hey everyone! I’m currently writing my first story and I’ve been having lots of trouble with choices inside of choices. this part of my story has the mc (emilia) and the li (alec) at his house and the reader gets to pick whether to go to the mall or not. then if they decide to go to the mall, they can choose what store to go too, and inside every outcome of each store is at least one choice. what’s happening is the choice where you get to pick which store to go to i have 4 choices. 1: a video game store 2: a music store 3: a sports store and the 4th choice is the done choice. after each scene at every store is done it brings you back to the choosing stores choice thing so that the reader can choose another store to go to, so once they are finished going to each store they can press the done button. the problem is that “expected character or scene change” error keeps popping up for the done choice. I’m really bad at explaining but i hope someone can help fix this. (FYI some of the scenes i didn’t finish putting the dialogue and actions yet.)
The script
ALEC (talk_neutral)
Do you maybe wanna...
Go to the mall?
EMILIA
(I haven't been to a mall in forever.)
(But what if someone recognizes me?)
NARR
I should...
choice
“Go” {
EMILIA (talk_excited_happy)
Yeah! I haven't been to a mall in forever.
@transition iris out in 2
INT. MALL - DAY
music music_calmgroove
@EMILIA faces right
@EMILIA spot 1.000 71 35 in zone 1
@ALEC spot 1.000 156 58 in zone 1
EMILIA (talk_neutral)
Are you okay?
You seem...
Different.
ALEC (talk_neutral)
Yeah, I'm fine. Shopping's just not exactly my thing.
label alec_store
music juvie_hustle
NARR
Try and cheer [FIRSTNAME] up!
choice
“Let’s go to the video game store”{
INT. RECORD STORE - DAY
music juvie_radiosong
readerMessage No mood points gained
@cut to zone 3
@ALEC spot 1.000 131 179 in zone 3
@EMILIA spot 1.000 219 157 in zone 3
ALEC (talk_neutral)
Wow, they have that new game I saw on Instagram!
readerMessage Speaking of… Follow me on Instagram @aliekeri.ep
EMILIA (talk_neutral)
That looks cool.
ALEC (talk_neutral)
It is. It's virtual reality.
I've always wanted to try virtual reality.
@transition iris out
NARR
15 minutes later...
ALEC (talk_neutral)
Let's go to another store.
EMILIA (talk_neutral)
Ar you going to get anything?
ALEC (talk_neutral)
No, I don't think so.
I was thinking about getting the virtual reality one, but I'm not going too.
EMILIA (talk_neutral)
Why not?
ALEC (talk_neutral)
It's $50. I don't thinkit's worth that much.
EMILIA
(He really wants that game)
(I can see it in his eyes)
choice
“Get him the game!”{
EMILIA (talk_neutral)
I'll get it for you.
ALEC (talk_neutral)
[NAME]-
EMILIA (talk_neutral)
No- I insist.
readerMessage [FIRSTNAME] appreciates your kind gesture!
}
“Don’t get him the game”{
ALEC (idle_sad_loop)
(I really wanted that game)
}
goto alec_store
}
“Let’s go to the music center”{
INT. GUITAR SHOP - DAY
music music_liveacousticstrum
readerMessage BG by @angryybirdd on Instagram
@ALEC spot 1.000 131 179
@EMILIA spot 1.000 219 157
readerMessage +1 mood point
NARR
Info gained: [FIRSTNAME) likes music.
ALEC (talk_excited_happy)
Wow!
They have the new guitar that just came out!
ALEC (talk_guitar_neutral_loop)
This is so cool!
ALEC (sing_guitar_sad_loop)
♪I just wanted to be,♪
♪By your side,♪
♪When you cried,♪
♪But it's too late,♪
♪Now I'm crying on my own.♪
EMILIA (talk_neutral)
Wow, That's a beautiful song.
Who wrote it?
@ALEC is blush_shy
ALEC (talk_neutral)
I wrote it, actually
EMILIA (talk_neutral)
Really?
