Hey everyone! I’m pretty bored and I ran out of stories to read so if you want me to review them or proofread I can! I will be grading out of 100 And I will give you 100% honest feedback along with a shoutout on Instagram!
Just leave me the description, link, cover, how many chapters you have, and your insta username
Only accepting 10 (for now)-
Waitlist:
@UwU.XwX (finished review)
@Rahzel (finished review)
@viarose (Reading now)
@your_girl.kay ()
@Your_girl.kay
@Roy
@angelSP_epi
@hazeo
@madhu
Finished Reviews:
@UwU.XwX
Until you find my heart
About the story-
Description: Printemps always had a hard life. What else could go wrong? …perhaps a mafia and fantasy mess, turning out being a big lie from her parents? LL
Genre(s):
Says- Drama, Romance, Fantasy
I think- Drama, Fantasy, Romance
Chapters: 6 (active)
Style: Limelight
Art scenes: none, (not sure if the author is going to add any)
-Let’s talk about the title, I love it! When seeing this title I didn’t think it actually meant what it said. The story starts with Printemps,The main character has a phobia of the sun so she can only walk out at night, while Printemps is walking a creep that stole her heart, literally. It’s up to you to figure out what happens next.
-I love the idea of the story, I haven’t seen anything like this yet!
- I love the usages of overlays in the intro
- Directing seems really good! I don’t see any floating characters
- There are some grammatical errors but stated that she speaks two languages-(I will send you the errors and how to fix them by insta)
- There are some speech bubble issues in chapter 2. Some were off screen so you can’t read the full sentence…
Things I would love to see-
- I would love to see the phobia of the sun a bit more.
- just make sure your punctuation is all good
Keep up all the good work! I will definitely try to keep on reading!
Grade: 90/100!
Rahzel
Finding Myself
Description:
LI? 4 total (2 each sister)
Genre:
Says- romance
I think- drama/romance
Chapters: 3 (active)
Style: limelight
Point system
Art Scenes: none that I see (but this is only the 3rd chapter)
Lisa is in College Angelina is in high school. Lena has bad social anxiety.
- love the personality added into it
- I give props to anyone who even thinks of doing points, I do it in my story and I absolutely despise doing it
- I love the idea of two different POV’s
- I think you’re doing a great job with the story so far!
- a few grammatical errors (you wouldn’t notice unless you really search for them {like I did})
- Try to spot on the same line so you don’t have a character popping in after episode’s default second
- Capitalize the “I”s! (Sorry I sound like my English grammar teacher…)
- Punctuation (I will say this to everyone) it just makes the story look neater and well put together (says me who needs to do that still loll)
Things I would love to see:
- now you’re only on the first three chapters but if you really get the message around about social anxiety and the other disorders then I think it’ll be a great story!
Grade 92/100
LL, fantasy / romance / drama, CC, 4 LI’s, LGBTQ, diversity, choices matter, art scenes 
and thank you 
