Please review my unpublished story! (only episode 1)


#1


So this is the link and I finished writing episode 1.
Can you guys read the episode and tell me about your ideas??
I need reviews ASAP!! TYSM!
Don’t read episode 2 pls, it only has the intro :slight_smile:


#2

I like it! The directing is great as well as the dialogue - aside some occasional grammar mistakes. Though that shouldn’t be a big issue, keep up the good work!


#3

thank you so much! IS it okay to publish like this? Do you remember the top grammar mistakes in my story?


#4

I don’t think I can remember all of them. I think you used waisting instead of wasting and que instead of cue? Maybe you could PM me your script so I can look over it and grammar check?


#5

I think it’s fine that you publish it like that, but there are some people with grammar pet peeves, and mistakes are annoying to them. I don’t mind it though, it’s not a big issue.


#6

Thank you! I checked the spellings again and there were some mistakes:sweat_smile::sweat_smile:


#7

Sorry one more question, Do you think the story is boring and too same like the other stories?


#8

Personally, I like these types of stories, although they tend to get repetitive and end in similar ways, so maybe you could add some flare to it?


#9

thank you! your feedback helped a lot :slight_smile:


#10

No problem!


#11

Oh yeah I have a question, how did you code the part where you press on the phone in the begininng?


#12

Here! Episode is beta testing now so not sure if it works for everyone, but it worked on mine :slight_smile:


#13

Ah cool, thanks Liv :slight_smile:


#14

Np:)


#15

This story is so good I can’t wait till it’s published!


#16

Oh my gawd :smiley: :heart_eyes: Thank you so much!!!
I’ll try to publish it as fast as I can