Ok Iโll send asap!
Sure thing! Adding you to my list. Thank you!
I would love to! 
You can send me your screenshots on whichever platform you prefer and Iโll get to your story and share my feedback here?
Hey love! Iโm done reading the first three chapters of your story! Your cover is amazing, it perfectly suits the story description. But let me get straight to the issues I found.
First, your chapters are really short. The first one literally took me only 3-4 minutes to finish. I advise you to make the chapters to at least 10-13mins long because let me be honest with you, readers like me will tend to hesitate using a pass to read next short chapters even more especially when theyโre not well-directed. The characters just appeared on to the screen, spotting issues like characters are placed so close to each other, layering issues like the MC getting up from the bed (make her from sleeping to standing up to walking to a certain spot). I know coding can be really intimidating especially when youโre doing it for the first time but with lots of practice, your directing skills will surely improve! I recommend you to watch Joseph Evans YouTube channel for coding tips and advice, it will most likely help you.
Lastly, always have someone proofread your work before publishing anything. Perhaps you can add some punctuations to your dialogues/narrations as well. There are so many people on here who are willing to help you with that.
On the brighter side, I appreciate that you gave us a little backstory on the MC and Meganโs friendship. It made me connect to the characters emotionally. I sincerely enjoyed those flashback scenes! 
Please continue writing!
Best of luck with your journey on this story and thanks for doing R4R with me! 
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Thank you! I hadnโt realized some of my directing errors before until people started giving me feedback and I really started to look around forums for tips Iโm now fixing my directing and grammar for the next episode as well as the length of the episode.
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Well, bravo! Thatโs one good way to improve your work! I wish you the best, love And youโre welcome, Iโm glad I could help!
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If you want to contact me through Instagram, it would be much easier for me. I rarely get on here, so it makes it difficult to keep up with RFRs through this platform 
@epi.sam.writes is my username @lqwalter
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Sure thing
Thank you so much for the feedback, I really appreciate it. I am planning on adding choices in the future chapters, so no worries. 
I also want to wish you the best on your story aswll, keep on writing!
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We already exchanged feedback and screenshots on Instagram but Iโll just be reposting it here on this thread
Girl, you have such a brilliant storyline! I can tell the effort of how you did on-the-ground research to your plot. It totally makes the characters realistic and well thought out! Most importantly, it makes the story really engaging (plus the mini-games!). I was fascinated by how you executed every scenes, itโs really smart and the directing was satisfying! No errors found in the chapters so kudos for the job well done!
For improvements: Though itโs not gonna make me shy away to read your future episodes, but I think you need to work on with your chapters length. I took 17-20mins to finish each chapter and Iโd say thatโs pretty long (probably because of the customization and minigames). I would suggest to make your chapters to maximum 13-15mins (based on several polls I encountered, thatโs the average duration time a person would be willing to spend in reading a chapter). This is just a suggestion tho because sometimes chapters length is one big deal for most readers on here But overall, itโs one of the stories that I would definitely watch out for! 
THANK YOU FOR THIS R4R REQUEST!
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Hello! Yes I would like that very much! Send me screenshots when youโre done and Iโll get to yours asap. 
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Okay, Will do
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Hello, I just published my story.I would like to do R4R with you for 3x3. 
And here is my story. 
Title: ๐ธ๐ ๐น๐๐๐๐๐๐๐ ๐๐ ๐ ๐ธ๐๐๐๐๐๐.
Author: Sonder. 
Genre: Drama, Romance
Style: Limelight
Story Description: ๐๐๐๐ก ๐ค๐๐ก๐ฉ ๐ฟ๐๐๐๐ ๐ ๐๐๐ ๐ก๐๐๐ ๐๐๐ ๐๐ ๐๐๐๐ ๐ก๐๐ ๐๐๐๐๐๐ข๐ ๐ ๐๐๐๐. ๐ฟ๐๐๐๐ ๐๐ ๐ ๐ ๐ก๐๐๐๐ ๐ค๐๐๐๐ ๐ค๐๐ก๐ฉ ๐ ๐๐๐๐ ๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐ข๐๐ ๐๐๐ ๐๐๐๐๐๐ข๐ ๐๐ ๐ ๐ฉ๐๐๐ ๐๐๐ ๐ก๐ ๐๐๐๐. ๐๐ฉ๐๐ ๐ฟ๐๐๐๐ ๐๐๐ ๐๐ค๐๐ฆ ๐๐๐๐ ๐ฉ๐๐ ๐๐๐ ๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐ก ๐๐๐๐ก๐ฆ ๐ก๐ฉ๐๐ฆ ๐๐๐๐๐๐๐ฆ ๐๐๐๐ก. ๐ด๐๐ ๐ก๐ฉ๐ ๐๐๐ ๐๐๐ ๐๐ ๐ฉ๐๐๐ ๐๐๐ ๐๐ ๐ฉ๐๐ ๐ ๐๐๐๐ก. (๐ฟ๐ฟ) ๐ถ๐ฉ๐๐๐๐๐ ๐ค๐๐๐ ๐๐ ๐๐๐ก๐ก๐๐ ๐๐๐ ๐ก๐ฉ๐๐๐ ๐ค๐๐๐ ๐๐ ๐๐๐๐ฆ ๐๐๐ ๐๐๐ฃ๐ ๐๐๐ก๐๐๐๐ ๐ก. (๐ผ ๐๐๐๐ ๐ ๐ก๐๐๐๐๐ ๐ค๐๐ก๐ฉ ๐๐ข๐๐ก๐๐๐๐ ๐๐๐ฃ๐ ๐๐๐ก๐๐๐๐ ๐ก๐ ๐ข๐๐๐๐๐๐๐ ๐ก๐๐.)
