Hello. I read your story and sent a screenshot.
I like your story. It’s a bit uneven, it starts out as a high school drama, then shifts, but that’s ok. I was wondering how old the girls are? They seem to be in school, yet do very adult things, eg clubbing, etc. It’s interesting and your chapters are a fair length. I am curious how much your story is going to change. Good luck!
I’ve sent you a screenshot via PM.
I liked most of your story. Your chapters don’t drag on and it’s never boring. Only a few complaints: I’m far more interested in the mystery than the tacked on romance; the male characters into annoyed me. He seems to be the “token Brit” character. What he does is really akin to sexual harassment and the MC just likes it. In reality, she should have reported him for attempting fraternising. But I will admit he does get more likeable as the story progresses.
Overall, they mystery is intriguing and I think you should stick with that as the primary focus because that’s what you’re doing very well in you story.
All the best.
Hi, I finished your story and sent a screenshot from the final chapter.
I like your story. It’s nice to see a brother and sister have such a nice loving relationship. You actually didn’t make the mistake that many make. When the boos thinks Sky is sexy, he thinks it instead of telling her (which is sexist.) I noticed you look a lot like Sky as the narrator. Is it based on your like? Who is the girl in 5e bikini on the final screen? There are a few grammar mistakes. Also, when I went for the interview, I declined to change and Liam, said I look gorgeous, despite wearing the same thing. I was wondering, if Sky spent most her life in Germany, I would assume she has a strong German accent. Wouldn’t people notice this and already think she’s from Germany?
Hi, I finished your story and sent you a PM screenshot from the final chapter as proof.
Wow! Three styles in one story. I don’t know how you did it, but kudos to you. I’m sure it will please many fans as they can see their favourite style in one story. I suppose the only worry is classic fans may object to them being the ‘bad guys.’ Still, it’s a real treat to see Limelight, Ink and Classic all in one story. I wish I could do that.
My only complaint, is you have long pauses and sometimes it’s on blank screens and get rather boring.
Other than that, no problems whatsoever. Great story.