Reading & Critiquing (temp. closed)

[LaurieKrisette]

Hi guys! So, I noticed our community does a lot of read for reads. Now, I think this is a GREAT way to promote your story… New or old. As wonderful as it may sound, some will read your story and tell you it’s good. I suppose their being nice but real writers want to improve. They want criticism and know how to take it like a G. Both the Good and the crappy stuff.

I created this topic so, writers can gain REAL HONEST criticism.
Post your story down below…
Everyone can have a share in reading each others stories.
And NO that doesn’t mean bully each other but be honest on your reviews… K?

Note: This post is for more for reviews than reads. If you just want readers, write it in your post. I’d rather NOT waste time writing a whole review if you just want a read.

Here’s my story… Tell me what you think.
And if you’re not afraid post yours as well.

Title: Springs Evening: Humble Beginnings
Genre: Fantasy
Style: INK
Description: Rachel’s always dreamed of being a princess. When she finally gets the chance to enter the palace. Will her fantasy become a reality?

Link:

The Best Stories Are Worth Sharing: Spring's Evening: Humble Beginnings

[granolias]

Hey there! I’ve read your first chapter of your story and I’m here to give you some feedback (I won’t roast you lol). I genuinely enjoyed your pilot episode and the plot itself with Rachel striving to become a princess. On top of that, I was actually scared when the rocks hit the windows because I was reading with my earbuds at a medium-high volume.

Nice spot directing during that scene and the whole chapter by the way. I have also provided screenshots of moments that were cool/meaningful in my opinion.

Also one more thing that is my main piece of criticism (If you want to call it that).
This character lips don’t quite match her skin tone and make her lips look “Ashy/dry”. Maybe consider using terracotta or toffee as a lip color?

I’ve also noticed you put quotation marks around the speech whenever anyone is speaking. Not that it’s wrong but it isn’t necessary since the text is in a speech bubble (if it’s your writing style, sorry I offended it ).

Hopefully my feedback wasn’t mean or anything like that. Regardless, it seems like your solid to go with this story in my opinion! Continue doing what you’re doing Laurie and I’ll be reading the rest of your chapters.

[LaurieKrisette]

The funniest thing is I scared myself with the sound. I should’ve put a warning.
I was so excited I didn’t add a sound warning in.
The point about misty, was really good. I want all of the characters to look natural. That will definitely be changed.
The quotation marks have to stay, they’re just part of my originality. I don’t really like it without.

Your critiquing was on point and that was the kindest roast I’ve ever received…
Thank-you for your valuable time.

[nakiarae]

This is my first story!! So excited to see the reviews, let me know what you think.

1.Title: Envious Jealousy
2.Name of the author: nakiarae
3.Story genre: Mystery
4.Story style: Limelight
5.Story summary: Have you ever wanted to get the first person details of a murder from the victim? That is the case with Jeannie, who is the direct source! The only thing to figure out is whodunnit.
6.Link to the app: http://episodeinteractive.com/s/4890678242443264
7.No social media yet!

[Lovelylauren]

Mate Bond
“Everyone is looking for their mate, but not me”

The Best Stories Are Worth Sharing: Mate Bond (Sequel out now!!)

[Alphan]

Hey everyone!

I hope we can do a r4r!

I’d like to promote my story called Upside Down here.
Below you can find the information you need to try it out.

Author: Alphan
Story Title: Upside Down
Genre: Romance, Drama, Mystery
Style: INK
Story Description: June escaped her previous life. Will she meet people who will love her or will her old enemies destroy her again?
Story Link: http://episodeinteractive.com/s/6390501417418752
Instagram: alphan.episode

Please make sure to follow me on Instagram to contact me or for sneak peeks of the story!

I’m up for read for reads as well, contact me on Instagram for that, please!