That's a good a** song!
EMILIA (sing_backup_loop)
♪I just wanted to be by your side♪
♪While you cried♪
ALEC (talk_neutral)
Thanks.
It was written for my mom actually.
I wish she could hear it.
EMILIA (think_rubchin)
(I wonder what he means by that)
choice
“Ask him” {
music juvie_posttrauma
EMILIA (talk_awkward_loop)
If you don't mind me asking...
ALEC (talk_armscrossed_sad_loop)
It's fine.
12 years ago, My dad divorced my mom and he moved out here and took me along.
EMILIA (talk_armraised_sad)
Im so sorry, [FIRSTNAME]
ALEC (talk_awkward_loop)
It's fine.
}
“Don’t” {
sound crickets_fade
@EMILIA is idle_armscrossed_awkward_loop
@ALEC is idle_awkward_uneasy_loop
}
EMILIA (talk_awkward_loop)
Let's go somewhere else
goto label alec_store
}
“Let’s go to the sports store”{
INT. SPORTS STORE - DAY
music juvie_somber
@ALEC spot 1.000 131 179
@EMILIA spot 1.000 219 157
readerMessage No mood points gained
@EMILIA is rear
EMILIA (talk_excited_happy)
Wow, these sneakers are nice
@ALEC is rear
ALEC (talk_neutral)
These are cool.
EMILIA (talk_neutral)
Yeah.
readerMessage Well… This is awkward.
NARRATOR
Let's say something to make this less awkward.
choice
“Do you play any sports?” {
EMILIA (talk_neutral)
So… Do you play any sports?
ALEC (talk_explain_neutral)
Well, I used to play baeball when I was younger.
EMILIA (talk_neutral)
Really? That's cool.
ALEC (talk_neutral)
Yeah, I guess.
Do you play any sports?
EMILIA (talk_neutral)
Not on a team.
But I like to play Basketball.
} “I haven’t been to a mall in ages” {
EMILIA (talk_neutral)
I haven’t been to a mall in ages.
ALEC (talk_neutral)
Yeah, and that's crazy.
Junior year, I came here every Friday with my friends.
EMILIA (talk_neutral)
You're a senior this year?
ALEC (talk_neutral)
Yeah, How about you?
EMILIA (talk_neutral)
I'm a senior, too.
But I don't think I'm gonna go to school this year.
ALEC (talk_neutral)
Why?
NARRATOR (EMILIA)
I can't tell him I committed a crime, He'll hate me and possibly call the cops. (The choice you pick may make [FIRSTNAME] more suspicious or less suspicious, choose wisely!
choice
“Change the Subject” {
EMILIA (talk_neutral)
That's a nice pair of shoes!
@ALEC is think_rubchin
readerMessage [FIRSTNAME] is a little bit suspicious of you.
}
“Say You Just don’t want to go”{
EMILIA (talk_explain_neutral)
I just don’t want to go.
ALEC (talk_neutral)
I would do that, too if my dad would let me.
readerMessage [FIRSTNAME] isn’t suspicious of you.
}
“No reason”{
EMILIA (talk_neutral)
No reason.
ALEC (talk_doubtful)
No reason?
EMILIA (talk_neutral)
No reason.
@ALEC is think_rubchin
readerMessage [FIRSTNAME] is a little suspicious of you.
}}
goto label alec_store
}
“Done”{
ALEC (talk_explain_neutral)
Let’s go shopping for you.
readerMessage From Alec’s POV
}}
“Stay” {
EMILIA (talk_neutral)
I would love to go,
But I don’t feel that good.
ALEC (talk_neutral)
Okay, That’s fine.
I actually have to go to work, but I hope you feel better.
EMILIA (talk_neutral)
Where do you work?
ALEC (talk_neutral)
I’m a part-time barista and part-time guitar tutor.
readerMessage Info gained: [FIRSTNAME] likes music.
ALEC (talk_neutral)
I have to go now, Bye.
EMILIA (talk_greet_shy)
Bye
}
