R4R! - College Days: Before and After 9/11

UPDATE: I am editing my first few episodes to make them longer, so don’t start reading my story UNTIL I read yours! I don’t want you guys to spend your tickets until I am done reading yours!!!

Hi guys! This is my first official story on Episode, and I am looking for constructive feedback and any suggestions you have for future episodes! If you read mine and give constructive feedback in fanmail, I will definitely read yours!

Goal of Story: I want people to realize how large-scale events can completely turn over the microcosms of student life. In my story, I explore how 9/11 devastated college students’ lives, how it impacted their families and relationships in different ways, and how it ultimately mobilized them to unite against injustice in their communities–from the perspective of the main character Priya, an Indian, Hindu, bisexual student with a Pakistani, Muslim roommate, Vardah Ali.

Title: College Days: Before and After 9/11
Style: Episode Limelight, Spotlight <-- I have chosen Spotlight because it allows readers to focus more on the dialogue and the emotions (use their imagination!), rather than focusing on the movements of the Episode cartoons.
Episodes: 3 so far, more coming soon once I get more feedback!
Description: Priya Kumar is an Indian American, Hindu, bisexual student with a Pakistani, Muslim roommate, Vardah Ali. They hit it off very well, but how will their lives change after 9/11?

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Wow! Amazing. I like how your story touches on difficult topics. I’ll add you to my R4R list. Feel free to check out mine :slight_smile:

My story: Thriller: © Tribe of Malapinchi
Author: Jannah Jackson
Genre: Thriller/Mystery/Horror/Fantasy/Adventure
Story style: Secret Surprise :wink:
Description: Toss into a land of the sun, magic, lies and dark secrets in Asia. Can you make sense of the havoc you were tossed into and save everyone before it’s too late? CharacterCustomization
Episodes: 5/6
Link: http://episodeinteractive.com/s/5909308359180288

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Adding you to my list, once I’m done I’ll send you screenshots.
Title : To the Night
Author: Megan Beard
Genre : Comedy
Style : INK
Description : Megan and her group of friends have a crazy night out on the town. Follow Megan and her friends trying to recall the events of last night. Completely Revamped .
Episodes : 9 (On Going)
All Criticism Welcome!
Story Link: http://www.episodeinteractive.com/s/6348918723575808

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Thanks so much Jannah! I’ve already started reading yours and love how diverse the characters are and the sense of mystery in the storyline! Looking forward to reading more…

Thanks so much Meg! I’ll be sure to read yours soon!

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So you made that offensive story huh?

I hope this is about how the Muslim and Asian minorities stood up and condemned the violence and showed that they are Americans in the face of anti-Islamic violence

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Title: Ocean’s 5
Author: Lara P.
Genre: Action
Chapters: 3 out (more coming soon)
Style: Ink
Description: Five highly skilled and most dangerous people on Earth are brought together for the biggest heist ever seen. What can go wrong?
Instagram: @larapstories
Link: https://episode.app.link/mRmxbzLPYR

Hello, I’m interested in doing R4R with you. :hugs:

Story: Rewinded Life.

Author: Lia Lopez.

Description:
What would you do if a galactic being gives you the power to go back in time, and change the outcome of events that were out of your control?

Genres:
Fantasy, comedy, romance and slice of life.

Completion status:
9 episodes. (Ongoing)

My instagram: lia_lopez_episode

Link:

Yes, it is! As a South Asian myself, I want to share the counternarrative and I will definitely be including episodes where my main characters stand up for one another and condemn the violence and Islamophobia.

I do not think my story is offensive at all. Read this: https://thebestschools.org/magazine/911-defined-college-years/
^Real life account of how 9/11 impacted a college student

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I would love to do a R4R with you!

Title : My Freedom
Author : AZN
Style : INK
Genre : Romance
Description : He’s an actor and he’s successful. That doesn’t stop Grey from chasing a shy girl like Ophelia, while being engaged to her cousin.
Instagram : @azn.stories
Link : http://episodeinteractive.com/s/5828647379402752

Small cover :

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Then the most important thing to do is humanise your characters. Before and after 9/11? I’d suggest 9/11 not happening until at least a third of the way through the story. I want to know the characters and understand their friendship before you introduce the tragedy.

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Title: June.
Author: Aliceproductions.
Genre: Romantic comedy.
Chapters: 6 (ongoing.)
Style: Limelight/Classic.
Link: http://episodeinteractive.com/s/6452982327607296
Description: Ritchie is a lonely graphic designer who has just created his most successful character, June. Entranced by her beauty, how will he feel when he meets her in real life?

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I do R4R… ^^ and screenshot as proof… add me on instagram… :smiling_face_with_three_hearts:
Author: R.es.story
Genre: Romantic
Style: Ink
Description: Jade has been humiliated by Max on her first day of college. She begins to grow hatred for him and decides to take revenge. What will happen to Jade?
Episodes: 10 (Ongoing)
Instagram: @r.es_story

LINK: http://episodeinteractive.com/s/6073332409434112

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Ok, that totally makes sense. I will slow down the first two episodes, and move 9/11 down to a later episode. I got similar feedback from another person to focus more on character development, so I will do that for sure.

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Finished your story, here is a screenshot from the final chapter as proof
It’s very good and interesting

Aww thank you, AJ! I am actually working on improving the character development even more, and I am glad you are enjoying it so far! I’ll definitely read your story and will put it on my to-read list. You can expect me to have it read within the next 2-3 weeks for sure. (I will PM you a screenshot or post one here.)

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Okay, I have updated the first two episodes significantly, and have slowed down the pace of the story. I’ll be uploading the revised third episode soon!

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Just finished!

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