outfit

@OLIVIA changes into OLIVIA_party

INT. CLUB - NIGHT

@cut to zone 2

@OLIVIA stands screen left in zone 2 and OLIVIA faces right and OLIVIA is dance_club_happy_loop

@TIDE enters from right to screen right

@TIDE is react_startled_surprised_pose

    TIDE (think_rubchin)
What should I say?

choice
“Hey Olivia… You look beautiful…” {

    TIDE (talk_sheepish_rubneck)
H-Hey Olivia... you look beautiful...

@OLIVIA is react_startled_surprised_pose

@TIDE is idle_awkward_uneasy_loop

@OLIVIA is blush_shy

@TIDE is react_startled_surprised_pose

@TIDE is blush_shy

@pause for a beat

    OLIVIA (talk_sheepish_rubneck)
Y-You too, Tide...

@pause for a beat

@TIDE is idle_happy_loop

    OLIVIA (talk_neutral_unsure)
Well, this is awkward... Lemme get some drinks!

@OLIVIA faces left and OLIVIA exits left

EXT. BOAT - DAY

    NARRATOR
After Olivia gets drinks...

INT. CLUB - NIGHT

@TIDE stands screen right and TIDE faces left and OLIVIA stands screen left and OLIVIA faces right
@add Cup Plastic Red to TIDE
@add Cup Plastic Red to OLIVIA
@TIDE is talk_cup_toast_happy and OLIVIA is talk_cup_toast_happy
@TIDE is sip_cup_neutral_loop and OLIVIA is sip_cup_neutral_loop
@OLIVIA is idle_cup_neutral_loop

    TIDE (talk_cup_neutral_loop)
Do you have any plans? Anything exciting at all?

@TIDE is idle_cup_neutral_loop

    OLIVIA (talk_cup_neutral_loop)
Yeah, some!

EXT. BOAT - DAY

    NARRATOR
After the party...

@TIDE changes into TIDE_bedclothes

INT. EURO HOTEL ROOM - NIGHT

@cut to zone 2

@TIDE stands upscreen right in zone 2

}

} “Hey Olivia!” {

    TIDE (talk_greet_neutral)
Hi Olivia!

    OLIVIA (talk_greet_neutral)
Hey Tide! Want some drinks? I'm thirsty.

    TIDE (talk_agree_happy)
Sure!

@OLIVIA faces left and OLIVIA exits left

EXT. BOAT - DAY

    NARRATOR
After Olivia gets drinks...

INT. CLUB - NIGHT

@TIDE stands screen right and TIDE faces left and OLIVIA stands screen left and OLIVIA faces right
@add Cup Plastic Red to TIDE
@add Cup Plastic Red to OLIVIA
@TIDE is talk_cup_toast_happy and OLIVIA is talk_cup_toast_happy
@TIDE is sip_cup_neutral_loop and OLIVIA is sip_cup_neutral_loop
@OLIVIA is idle_cup_neutral_loop

    TIDE (talk_cup_neutral_loop)
Do you have any plans? Anything exciting at all?

@TIDE is idle_cup_neutral_loop

    OLIVIA (talk_cup_neutral_loop)
Yeah, some!

EXT. BOAT - DAY

    NARRATOR
After the party...

@TIDE changes into TIDE_bedclothes

INT. EURO HOTEL ROOM - NIGHT

@cut to zone 2

@TIDE stands upscreen right in zone 2

    TIDE (yawn_bored)
(I should go to sleep...)

} “I’ll pass… It’s late, anyway” {

    TIDE (eyeroll_subtle)
(I'll pass... It's late anyway.)

    TIDE (idle_sad_loop)
(I'm tired...)

    TIDE (yawn_bored)
(I should go to sleep...)

}

Picture of what I’m talking about:
14-00-14-49

EtherealWitch · June 14, 2019, 9:05am

I think you need to delete the “}“ before “Hey Olivia!”, because you already put one in the line before

Zeah · June 14, 2019, 9:39am

You should do this:

TIDE (think_rubchin)
(Do I wanna go?)
choice
“Of course!”{

TIDE (idle_happy_loop)
(Of course!)

