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Story Title: No resistance
Author Name: Alyssia
Story Genre: drama
Story Description: Nichole had it bad all her life. So bad that it made her cold. Can Kevin make her change for the better? Or will he only make things worse?
Severity of Review (Easygoing, Truthful, Brutally Honest): All
Link to your story: https://episodeinteractive.com/s/5741846277193728
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This review is based on my personal opinion and is meant to provide the author with honest feedback to help them improve their story. This review is not meant to hurt anyone’s feelings or discourage them from writing.
Review for - No resistance by Alyssia
Plot (7/10): Based off your pilot chapter, I was able to get a good feel for what the plot of this story will involve. I liked how you set up your scenes in a way that showcased your characters’ personalities and also drove the plot of the story forward.
Directing (6/10) Your directing was pretty good. I didn’t notice any times where spot directing was off and the characters didn’t randomly pop up on the screen at all. Your zooms and transitions were great, allowing the storyline to flow well from one scene to the next. Your walking animations could have been a little smoother in order to better show the directions your characters were walking in. For instance, in the scene where the MC jumps into bed, she doesn’t walk diagonally but walks sideways and then backwards instead. Just sprucing this up a bit will help clear up the visual aspects of your story. There were also a few instances where characters were doing talking animations when they were not talking. When Nichole falls out of bed, she continues doing a talking animation even though she is not talking anymore. Also, during the dressing game before they go out partying, it might help to have Nichole stop doing the talking animation so readers can better see what they are customizing. All in all, just a few tweaks will help to make your directing amazing!
Spelling/Sentence Structure/Grammar (8/10): Your spelling, grammar, and sentence structure were all executed fairly well. There were a few errors that I noticed.
When Nichole says, “Sorry in advanced I’m a very bold person…”
A better way of phrasing this would be… “Sorry in advance, I’m a very bold person…”
When Heaven says… “The feelings mutual babe.”
A better way to phrase this would be… “The feeling is mutual, babe.”
When the teacher says, “Now that there’s no distractions let’s discus last nights homework.”
A better way of phrasing this would be… “Now that there’s no distractions*,* let’s discuss last night’s homework.”
When Psycho says he wants to get “waisted,” I believe it should be “wasted” instead.
Also, I think you may need to remove or censor most of the swear words in your story due to Episode’s new guidelines. I don’t want to see them remove your story because I really enjoyed it!
Diversity (6/10): Based on the pilot chapter, there was a decent amount of diversity amongst your characters. However, there were several background characters with hijabs whose hairstyles did not fit into them. This looked a little awkward so maybe changing their character details would help this appear better to readers.
Character Development (9/10): Based off the first chapter, a reader can learn a good amount of information about Nichole, the MC. We find out about her past and how that has shaped her today. We also learn a good deal about her personality from her interactions with the other characters. This chapter also revealed a nice amount of information about your supporting characters, especially Heaven.
Length of Chapter (9/10): This chapter was a nice length! It took me approximately 15 minutes to read it. Personally, I have seen that most readers like when authors aim to make their episodes about 15-20 minutes so you did a great job keeping it within a reasonable time frame!
Choices (6/10): This chapter contained very few choices besides the dressing/customizing games. If you want to refrain from having too many choices so that you can write your story how you envision it, maybe let your readers know about this in an author’s note.
Use of Sounds and Music (7/10): Your story had a decent usage of sounds! I wish there had been a few more used to help further enhance the readers’ immersion in your story.
Genre Fit (10/10): This story was placed in the Drama genre and it definitely belonged there. All the events that occurred in your first chapter really fit well into this genre.
Story Description (10/10): Your story description is great and definitely gave me some insight as to what to expect from your story. It really grabbed my attention because I wanted to find out what happened in Nichole’s past and how Kevin might change her future.
Overall Score (78/100): 78%
Thank you for requesting. I hope this review has helped you! If you have any questions about this review, I’d be happy to try to answer them. I hope to see your story continue in the future! If you would still like your review to be posted on Instagram, can you please send me your username? 
