PROMOTING! Can you choose wisely to keep all your secrets?

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Of course I will read! It will just take me a little time.

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R4R threat

I see a lot of authors just ignore what R4R threats are about
 It is some kind of support. You all know how hard is to show your new story


So, I am open to R4R. But before you post all the details of your story, let’s read the rules!

  1. Leave the link for your story.

  2. Leave the feedback. Not only the print screen of reading episodes. I will do the same!

  3. Password No ghosting

  4. You read my story first, after your feedback I will.

  5. Let’s see who is reading, and who is just spamming :wink:

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Just finished. Let me know when you’ve read mine.

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@lizzy.writes So?

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There were some grammatical errors but overall I enjoyed it!

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So, I’m here with my feedback.
Your directing looks really good (spot directing, zooms, layers, overlays - everything is in its place).
The plot is interesting (Are you maybe a Dexter fan, too? ;D, and hopefully, we’ll get more background infos on the MC in the next chapters. I also like that small twist you added. (Eve is after the bad guys, and unknowingly, Rick is after Eve, but hey, they just spent a night together, and I have a feeling that Fate might have something else in store for them.)
The episodes’ length is decent.
There were some grammar issues, but I read at the end that you had proofreaders/spellcheckers, so I won’t start listing here the ones I spotted (unless you want me to, then I can send you a message about them later).
As for the content, there is a guideline violation in the second chapter. When Eve and Rick are in the shower, either they should wear some underwear or they shouldn’t kiss, because characters can’t do that naked.
I’m not a CC fanatic myself, so I can totally live without it, but you might want to consider a limited CC for at least the MC, if you liked to get more reads.

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Thank you! I always try my best!

Am I a Dexter fan? :thinking: yeah. I wanted the whole show before! Also, I spilled on your grave inspired me too.

I had. True she has checked my grammar in the 2nd episode after publishing, and still, I haven’t updated it :sweat_smile: but I don’t mind if you let me know what did u find! So, I will focus more on that in my upcoming episodes. English is not my 1st language, but I’m always open to improving it!

About CC
 I’m not sure yet, maybe I will add limited one later. but I already heard about it before.

Now your story!
Your first episode makes me read more! You showed the most important things about the storyline! You kept the balance between all characters! Even you surprised me by choice should I say yes or no. I was literally sitting 5 minutes and thought about what should I choose. So, in the end, I say yes. At least MC loves him, right. hope it won’t affect my future choices!.

The best character is:

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He is so funny! :heart:

Also, your coding is pretty good!
But I think it will look better if you let MC walk rear in that scene:

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I’m my opinion, it will look more natural.

Always I’m bitching about spotting bubbles, and u missed it in this scene (but only in the 2nd episode, in the 3rd it was spotted):

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Overall, your story is great! It is nice to read after a long workday.

This story deserves more reads!

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Done :blush:

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Thank you!!

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@Arianah

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Bump.

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R4R OPEN!

I’m open to R4R! Feel free to add your story!

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Hey would you like to do a R4R with me :slight_smile:

MY STORY BELOW:
Author: Sanet P.
Story Title: Unexpected Love
Genre: Drama / Romance
Description: Meeting Phillip, Emily wasn’t ready for love. What developed into a strong friendship, was infiltrated with emotions she never expected. Are they too late, to be more than friends?
Chapter: 3 published
Link: [http://episodeinteractive.com/s/5258855691386880]
Instagram: @episode.sanet
Cover:

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No problem.
I will read after you let me know you finished.
And I’m guessing you haven’t read it. :upside_down_face::wink:

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No not yet but I will soon :wink:

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Here you go @xinxmyxeye
I really loved it. :two_hearts: Like really.
I was so into the story that I completely forgot to take ss :woman_facepalming:t3: but that’s a good thing. Reading the story you wouldn’t think that English isn’t your first language.
The directing and coding is done so well. Your use of overlays made the experience better for me (and I must say when she turned on the tv I sat here and said “so cool” out loud :joy:)
I can’t wait for the next episode xx

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I’m so happy you did enjoy it! :heart:

@SanetP

Short Review

I really like that everything was against to not tell her name :joy:
And then, it was fast she saw him again! Lucky guy!

I think Philip and Emily will be a really cute couple!

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Poor Philip! He has an overprotective mom! It was funny to read!

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Your story is a nice, light romance!
I really enjoy your humor!

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There is a rule to make background characters look natural. I had a lot of problem with spotting characters too before. It is always a pain in the ass.
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Also, some speech bubbles weren’t spotted :stuck_out_tongue:

I’m not into CC too, but maybe add some hair changing, lipsticks, outfits. Maybe it will end asking :stuck_out_tongue:

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Thank you for the tips @xinxmyxeye will definitely help me in the future x

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Still open.

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Scars

Very interesting. There some grammatical errors. Between Scene 1 and Scene 15, there was no music. As there wasn’t many errors, I was quite critical on what I could find. Besides that, I enjoyed your episode.
I haven’t proofread. Let me know if there’s anything you don’t understand.

Cover

Part of the text on your large cover is hidden by the play and favourite button.

Description

The past created who Eve is right now. Life never goes easy on her. That’s why she became so ruthless to everyone she’s ever met.

You use two tenses - past and present.

Past:
The past created who Eve is right now. Life never went easy on her. That’s why she became so ruthless to everyone she’s ever met.

Scene 2: After the shooting

When EVE starts dustoff_neutral_loop, she is still holding the gun prop.

Warning Splash

Warning:
This story contains strong language mature themes including sex-harassment and suicide
It uses sound
Scars
by inxmyxeyes

This story contains strong language and mature themes, including sexual-harassment and suicide.
It uses sound.
Scars
by inxmyxeyes

Scene 3: Crime Scene

OFFICER HAZEL
He’s got


This means “he is got”.

He has


OFFICER TOM
It’s the third murder this month, I think they’re already on their way here.

Generally, you don’t use commas between two independent clauses.

It’s the third murder this month. I think they’re already on their way here.

Scene 4: The nightmare/The bedroom

There is a pause after the tear drop becomes opaque, and when it begins to drop.

Scene 5: News

Personally, I prefer if you give each character a name, in this case, THE NEWS REPORTER

THE NEWS REPORTER
Police found a body, yesterday, of a well-known actor’s son.

Yesterday, the police found the body of a well-known actor’s son.

Police found a body, yesterday. It was a well-known actor’s son.

Use “a body”, if the person is unknown. Use “the body” if the person is known.
I doubt the news would refer to him a a “well-known actor” without saying his name.

Scene 6: Bathroom

When EVE starts primp_brushhair_happy, she isn’t holding the hairbrush prop.

Scene 7: Bath

It’s a shame there isn’t a stand to sit transition.

Scene 8: Crashmere Publishing Inc

readerMessage Crashmere Publishing Inc

Crashmere Publishing Inc.

JULIA
I’m not allowed to do this.

I’m not allowed to do that.

Scene 10: Phone Call

EVE
Let’s meet in the nearby coffee shop in a hour.

The reader won’t know where the nearby coffee shop is.

Let’s meet at the nearby coffee shop in an hour.

Scene 11: Dressing Game

EVE walks to screen left, then walks to her spot. There is a jump in the animation.

choice
“Leggins - don’t try at all” {
}

“Leggings - don’t try at all” {
}

Scene 12: Coffee Shop

LUKE
Of course not


Of course, not


Scene 15: Car

Before cutting to EMMA, there is a pause.

Scene 16: Club

After ARIA walks in, there is a pause before EMMA and EMMA walk in.

ARIA
It’s the best club in th city!

It’s the best club in the city!