๐ณ๐๐๐ ๐๐ ๐๐๐ ๐บ ๐๐๐๐บ๐ ๐๐๐ป๐๐๐พ๐ / ๐๐บ๐ฟ๐๐บ / ๐๐บ๐๐๐๐๐พ๐ ๐๐๐๐๐. ๐ณ๐๐๐ ๐๐ ๐๐๐๐พ ๐ ๐๐๐พ ๐บ ๐๐๐๐๐ ๐บ๐ป๐๐๐ ๐๐๐ ๐ผ๐บ๐ ๐๐๐ ๐๐๐๐๐๐ ๐ผ๐๐บ๐๐บ๐ผ๐๐พ๐๐ ๐ผ๐บ๐ ๐ฟ๐บ๐ ๐ ๐๐ ๐ ๐๐๐พ ๐พ๐บ๐ผ๐ ๐๐๐๐พ๐ ๐บ๐๐ฝ ๐๐๐ ๐๐๐๐๐ ๐๐๐พ๐๐ ๐๐พ๐ ๐บ๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐.
๐๐ต๐ผ๐ถ๐ฐ๐ฒ๐ ๐๐ถ๐น๐น ๐ฏ๐ฒ ๐บ๐ฎ๐๐๐ฒ๐ฟ ๐ฎ๐ป๐ฑ ๐๐ต๐ฒ๐ฟ๐ฒ ๐ถ๐ ๐ฎ ๐ฝ๐ผ๐ถ๐ป๐ ๐๐๐๐๐ฒ๐บ ๐๐ต๐ถ๐ฐ๐ต ๐๐ถ๐น๐น ๐ฐ๐ต๐ฎ๐ป๐ด๐ฒ ๐๐ต๐ฒ ๐ฝ๐ฎ๐๐ต ๐๐ผ๐โ๐น๐น ๐๐ฎ๐น๐ธ.
Story Link: http://episodeinteractive.com/s/4728753642864640
Instagram: @sonder.episode
Stay Safe 
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Thanks for requesting! Kindly send me screenshots from three chapters and Iโll get to your story asap!
Okay darling, Iโm done reading the first three chapters of your story.
Iโd say the scenes are by far pretty decent for a story that depicts the dark and dangerous world of mobsters. There was minimal character development shown for LI during the first three chapters but you really did well introducing the personality and characteristics of the girl MC! Iโm pretty sure youโll be able to give us more details about her LI on future chapters and Iโm looking forward to that!
For improvement: First, let me tweak your story decsription:
Meet Lenka Redstone and NY mobster Niklaus Reece. When Lenka ditched her own engagement party, fate crosses their paths. And the man loses himself in her scent.
Remember to use the same tense throughout the clause.
On imminent future, itโs best to look for someone who will do beta-reading before publishing your scripts. I spotted grammar mistakes and itโs kinda a lot. There are many people on here who are very much willing to proofread otherโs works for free. They will surely help you to improve your narrations/dialogues!
The directing is nice, although there are few times I spotted some layering issues. But overall, the transitions and zooming effects were amazing.
Lastly, I feel like the first two chapters end so suddenly. I somehow wish they have better outros. Itโs nice to have a cliffhanger that leaves the readers in suspense and or with a plot that is left unresolved. Nevertheless, I like how you ended chapter 3, it totally gave me a reason to continue reading!
I wish you the best of luck on your journey with this story! Thanks for doing R4R with me
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Thanks babe! Give me a couple of hours to send my screenshots and feedback
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