Read for read/review new story :)

Hey, so I just published my new limelight story about half an hour ago and would like some feedback. Lemme know if you’re interested :blush:

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I can read your story! I just need the link, or the title. :blush:

thanks sm :slight_smile:

No problem hon! Giving your story a try right now!

Ok. So, I like how you ended episode 1! It’ll definitely make readers want to come back!

A few takeaways I have are;

Make sure your speechbubbles are as accurate as possible! So, make sure when Alma is taking, it doesn’t look like Sophia is talking. (I hope that was clear lol😁).

Also, when you let reader’s choose Sophia’s outfit put pauses. That way the reader can see what the outfit looks like.

Ex.

SOPHIA (think_rubchin)
(What should I wear?)

choice
“Blue Dress”{

@ SOPHIA starts idle_dustoff_neutral_loop

@pause for 3

@SOPHIA changes into SOPHIA_blue_dress
}
Something like that!

But other than that, I think your story is really good! I can’t wait to read the next couple of chapters! :blue_heart:

Thank you! I’ll definitely take these things into consideration!

Your welcome! :+1:

And if you do revamp your story, make sure to PM me!

Hi there!
Wanna do read for read with me? :blush:

I’d love to :slight_smile:

i’ll do a r4r

i’ll check it out asap :relaxed:

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Glad to hear, haha :heart:
I will read your story as soon as possible.

Information about my story
Name story: Forbidden Love
Name author (so me): Lili Star
Genre: Romance and a little bit of comedy
Story style: INK
Story caption: Princess Amanda never thought that she would have feelings for a girl, which is forbidden. Until she met Vanessa, the gorgeous sister of prince Roberto who she has to marry.
Episodes: 5, but more are coming soon!
Important information: This is my first story, so it is not the best, but you can still enjoy it. There are also not many choices. CC is available in chapter 5!

My Instagram: @lili_on_episode
Here can you DM me for questions and for discussing our read for read session.

Here are some screenshots.
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By the way, can you Send me the link of your story?

there u go :slight_smile:

I have read your story and I absolutely LOVE it :heart_eyes: I cannot wait for more Chapters :two_hearts: