Hii, thanks for the review! Which overlay got messed up if I may ask :P. I need to fix that.
What I liked
The story line is interesting so far. Your grammar is on point, hardly noticed any grammatical errors throughout all 3 chapters. I love the name Mooshy lmao! My fave character would have to be Cami, she’s funny and hardcore. Your directing was very good and overlays were used well!
What could be imrpoved?
The one thing I noticed was that the story moved along at quite a slow pace. There were many pauses. When explaining the backstory of Cami and the two MCs maybe you could have shown visually like you did with Dean Cash and when John saved Wolf and Raven from that crazy old dude. Maybe a bit more dialogue between the characters? I would like to learn more about the characters through what they say and what kinda personality they have.
Overall, awesome job!