I am currently working on an entry into the Magicka contest! I’ve already started on the second episode, but I would feel MUCH more confident if someone could review JUST the first chapter and let me know if my story is confusing or hard to follow. If it is, I would love some constructive feedback! I just need another pair of eyes to review my work. Thank you!
It’s called “Magicka: Secret Window.”
Here is the link:
Thank you so much for your thoughts! I will take them into consideration… and I was thinking about whether I should change some things about the bartender or not. I appreciate you for the kind words, and will fix the story around the pointers you gave me. Thanks again!
Your story sounds good but my F***ing phone doesnt wanna charge.
I hate iphones
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The first thing that caught my attention is the customization
- Not all but some people like me usually like to see the skin tone ex: rose, copper,etc
- I see the customization isn’t fully updated I personally have to force myself to update them
If you need help finding the template for it you can go to Dara Amarie’s website
The second thing which is more of a slip up on the part when she’s in the club she say’s something along the lines of “how would there be a basement inside my house” but im pretty sure u meant apartment
Other than those small little minor details the story was actually great and I would read if we’re being honest
I will fix those little things… thank you for the review!
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