I just released the first three chapters of my first ever story in this app and I need some readers to give feedback and point out any errors they encounter to me. I can also do the same for you although I can’t help much with the scripting part since I only know the basic stuff. I can help you out with your writing and directing though, and if you have any struggles with art assets let me know–I might be able to help out.
Story Name: The PR Stunt
Genre: Romance, Comedy
Episodes: 3 (More Coming Soon)
You’re on your way to becoming one of the music industry’s most iconic artists when you’ve decided to put your career on hold. Your label isn’t too happy and your fans are starting to lose interest. Luckily, your publicist has an idea to reel them back in–start a fake relationship with new pop sensation, Cameron Devine.
- Gender-locked, customizable female MC. You’ll be able to determine parts of her backstory and what type of celebrity she is as the story progresses.
- Two non-customizable LIs, unfortunately.
- Choose your dating preference.
- Hidden character point system; utilizes flags and gains.
- Choices matter.
Self-promotion done and over with… Yes, I started this whole thing way back in September. Yes, I really did go for “The Director” as a pen name mostly because I never actually thought I’d ever publish this yet here we are.
Story Name: Springmist Lake
Style: Limelight, Spotlight
Seven college friends reunite at their hometown of Springmist Lake for a night of fun, but an otherworldly horror threatens their lives. Will they band together to live or betray each other to survive?
- Point system
- Choices matter
- LGBTQ+ cast; two non-binary, one trans, one gay, one bi, one lesbian, one bi-curious
- Control all seven characters
Update: To make sure that you haven’t skipped ahead to that reply button without reading the main post, please copy-paste this: Oresteia at the end of your post. Any posts that do not have the “password” will be ignored.
Lastly, I’ve been ghosted four times now so new rule: send me a screenshot of proof that you’ve finished the story (feedback can be forwarded to me later on, if any) before I read and review yours.
Come on, people. This is supposed to be a trusting, mutual, beneficial relationship. Don’t go breaking my heart.
Read & Reviewed
Note: On top of the reviews I’ve posted in the thread, I figured I’d add more of my thoughts here for those who’ve taken the time to read my story in return.
Teenage drama! There’s obvious thought and effort put into the writing and directing. Reminds me of a coming-of-age YA novel. If you’re into stories that take place in a high school setting with lots of drama and intrigue, this one’s for you.
Mind-blowing art scenes and superb writing. I don’t think I’m even qualified to give feedback on the author’s directing because everything’s on-point. Fantastic sci-fi setting and lots of appealing characters that’ll definitely keep you reading.
Engaging story and exceptionally well-written diverse set of characters. Very immersive. It’s quick to pull you into its setting. It’s definitely a must-read for readers who like horror and their choices actually making an impact in the story. But even if you’re not into any of those, I still highly recommend reading this story.
A thrilling mix of fantasy, mystery, romance, and action. The characters are all interesting and the dynamic between the MC and LI is extremely entertaining to read. If that doesn’t keep you reading, maybe the on-going mystery of another character deeply tied to the MC will. Everyone has secrets!
The relationship with the MC and his best friend will make you go, “Awww!” It’s really hard not to ship them together. I hope he’s an LI. At the same time, I kinda wanna date all the girls too.