This review is based on my personal opinion and is meant to provide the author with honest feedback to help them improve their story. This review is not meant to hurt anyone’s feelings or discourage them from writing. Since you requested it to be “brutally honest,” this review will reflect that.
Review for - The Spotlight by Jesse W (@Jess_epi)
Plot (9/10): Based off your pilot chapter, I was able to get a great feel for what the plot of this story will involve. All the events that occurred in this episode helped to further the progression of the plot and none of them seemed out of place. Just this first chapter left me wanting to read more to find out what will happen when the band officially starts working together again.
Directing (6/10) Your directing was pretty good. I didn’t notice any times where spot directing was off and the characters didn’t randomly pop up on the screen at all. Your walking animations were all very smooth which helped the story flow better. There were a few times where your zooms were a bit off though. For instance, at the band meeting, even though Johnny is talking, the camera zooms in on Xander instead. Then, when Xander is talking, the zoom is on Trinity instead. Also, at the beginning of the episode, when Trinity and Xander are talking to Carl, Trinity faces right instead of left (the direction where Carl is). Last, some of your speech bubbles were not always pointing at the right person or were blocking a character’s face. All in all, just a few tweaks will help to make your directing amazing!
Spelling/Sentence Structure/Grammar (9/10): Your spelling, grammar, and sentence structure were all executed very well. I didn’t notice any major errors so there was nothing to distract readers from the plot of your story. Great job!
Diversity (6/10): Based on just the pilot chapter, there was a decent amount of diversity amongst your background characters. However, I would definitely have liked to have seen more representation in your main cast.
Character Development (9/10): Based off the first chapter, a reader can learn a good amount of information about Lacie, the MC. We find out about her past relationship with Xander and how she related to the other members of the band in their glory days. We also learn a good deal of information about her present and what her goals are now. There was also a nice amount of information given about the other band members as well, allowing a reader to really connect with all of the important characters right away.
Length of Chapter (9/10): This chapter was a great length! It took me approximately 17 minutes to read it. Personally, I have seen that most readers like when authors aim to make their episodes about 15-20 minutes so you did a good job keeping it within a reasonable time frame!
Choices (9/10): This chapter contained quite a few choices which is great considering it was only the pilot episode! I liked how your choices impact the progression of the story and your relationships with the other band members. A lot of readers love when the choices they make impact the story so keep up the great work on that!
Use of Sounds and Music (9/10): Your use of sounds and music was excellent! They all complemented your scenes and allowed the reader to feel more immersed in your story. None of your sounds or choices of music ever felt out of place or excessive.
Genre Fit (10/10): This story was placed in the Drama genre and it definitely belonged there! All the events that occurred in your first chapter really fit well into this genre and I believe that will remain true as you continue your story.
Story Description (10/10): Your story description is great and definitely clued me in on what to expect from your story. It grabbed my attention right away because I wanted to see what dramatic changes are in store for Lacie.
Overall Score (86/100): 86%
Thank you for requesting. I hope this review has helped you! If you have any questions about this review, I’d be happy to try to answer them. I can’t wait to see where you will take this story and the band in the future! This review will also be posted on my Instagram, @writer.ren.episode, later tonight
Tysm for this review! I didn’t notice those errors I appreciate you pointing them out! This is very helpful, I definitely will benefit from this <3
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I’m so glad it was helpful! Thank you for requesting!
Yazz 
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Still open for 2 more requests
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Story Title: Dirty Deeds
(This story is available in Limelight and Ink)
Author Name: stormy_writes
Story Genre: Romance
Story Description: Chasity is stuck between doing what’s right and what has to be done. Will one bad decision leave her in hot water, or will it give her the big break she needs?
Severity of Review (Easygoing, Truthful, Brutally Honest): Brutally Honest
Link to your story: http://episodeinteractive.com/s/6011710119149568
Where would you like your review posted (Instagram or the forums or both): Both
instagram handle is @stormy_writes
Password: fall
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Your request has been accepted and should be complete within a few days! Would you prefer me to read the Ink or LL version?
