Please go read my story

hi everyone so i’ve been writing this story for a while and i just published it friday. i’d be really happy if you would check it out
my Story is about betrayal and love . there are you friends your ex- friend and the school golden boys and popular girls
title: betrayal
author: tazanna porter
genre: romance
style: limelight
SUMMARY: your so called friend starts haning out with the poular girls and they start making rumors about you then the school golden boys defend for you and start hanging out with you and you other 2 friends will you fall in love?
story link: http://episodeinteractive.com/s/6272329831481344

I read it and here is some stuff you need to fix.

transitions
spot directing
not using default clothing
more custom backgrounds
punctuation
It wasn’t very subtle that Rocky changed her mood, you could have made a transaction between Rocky changing and not her just being mean at the very start
Background characters
Capitalization
A cover for your story

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ok thanks i will work on that

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would you like to do a r4r? :star_struck:

Title: Mystery on Hanging Hill Lane
Author: Marshmallow O.
Genre: Mystery, Romance, Comedy (Thriller)
Style: Limelight
Link: http://episodeinteractive.com/s/6250660385652736
Summary: It’s a race against time as you and your friends try to escape the mysterious sleepover that you were invited to…

Chapters: 7 (To be continued…)
Instagram: @marshmallowo.episode

Full CC, Choices Matter, Point System, Mini Games, Advanced Directing, 2 LI! :blush:

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sure the story sounds fun

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great thanks! we can PM ss when we’re done!

i have one question i new on here so what is PM and ss