Can anyone preview my story, tell me what to fix, if it’s good enough to be a story…? 
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I could help you out.
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Really 
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It’s only part of the story…
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Yeah, that’s fine. Sorry for the late reply I’ve been busy.
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i’m down to read it as well 
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I can review it 
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@Akella , @d0ll.writes , @Sadie_Renee
Is this a good starting point for a story?
Please be honestt <3 
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So far it’s not too shabby! I do think it is a little weird how it just starts off. Maybe have some type of intro screen, or way to lead into the story. Even if it’s as simple as a graphic designer title. Otherwise, I’m already curious as to where this is going! Keep it up!
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Ohhh thankk youu!!! And I’ll go and make one now
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And you should make a splash for music, because I got no warning and my sound was off, so I didn’t understood some parts, and directing wasn’t really in good places sometimes, everything is happening a little too fast…
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Damn sis, I felt that. But ty
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