[MysteryMaker]

Title: Mr Bond’s Murder
Author: Mystery Maker
Style: Ink
Genre: thriller (with contents of mystery)
Episodes: 5(ongoing)
Description: A snowy night, A few clues and a murder investigation, where noone is reliable to be trusted…

Link: http://episodeinteractive.com/s/6705429627011072

I would love to hear your opinion about my story

[giamorina]

I would love a critique on my story

Here’s my story:
Title: Prominent Gift
Author: Gia Morina
Genre: Fantasy/Werewolf/Drama
Description: Kidnapped at 16, Piper finally escapes after three years. She finds herself in the home of the soon to be Alpha King. What happens when her kidnappers come looking for her? How long can the Alpha King keep her protected?
Number of Episodes: 4 (Ongoing)
Instagram: gia.writes
Link to Story: http://episodeinteractive.com/s/5263005260054528

[LaurieKrisette]

Hi @nakiarae, I read ALL 3 of your current episodes. Your story is very mysterious, I have to say. I don’t really have any bad feedback as far as the storyline goes.

Some of the speechbubbles are in the wrong place. This is nothing dramatic, basically, a very quick fix, doesn’t affect the storyline much. But, it does let us readers know who’s talking.

The spot directing could also be improved. It was slightly off in some scenes, especially when the characters were running or walking.

I feel like the episodes for ME personally are a good length. I know others might complain that they’re too short but, I think they’re perfect! I’m not really a fan of super long chapters, just straight to the point.

I have to let you know, I’m not really super active on episode so, It might take me a little while before I re-read. Nothing against you.
However, when I do decide to look for a quick mystery story, I know where to look.

And I recommend this to everyone else looking for a good Mystery.

Thanks

[lawful_evil]

_Hey, can you please read my story? _

Title: Romantic Cruise
Author: Lawful Evil
Style: Ink
Genre: Romance, Drama
Episodes: 4 [Completed] 2 endings
**Description: You break up with your cheating boyfriend and go on a cruise. What will happen if you meet a mysterious dangerous man? C C **
Link: http://episodeinteractive.com/s/4697971707478016

** Give some feedback **

[Skyrenae]

Hi everyone! This is my first story, id really love if you’d check it out and leave me some feed back! Thank you.

Malikai’s the bad boy, trouble maker. Katherine is a nobody. What happens when he sets his sights on her? Can he save her?

[Yeah09]

I would love if you would review my story! Only recently published, so I need all the help I can get!

Story Title: Fractured Realms
Author: Izzy R
Genre: Romance, Adventure and Fantasy
Style: Ink
Story Description: Freezing time comes as naturally as walking to you, but what happens you’re thrown into another realm, destined to destroy the world? (LGBT)
Episodes: 1-3!
Instagram: @izzyr.reveiws
Link: http://episodeinteractive.com/s/56311274538270721

[Navya]

Would you like to read my story?

**Title: Enagaged **
Author: Navya Sallan
**Genere: Comedy **
Style: Ink
My Instagram: navya.episode
Link: https://www.instagram.com/navya.episode/

Episodes: episode 6 is OUT!

Description: what happens when you suddenly find out that you are engaged to a hot stranger in America and you are forced to move to America with him!!!

Link: http://episodeinteractive.com/s/58103226482032641

Wana read for read??
Link:https://forums.episodeinteractive.com/t/read-for-read-story-views-and-reviews-9-more-stories-to-go/5204/15

[baelogical]

Hey there, I would love it if you could check out my story!
Title: Gone Rogue
Author: Soph
Genre: Drama
Episodes: 4
Description: Rose, aka “Rogue” : undefeated bare-knuckle boxer at The Bloody Knuckle for the past three years, crosses paths with the dangerous new owners. What happens when they need her help?
Link: http://episodeinteractive.com/s/5336737542569984
Style: Ink
Read for Read: Yes! (DM on instagram if interested)
Instagram: @sophy.episode

[LaurieKrisette]

Hi @MysteryMaker thanks for being so patient!
I read 3 out of 5 of your episodes. Out of the 3 it is a bit concerning over why you don’t have more readers…I thought your story was fantastic! It is a shame that a lot of times, the best writers are overlooked on episode.

For one thing, the directing is breathtaking. My favorite scenes involved the snowy background.
I thought it gave the story more of a mysterious kind of spark to it. The music and sounds pulled me into the story more. I could tell you really took your time placing them.

One thing I had to point out, the punctuation was a bit off. On certain sentences, periods and commas were missing.

To me, the lack of proper punctuation made the speechbubbles look a little bland. That’s just my opinion.

However, I do think readers will overlook it. The story itself has a lot of potential and I can see it growing in time. (Especially, with the episode community on the hunt for good stories.)