Which ever one you prefer is fine with me. Also, the link to my story is now included in my post. Thank you so much!
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Okay, great! Thanks!
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I’d like one. I like how thoroughly you do this.
Author: TamiRose
Genre: Romance
Review: Brutally Honest
You can post on both if you’d like
PW: fall
Lost Summer Love
Crazy love. Wacky friends. Unnecessary drama. How will Evan and Sierra make it through this crazy thing called, life
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Thank you ma’am 
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This review is based on my personal opinion and is meant to provide the author with honest feedback to help them improve their story. This review is not meant to hurt anyone’s feelings or discourage them from writing. Since you requested it to be “brutally honest,” this review will reflect that. I read the Limelight version of your story
Review for - Dirty Deeds by stormy_writes
Plot (9/10): Based off your pilot chapter, I really really like your plot! It was very intriguing and had me wondering what would happen next during each scene. You took on some real, serious issues in this story and it definitely worked to your benefit! Great job!
Directing (9/10) Your directing was great! I didn’t notice any times where spot directing was off and the characters didn’t randomly pop up on the screen at all. Your walking animations were all very smooth which helped maintain the flow of your story. Your zooms and transitions were executed well and didn’t glitch at all. Your speech bubbles were typically placed in the right spot and never blocked any of the character’s faces. All these factors helped make your story very visually appealing to read!
Spelling/Sentence Structure/Grammar (8/10): Your spelling, grammar, and sentence structure were executed fairly well. There were a few instances where apostrophes were missing from words indicating possession so just checking these over well definitely help. The only other error I noticed was when Chasity says… “Maybe I should have excepted Professor Spring up on his offer for help.”
A better way to phrase this would be… “Maybe I should have accepted Professor Spring’s offer to help me.”
Diversity (8/10): Based on just the pilot chapter, there was a decent amount of diversity amongst your characters. I would definitely have liked to have seen a little more representation but maybe this will change in future episodes.
Character Development (10/10): Based off the first chapter, a reader can learn a large amount of information about Chasity, the MC. From her abusive boyfriend, to her past and present standing with alcohol, to her struggles in school, to her money problems, to her family problems, there is an ample amount of information given about her. I really appreciated this because it truly allowed me to gain a better understanding of her character and motivations. It’s very hard to get readers to really feel for your characters in just the pilot chapter, but you had me experiencing so many emotions for Chasity so great job on that!
Length of Chapter (9/10): This chapter was a great length! It took me approximately 16 minutes to read it. Personally, I have seen that most readers appreciate when authors aim to make their episodes about 15-20 minutes so you did a great job keeping it within a reasonable time frame!
Choices (8/10): There weren’t really many choices in this episode. However, I don’t think it would be necessary to add any in because your story flowed so well on its own.
Use of Sounds and Music (8/10): Your use of sounds and music in this episode was pretty good! None of your auditory effects seemed out of place or excessive at all. I would have liked maybe a few more scenes to have music or sounds in them to add to the overall feeling of the story though.
Genre Fit (9/10): This story was placed in the Romance genre and I think it belonged there. While we haven’t really seen much of a healthy romance yet, I can tell that the story will likely head in the direction of a love story.
Story Description (10/10): Your story description is very good and gave me some nice insight as to what to expect from your story. It truly sparked my interest in your story because I really wanted to find out what decision Chasity makes and what the consequences will be.
Overall Score (88/100): 88%
Thank you for requesting on my thread. I hope this review has helped you! If you have any questions about this review, I’d be happy to try to answer them. I truly loved reading this episode of your story! I will definitely be continuing it to see how all of this will play out.
This review will also be posted on my Instagram, @writer.ren.episode, very soon
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This review is based on my personal opinion and is meant to provide the author with honest feedback to help them improve their story. This review is not meant to hurt anyone’s feelings or discourage them from writing. Since you requested it to be “brutally honest,” this review will reflect that.
