Revamped my story and would love a review, will review in return x


#1

Heya guys and gals. So I noticed that my last overlay got approved and now I’ve published my first 3 revamped chapters :smile: I would really love some feedback on them and would gladly give a review in return.

Thank you in advance!

Story link ------> http://episodeinteractive.com/s/6581290760667136

Title: Living Among The Dead
Author: Eva.T
Genre: Adventure


Review for Review x
#2

Hiii. Okay, so I feel kinda silly cuz this is the second time I’m making this topic today lol. I made one super early this morning but it showed that it had no views. I would really love to do review for reviews with people x I’ve recently revamped my story, the first 3 chapters, and would love love love some feedback on them. I’ve given about 3 others reviews but haven’t received any back so I’m gonna make more and hopefully will get one in return :slight_smile:

My story deets

Title: Living Among The Dead
Author: Eva.T
Genre: Adventure

Story link ----> http://episodeinteractive.com/s/6581290760667136

Thank you in advance xxx


#3

Hey you! I would love to!
I recently rewamped my story too so its a win win situation!

Title: Hunt or get hunted
Author: Owlquest
Genre: Adventure

Link:


#4

Awesome! Will read your story now x


#5

I’ll get started too :smiley:


#6

Okay so I’m done with your 3 chapters and I have to say I really liked it.
Overlays 10/10
Music sound 10/10
Layers 9/10 (Just one time the layers got messed up, but No biggie)
I really liked the setting and how the Main character was an ordinary girl with a Sad backstory. And can’t wait to read some more :grin:


#7

Hii, thanks for the review! Which overlay got messed up if I may ask :P. I need to fix that.

Review

What I liked

The story line is interesting so far. Your grammar is on point, hardly noticed any grammatical errors throughout all 3 chapters. I love the name Mooshy lmao! My fave character would have to be Cami, she’s funny and hardcore. Your directing was very good and overlays were used well!

What could be imrpoved?

The one thing I noticed was that the story moved along at quite a slow pace. There were many pauses. When explaining the backstory of Cami and the two MCs maybe you could have shown visually like you did with Dean Cash and when John saved Wolf and Raven from that crazy old dude. Maybe a bit more dialogue between the characters? I would like to learn more about the characters through what they say :slight_smile: and what kinda personality they have.

Overall, awesome job!

xxx


#8

Hii, thanks for the review! Which overlay got messed up if I may ask :P. I need to fix that.

Review

What I liked

The story line is interesting so far. Your grammar is on point, hardly noticed any grammatical errors throughout all 3 chapters. I love the name Mooshy lmao! My fave character would have to be Cami, she’s funny and hardcore. Your directing was very good and overlays were used well!

What could be imrpoved?

The one thing I noticed was that the story moved along at quite a slow pace. There were many pauses. When explaining the backstory of Cami and the two MCs maybe you could have shown visually like you did with Dean Cash and when John saved Wolf and Raven from that crazy old dude. Maybe a bit more dialogue between the characters? I would like to learn more about the characters through what they say :slight_smile: and what kinda personality they have.

Overall, awesome job!

xxx


#9

Thank you
:grin::grin:


#10

Hello, I revamped my story too and it had quite a bit of success so I would love to check your story out later on today!!


#11

Hope you do not mind me asking but what is it in your story you revamped?

I will tell you what I did too :sparkling_heart:


#12

I totally changed the first few chapters but still I based them on my original story line x. I’d love to read your story too x


#13

Awesome I revamped A LOT haha

So I changed the plot entirely and added new characters.