Author: Jannah Jackson
Story: Tribe of Malapinchi
Positive critic:
GIRL! THANK YOU! I absolutely LOVE how you included the option to skip chapters, because I got a new phone and couldn’t read my previous stories 
It’s also a good thing to gove to choice to customize. Many people feel more like the main character because of that. Many stories don’t have that, I don’t know why. I mean, you can also just leave the character as it is, if you don’t want to customize it.
Your «intro» was really cool. It started and everything was just mysterious. I was like „What the heck?“ and it got my attention. The length was also perfect, it wasn’t too long! Too long introductons make me lose interest because it’s just too messy.
Can we please talk about your directing? It’s just so professional, if I didn’t know better, I’d have thought I was reading a featured story! You put a lot of effort into the details, I do appreciate that (text messages, own backgrounds etc.)! You know what ? That’s probably what I appreciate the most, it just shows me how passionate you are about your story. You probably spent A LOT of time just even for one chapter !
Your story doesn’t reveal too much either, thus it forces me to read, in order to gain more information. It makes it boring, when you get tooooo much information from the start on.
The story seemed natural! The conversations weren’t awkward, I felt included in te story, if you know what I mean. I know it’s a lot of effort, but keep it up!
Your story is original ! I’ve never seen that kind of topic before, I’m loving it. I hate boring love stories, they’re all the same.
Your story has funny parts, thank you! Humo ris so important and makes it so much more better to read!
You did a good job with the characters‘ background-stories! It’s good how you explained them, but at the same time we still don’t know everything. We just know what’s of major importance and if we wan’t to know more, we have to read your story. I hate too long/too short introductions. I also can’t stand it, when people just use the narrator the whole time to express the main characters feeling. I mean sometimes it just doesn’t fit, okay? But I’m shook, you just did it perfectly, you found the line between too much and too less.
I liked you cover! I hate it when people just put some characters onto the cover, you know, the kind that looks unprofessional. I mean, the cover’s the first thing you see and if it doesn’t appeal to you then the author won’t even get the chance to show their art, just because of the cover!
Negative critic:
I know it’s difficult to put fitting choices into your story, but maybe you could usemore?T would make it more interesting, the reader follows up more thoroughly!
I really don’t know what else you could do better🤷🏻♀️ But please keep doing these things which I’ve listed, I love them!
Rating: 9/10!
Congratulations! I didn’t think anyone would reach such a high rate! I’ll even keep reading your story, thank you for this masterpiece!
Please give me a short feedback! Did this help you? I most certainly hope it did!
Have a nice day!
-x_meliiii
It’s so hard to add choices so I’ll work on that. Maybe when they are touring I could use it… someone suggested that hehe.