Review for - Lost Summer Love by TamiRose
Plot (9/10): I really liked the plot of this story so far! It was very interesting and engaging and had me wanting to see what kind of drama would occur next. I especially liked the part where Sierra finally stood up to her bullies. That was such a powerful moment and it really had me rooting for her.
Directing (7/10) Your directing was pretty good! I didn’t notice any times where spot directing was off but there were two instances where I noticed that characters randomly popped up on the screen. Here are screenshots of them…
Popping up
In the first screenshot, it appeared as if the two girls in the background randomly popped up during the scene. In the second one, it looked like Amelia popped up in the middle of the scene. This might have been a glitch on Episode’s part because my app has been acting up lately but I would recommend just going over the episode to make sure that you used the & symbol before the transition instead of the @ symbol afterwards.
Your walking animations were mostly smooth which helped maintain the flow of your story. There was one spot where your character did not do a talking animation because she was still finishing a walking one. Here is a screenshot of that…
Your zooms and transitions were well executed and didn’t glitch. Your speech bubbles were all placed in the right spot and never blocked any of the character’s faces. However, there was one instance where I think having a “narrator” speech bubble would be better than a “talking” speech bubble. Here is a screenshot of that spot…
Speech bubble
I think it would probably make more sense to have Sierra narrate this instead of say it.
All in all, just making these little changes will help make your directing look amazing!
Spelling/Sentence Structure/Grammar (7/10): Your spelling, grammar, and sentence structure were executed fairly well. There were a few instances where apostrophes were missing from words indicating possession or were placed in the wrong location so just checking these over will definitely help. There were also a few grammar and syntax errors which I have taken screenshots of and placed below…
Spelling/Grammar/Syntax
A better way to phrase this would be, “Can I… can I just show you how my life goes from bad to GREAT then back to being shi**y?”
A better way to phrase this would be, “They do not even know how to deal with their own damn problems…”
A better way to phrase this would be, “He’d better not still have feelings for her.”
A better way to phrase this would be, “Wow. I want no part of this.”
Making these few little adjustments will definitely help maintain the flow of your story better!
Diversity (10/10): Based on just the pilot chapter, I was very happy with the amount of diversity in this story! There was a great amount of representation so good job on that!
Character Development (8/10): Based off the first chapter, a reader can learn a nice amount of information about Sierra, the main character. From the interactions she has with the other characters to her internal thoughts, we learn a lot about her past and her present behavior. I really appreciated how she developed just in this one chapter from a quiet, shy girl who kind of let others step all over her to actually asserting herself a bit. However, I would have liked to have learned just a little more information about the other characters such as Kelsey.
Length of Chapter (9/10): This chapter was a great length! It took me approximately 20 minutes to read it. Personally, I have seen that most readers appreciate when authors aim to make their episodes about 15-20 minutes so you did a nice job keeping it within a reasonable time frame that readers will want to continue.
Choices (6/10): There weren’t really any choices in this episode. Maybe adding a few to this chapter will help readers become more engaged in your story. I also understand that some authors want their stories to progress in a specific way though.
Use of Sounds and Music (8/10): Your use of sounds and music in this episode was nice! None of your music/sound effects seemed out of place or excessive. I would have liked maybe a few more scenes to have music or sounds in them to add to the feeling of your story though.
Genre Fit (10/10): This story was placed in the Romance genre and it definitely belonged there. Based off the pilot chapter alone, there were many indications that this story will lead to the progression of crush into a romance.
Story Description (10/10): Your story description is great and gave me some insight as to what to expect from your story. The ideas of “crazy love” and drama both really sparked my interest and made me want to see what your story would be like.
Overall Score (84/100): 84%
Thank you for requesting on my thread. I hope this review has helped you! I can’t wait to see where your story will go on this app! If you have any questions about this review, I’d be happy to try to answer them
Thank you so much for this review. I never expected so many good things about my story 
I will look over those mistakes and fix them. I truly appreciate it. Thank you, Ren 
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My pleasure! I can tell you put a lot of energy and time into this story. Keep up the great work! I think it has the potential to really go far