Thanks

[LaurieKrisette]

Hi there, @Lovelylauren!
I have read 3 out of 9 of your chapters and I have to be brutally honest with you.
I don’t mean to bash you or anything like that.

Werewolf stories aren’t really my cup of tea.
A lot of them contain the same thing to me, with the forced changes, the mate bonding. Or they fall in love instantly with their mate.
I’m not really into that.
For those who are, I’m quite certain they enjoyed it.

A couple of things I had to point out…
There were a couple of punctuation errors. It wasn’t much though, I mean we’re human. (Imperfect)

The meeting in a bar to get laid; as they call it. I found that to be a little distasteful. And the main protagonist went back to the bar over and over again, meeting guys.
I know people do this in real life…Still, I don’t agree with it. One reason why I tend to avoid stories which contain that sort of content.

You mentioned the first three chapters were short and they would get longer later. I too have done that in the past, only to find that people don’t like that.
We as writers feel that we have to explain ourselves at times, but I would suggest next time not adding the note. If the reader is interested in the content, they’ll read it whether it’s long or short. If you know only 3 chapters are short and they get longer, fine. Your readers will appreciate that. No need to explain yourself.

The narration was appreciated because, I like reading. Applause for that! The way you described the wolves seeing each other, made the story come to life. It was probably the one thing that kept me reading.

I just want to mention, it’s your story and you can do what you want. This is just my personal opinion and obviously there are people who enjoy it.

Thanks

[Akanksha]

Title: Mad Love
Genre: Romance/Mystery
Author: Akanksha S.
Style: Ink
Episodes: 8 (ongoing)
Description: One day, you wake up and your mom is gone. Will you be able to find her in time and also true love along the way?

Link: http://episodeinteractive.com/s/4736906335879168

So if you’re interested in reading a story with the perfect combo: romance and mystery, check out my story Mad Love! I would appreciate it a lot! I’m definitely down for some constructive criticism, and would love to improve my story! Thanks

[emmam232484]

Please check out my story! Would mean the world to me!!

Title: H&V: The Spell Casting Roommate [LIMELIGHT]
Genre: Fantasy
Style: Limelight
Description: Skylar Newton is in for a long list of surprises when she rooms with Astra Seren for her semester abroad. (Limelight, limited customization, love interests, alternate endings)
Link: http://episodeinteractive.com/s/4894297636077568

[LaurieKrisette]

Hi @giamorina oohhhh, I have to say…

Ya got me.

I just got done talking about how I really really really don’t like werewolf stories.
But… The directing was literal FIRE
It looked so professional, it was the first thing that caught my attention.

I thought you did so well creating and designing your story.
I’am VERY against the detailed rape and things like that. (#picky. )
You did a good job incorporating the fact that hey, she was physically abused but it wasn’t graphic or anything. I appreciate that.

The storyline so far, is good, I still think the “finding your mate in an abused state” is used quite often. But, you didn’t focus on that too much.

The choices you added were fantastic! I like the fact that you gave the option to immediately fall for the guy or not. He wasn’t my cup of tea anyway but, uhhh just saying.

The little author notes were quirky and fun!

All in all, I would give your story a 10 out of 10.
I’ve read 3 out of 4 of your episodes. And I WILL be reading more.

NOTE:
On episode 1, when archie walks past piper, he’s on the right layer. He walks in front of piper.
On episode 2, the same scene, he walks behind her. Ya might want to fix that. Everything else was good though.

Thanks.

[LaurieKrisette]

Hey @lawful_evil, I’ve finished 4 out of 4 of your episodes.
The cruise idea was very creative. I love cruising, it’s very relaxing and this story brought back some memories.

The backgrounds and the cabin was beautiful.

The story plot I feel could’ve been a little better.
It did feel a little rushed. I honestly thought Caroline’s husband was cheating on her based on his conversation

The mystery of Fruity Pebbles made me upset. I really wasn’t expecting that ending.
I might play again to see what the other ending is about because, I was a little disappointed in the ending I got.

My favorite Character for sure was Caroline, her quotes about love, I completely agree with.
The video chat on the computer was really cool. I liked how you did that. The only thing is, I could see Caroline’s legs just a bit. You might want to consider zooming in a bit more.

All in all, I feel this is a good story for those who want something quick to read.
A mini story with a bit of a mysterious edge to it.

Thanks for sharing