Thank you, I’m so glad you want to continue reading it! Let me know if you find anything I can change (especially with grammar, as I’m not a native speaker ) !
I’d be happy to keep an eye out!
I’m a bit surprised about the warning splashes and sensitivity. I guess I just come from a different generation and do not quite understand it. I’m in my 30’s. The mc is not suecidal at all. If anything she is really strong and acts accoridngly by facing her bullies. She isn’t offended. But I guess that is something I need to consider in the future.
Your story is great and I very much understand where you’re coming from! Different generations have different understandings about certain topics and some are way more sensitive then the next.
But please do think about putting some sort of warning in the future if some of those topics are there.
Thank you for doing this! I hope I can be added in your reading list. Your feedback would meet a lot
Title: Treasure In You
Author: L.Q. Walter
Chapters: 8 (more coming soon)
Description: After discovering an old diary she believes will lead her to the location of a long lost treasure, she teams with an unlikely ally: a guy who is downright cocky yet wickedly hot!
𝓣𝓻𝓮𝓪𝓼𝓾𝓻𝓮 𝓘𝓷 𝓨𝓸𝓾 - 𝓟𝓻𝓸𝓸𝓯𝓻𝓮𝓪𝓭 𝓪𝓷𝓭 𝓡𝓮𝓿𝓲𝓮𝔀
- Love the cover! It’s very simple but it shows us a bit of the plot.
Description is awesome, it’s interesting and hooks me in.
As soon as I saw the Li name I thought about Chuck bass from gossip girls
Great use of placing/spot directing, angles and zooming!
Good use of music and sound so far!
Love the creativity with the music in the separate room! It definitely reminds me of going into another room while music is playing.
The splashes are cute and matches the vibe.
The transition scenes is great and feels good on the eyes.
- Length is good!
- I didn’t see any errors!
- Directing is on point and I didn’t see anything wrong!
Love the characters!
We can already tell what their personalities are going to be in future episodes.
- I am in love with the plot! I haven’t a read story like yours before and I’m in awe!
Final Grade: 20/20
Thank you for choosing me to review your story! If you have any questions or need more advice, don’t hesitate to PM me!
Aww thank you so much for taking time to do this! I really appreciate your feedback and I’m genuinely happy that you liked my story. Wishing you the best!
This is my story.
Story Title: Familiar
Genre: Fantasy, Mystery
Description: Will the soul change in another life? Can a witch’s soul be reborn? Anne just moved to
Salem and strange things happen to her. Magic, demons, love, betrayal and more, in Familiar.
Episodes: 6 (more in progress)
Hey! I’d love an honest review.
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Hey guys, I’m so sorry for the late reply my computer as been acting up and not working, so it’s made it super difficult to use. (It’s fixed now, so it should be fine.)
I’ll have them reviewed by tomorrow, meaning you still want one!?
Again I’m deeply sorry.
No worries, thank you! yes, I would still love one, pls!
It’s okay. I still want to.