EXT. BOAT - DAY

NARRATOR
At the party…

@TIDE changes into TIDE_outfit
@OLIVIA changes into OLIVIA_party

INT. CLUB - NIGHT

@cut to zone 2

@OLIVIA stands screen left in zone 2 AND OLIVIA faces right AND OLIVIA is dance_clup_happy_loop

@TIDE enters from right to screen right
@TIDE is react_startled_surprised_pose

TIDE (tink_rubchin)
(What should I say?)
choice
“Hey Olivia… You look beautiful…”{

TIDE (talk_sheepish_rubneck)
H-Hey Olivia… you look beautiful…
@OLIVIA is react_startled_surprised_pose
@TIDE is idle_awkward_uneasy_loop
@OLIVIA is blush_shy
@pause for a beat

OLIVIA (talk_sheepish_rubneck)
Y-You too, Tide…

@pause for a beat

@TIDE is idle_happy_loop

OLIVIA (talk_neutral_unsure)
Well, this is awkward… Lemme get some drinks!

}“Hey Olivia!”{

TIDE (talk_greet_neutral)
Hi Olivia!

OLIVIA (talk_greet_neutral)
Hey Tide! Want some drinks? I’m thirsty.

TIDE (talk_agree_happy)
Sure!

}

@OLIVIA faces left AND OLIVIA exts left

EXT. BOAT - DAY

NARRATOR
After Olivia gets drinks…

INT. CUB - NIGHT

@TIDE stands screen right AND TIDE faces left AND OLIVIA stands screen left AND OLIVIA faces right
@add Cup Plastic Red to TIDE
@add Cup Plastic Red to OLIVIA
@TIDE is talk_cup_toast_happy AND OLIVIA is talk_cup_toast_happy
@TIDE is sip_cup_neutral_loop AND OLIVIA is sip_cup_neutral_loop
@OLIVIA is idle_cup_neutral_loop

TIDE (talk_cup_neutral_loop)
Do you have any plans? Anything exciting at all?

OLIVIA (talk_cup_neutral_loop)
Yeah, some!

EXT. BOAT - DAY

NARRATOR
After the party…

@TIDE changes into TIDE_bedclothes

INT. EURO HOTEL ROOM - NIGHT

@cut to zone 2
@TIDE stands upscreen right in zone 2

TIDE (yawn_bored)
(I should go to sleep…)

}“I’ll pass… It’s late anyway.”{

TIDE (eyeroll_subtle)
(I’ll pass… It’s late anyway.)

TIDE (idle_sad_loop)
(I’m tired…)

TIDE (yawn_bored)
(I should go to sleep…)

}

I hope this helped.

If you want, you can credit my Instagram, @reybb8_episode, in your story for helping you with directing.
IF YOU HAVE ANY FURTHER QUESTIONS ABOUT THIS, FEEL FREE TO PM ME!

EXTRA INFO

(You should delete your previous script and place this instead. To copy it, press Ctrl and C in your keyboard. To paste it, press Ctrl and V in your keyboard.)

NOTE: I did NOT change your dialogue, or spot directing, only the directing with the branches!

Sydney_H · June 14, 2019, 6:08pm

Hello @qawaii-mandi, this is Sydney the moderator. Welcome to the forum. Moved this to Directing Helps and Tips since it’s about coding. Make sure to check out our Forum Tutorial for more info about where to correctly create topics, and feel to PM me if there are any questions.

Jade.epi · June 14, 2019, 6:22pm

TIDE (think_rubchin)

(Do I wanna go?)

choice

“Of course!”{

TIDE (idle_happy_loop)

(Of course!)

