Hi just read the first episode of Reality behind Glasses!
Plot
I like the idea. Kinda sad she was revealed already though, but I mean there are very OBVIOUS POINTS.literally screaming at her chest The way it starts seems pretty random. We don’t know anything about Layla besides the description. It just starts off with her as a guy in school, why? Why would she even have to disguise herself in the first place? The description said she disguised herself so she could see childhood friends. In the story she never did that all she ever did was avoid that boy. Why were they in the same class all day? I’m confused if the school is in on it. They have to know she is actually a girl right? Also I thought she was at lunch but then she was in the principal’s office? Maybe have the principal call her in at some point. Kinda wondering when the second guy comes into play. I hope they have equal screen time. We definitely need these questions answered at some point.
Directing
It looked pretty good!
Character
We don’t know much about Layla for me to like her. All I know is she’s trying to pass as a boy at school. As for her bad boy, I’m confused. In the beginning you said he was a bad boy but he doesn’t act like one at all. Maybe describe him as something else. I like the difference in the small bit of personality we saw. Hes curious and quiet. However not shy at all. New and I like it, very refreshing.
Choices
We had a good amount of choices I’d say.
Grammar
I saw no mistakes, but be mindful I’m exhausted so I might have missed some.
Summary
Your imagination is going places, and so is your writing x!