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I looked at each of your screenshots it looks to stunning and I can tell have a lot of reading ahead of me but I’m excited.
I tell you’ll my feedback if I have any which I feel like I wouldn’t. :blush: :hugs: :bomb:

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Thank you!!

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Thank you soo much😁

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Aw thanks! I hope you love it :smiling_face_with_three_hearts:

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Thank you sm!

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Thanks!

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I finished your story. Here’s my review and feedback!

Cover and Description: The description sounds really interesting! Your cover is straight up beautiful, girl. And the title makes sense.

Plot: The plot was interesting. I haven’t really read anything like it. The story line flows well throughout each episode. I was very shocked by the plot twist at the end of chapter 5! I’m really glad you added it :smiley:

Characters:

  1. Scarlet: In my opinion she was innocent and caring at first, she became confused when she found about her powers, and through the last 3 episodes she was brave.
  2. Mother Hawthorn: She seemed very two sided, as she was sweet toward Scarlet at first and then she’d instantly become stone cold toward her. I noticed that she was demanding and very quick to anger.
    Zargon: When I first met him, he was mysterious, and then as the story went on he seemed intelligent.
    Artemis: At first she seemed friendly toward Scarlet, saying that she was her sister. She is also very pervasive.

The characters each have their own personalities! I really like that about your story.

Feedback:

  1. There were a few times when the character would say something but their lips didnt move. (It most happened in the first 2 episodes but it also happened once in episode 4)
  2. The fire overlays were cool!
  3. The chapters were a good length
  4. In episode 3 the story of Dragonii is told, but some readers might now be able to read it, and the description might now make sense do to this. As a suggestion, at the end of the episode, if the reader was unable to see the story of Dragonii, there could be a choice where they could view it.
  5. The grakmer and spelling was good.
  6. As the reader I felt very involved! Good Job :slight_smile:

As a side note, Mother Hawthorn reminded me of Mother Gothel from Tangled and so did the tower :joy:

Great job! I can’t wait to see what happens next to Scarlet. Keep up the good work! :smiley:

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thank you so much! This is very helpful! I appreciate it a lot! :smiling_face_with_three_hearts:

I totally agree with your feedback! With the story of the Dragonii point, if the reader does not hear it at the end of ep 3, Artemis will tell them about it in ep5!!

Thank you so much again!! I’m glad you enjoyed the story :revolving_hearts:

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thank so much!! :revolving_hearts:

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Thank you :blush:

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Still open!

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Bump!

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Still open!

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Bump!

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Still open!

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I’ll read the second one


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I’ll get started on reading it.

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Thank you so much

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Here’s the ss

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Thank you I’ll start yours

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