EXT. BOAT - DAY

NARRATOR

At the party…

@TIDE changes into TIDE_outfit

@OLIVIAchanges into OLIVIA_party

INT. CLUB - NIGHT

@cut to zone 2

@OLIVIAstands screen left in zone 2 and OLIVIA faces right and OLIVIA is dance_club_happy_loop

@TIDE enters from right to screen right

@TIDE is react_startled_surprised_pose

TIDE (think_rubchin)

What should I say?

choice

“Hey Olivia… You look beautiful…” {

TIDE (talk_sheepish_rubneck)

H-Hey Olivia… you look beautiful…

@OLIVIAis react_startled_surprised_pose

@TIDE is idle_awkward_uneasy_loop

@OLIVIAis blush_shy

@TIDE is react_startled_surprised_pose

@TIDE is blush_shy

@pause for a beat

OLIVIA (talk_sheepish_rubneck)

Y-You too, Tide…

@pause for a beat

@TIDE is idle_happy_loop

OLIVIA (talk_neutral_unsure)

Well, this is awkward… Lemme get some drinks!

@OLIVIAfaces left and OLIVIA exits left

EXT. BOAT - DAY

NARRATOR

After Olivia gets drinks…

INT. CLUB - NIGHT

@TIDE stands screen right and TIDE faces left and OLIVIA stands screen left and OLIVIA faces right

@add Cup Plastic Red to TIDE

@add Cup Plastic Red to OLIVIA

@TIDE is talk_cup_toast_happy and OLIVIA is talk_cup_toast_happy

@TIDE is sip_cup_neutral_loop and OLIVIA is sip_cup_neutral_loop

@OLIVIAis idle_cup_neutral_loop

TIDE (talk_cup_neutral_loop)

Do you have any plans? Anything exciting at all?

@TIDE is idle_cup_neutral_loop

OLIVIA (talk_cup_neutral_loop)

Yeah, some!

EXT. BOAT - DAY

NARRATOR

After the party…

@TIDE changes into TIDE_bedclothes

INT. EURO HOTEL ROOM - NIGHT

@cut to zone 2

@TIDE stands upscreen right in zone 2

} “Hey Olivia!” {

TIDE (talk_greet_neutral)

Hi Olivia!

OLIVIA (talk_greet_neutral)

Hey Tide! Want some drinks? I’m thirsty.

TIDE (talk_agree_happy)

Sure!

@OLIVIAfaces left and OLIVIA exits left

EXT. BOAT - DAY

NARRATOR

After Olivia gets drinks…

INT. CLUB - NIGHT

@TIDE stands screen right and TIDE faces left and OLIVIA stands screen left and OLIVIA faces right

@add Cup Plastic Red to TIDE

@add Cup Plastic Red to OLIVIA

@TIDE is talk_cup_toast_happy and OLIVIA is talk_cup_toast_happy

@TIDE is sip_cup_neutral_loop and OLIVIA is sip_cup_neutral_loop

@OLIVIAis idle_cup_neutral_loop

TIDE (talk_cup_neutral_loop)

Do you have any plans? Anything exciting at all?

@TIDE is idle_cup_neutral_loop

OLIVIA (talk_cup_neutral_loop)

Yeah, some!

EXT. BOAT - DAY

NARRATOR

After the party…

@TIDE changes into TIDE_bedclothes

INT. EURO HOTEL ROOM - NIGHT

@cut to zone 2

@TIDE stands upscreen right in zone 2

TIDE (yawn_bored)

(I should go to sleep…)

}

} “I’ll pass… It’s late, anyway” {

TIDE (eyeroll_subtle)

(I’ll pass… It’s late anyway.)

TIDE (idle_sad_loop)

(I’m tired…)

TIDE (yawn_bored)

(I should go to sleep…)

}

qawaii-mandi · June 14, 2019, 8:22pm

Thanks so much! Case closed.

qawaii-mandi · June 14, 2019, 8:26pm

Okay! Thanks!

system · July 15, 2019, 6:27am

This topic was automatically closed 30 days after the last reply. New replies are no longer allowed.