Reviewing some stories!

I’ve been thinking of doing reviews for a while, so I thought I’d give it a shot! Here’s a few things to consider before submitting your story:

  • I will only do not very popular or unknown stories. Don’t submit your story if it’s got 100,000,000 views
  • I am a very honest and upfront person. If you want me to bathe your story with fake compliments and tell you you did “such an amazing job” because you “worked so hard and are so special and beautiful”, then go someplace else. I want to give you honest reviews, with actual constructive criticism in order for you to grow as an author.
  • I will be reading at least 3 episodes of your story. If you want me to read more please send me a DM or a message in this thread, but that means your story review will take longer.
  • I will review any genre and any animation style.
  • I usually review grammar, dialogue, plot, continuity, spacing, characters, direction and choices. If you would like me to review something else (like cover art, art scenes, etc) or don’t want me to review a specific thing, please let me know.
  • I will publish your review either here, or just send you a dm. Please let me know which you prefer (I will send you the review through PM initially, and then ask you if you’d like me to make it public. It’s up to you).



Thanks for the thread

Please review my story The Star Necklace in PM

Title: The Star Necklace


Description: you are the most rich girl in your country in addition you’re famous but what happens when the Star Necklace uncovers your true identity

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hey there! i’d love a review! and im okay if you post it here! thanks so much! and you said yourhonest so PLEASE drag me through the mud sis :joy::grin::star_struck:

also, you can just review as many as you want to. whenever you want to stop just go ahead! :grin:

Title: Mystery on Hanging Hill Lane
Author: Marshmallow O.
Genre: Mystery, Romance, Comedy
Style: Limelight
Summary: It’s a race against time as you and your friends try to escape the mysterious sleepover that you were invited to… Read to uncover the Mystery on Hanging Hill Lane.



Chapters: 5 (More to come)

Create your own characters and Choices Matter!:blush:


What’s the maximum of episodes you’ll review?

i love getting a review to hear what i can do better in the future. i have already gotten some. they usually say the same. i wont change what i have already written. i rather focus on the future chapters

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I’d love to get a review on my story! Especially the grammar. (English is not my native language)
Title: Grid Queen
Author: Daisy_stories
Instagram: Daisy_stories
Genre: Drama (Romance & Comedy)
Episodes: 5 (ongoing)
Summery: To make a statement, you’re hiding your identity while driving in F1. But then you meet Geovanni, a 2 times world champion. Can you stay focused and win your own race? (CC)
Style: Limelight



Review through DM is fine with me.

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Can you review all 5 of my chapters?
You can post the review here :smiling_imp:
Title: Bad Behavior
Author: Aaliyah Ali
Genre: Drama
Episodes: 5 (more to come)
Summary: How will Alana, Lucas, Ryan, and Rachel survive their past and conquer their future…
If bad behavior follows them everywhere they go?
cc, and choices available!
Style: Limelight



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There is no maximum, but the more chapters you ask me to read, the more it’ll take me to review them.

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Hey I’d love if you would review my story. If you post it on here I’m fine with it :slight_smile:

Title: Triple Threat: The Life Of An Assassin

Authors: Sapp &Bhaddie

Genre: Romance/Drama

Episodes: only 1&2 are out (ongoing)

Description: Your name is Athena King, once your ex comes back into your life things begin to take a swift turn and for the worse. You get a new “job” proposal, what will you do?

Style: Ink


Instagram: @dx_bhxddie and @/epy.rat

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I would love a review! My story link is, thank you!

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Wow, thank you for this thread.
Tittle: MC: The Bar on 23rd
Author: Dr.Smile
When Blade Reynolds encountered a walking target at a bar, he should’ve been dead for the second time. Third, counting when he stupidly fell for Cathy.

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Maybe you will like it

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Hello -
I created my first story and directed it on mobile because I didn’t have access to my computer for a bit, but I would like a review with the storyline (I know the directing could use some help, rip, I’ll do it on the actual website next time), thank you.

Story: LGBTQ+ Short Story: Safe Space
Length: 3 Chapters

Author: Aralina

This is my friends story that he just published an it’s his very first story! It’s in the limelight style and it’s called “Diamond Moons” it’s spotlight and fantasy. The description is “Katherine, an orphan who lives with her uncle, has her life turned upside down after a tragedy that will lead her to uncover dark secrets of her past.” The author is Luke. There’s only three chapters.

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Here’s mine:
Title: Dreams and Nightmares
Author: Dreamer
Genre: Romance
Style: Ink
Description: Scarlet had a rough past and it looks like it’s not getting better after she was bought by some mysterious guy. Will she ever turn her life from a nightmare to a dream?
Episodes: 18 (more coming soon)
Instagram: dreamer.episode

I’d like you to read as much as possible, I understand that it’ll take a lot of time, but I really need a review about plot and character development. Also the feelings the reader gets while reading. Thanks so much for doing this! :slight_smile:

Hey! :heart:
Thank you so much for this thread! I would very appreciate if you could review my story! I don’t care if it’s bad review, because you are right, it’s with criticism that we are able to grow up and I do want to grow up in this community! I take any criticism very seriously and I make sure to apply them.
Since english is not my first language, you can skip that part. I know that I make a lot of syntaxe mistake, but I am trying my best everytime and I do have english school in real life :slight_smile: If you could review the rest, that would be awsome :heart::heart::heart:
Thank you so much for taking your time for helping small author like us ! :heart::heart:

My story is: You are my destiny
Here is the link :
Cover :

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My story - Betting on a Double by Kalani Santino.
What happens when a teenager impersonates a dangerous criminal & gets his friends and himself into trouble with the wrong people… can he save himself & his friends?

Could you review the first 3 episodes please :slight_smile:

Story name Vip Brother:Love is…
Authors name Megz_episode
Episodes 4
Instagram name megz_episode7997
How many episode you want me to review 4 are enough
Description A story about 16 celebrities who enter the house of Big Brother uder 24/7 surveillance for 2 months to win the prize of 500 000$, but before that they have to go through all challenges of Big Brother.
I would like you to promote my story.
Style LL
Cover IMG_20190223_164712
So here’s my story feel free to read it. I will be waiting for the review.

Title: Mystery on Hanging Hill Lane
Author: Marshmallow O.
Genre: Mystery, Romance, Comedy
Style: Limelight
CC : Yes, and really good, might I add. While I personally don’t like customizing every single character, this isn’t a bad thing to have in a story. This story is one those few gems where the customization you give to your character actually affect how the rest of her family looks like, which I appreciated a lot. (10/10).
Grammar : No errors, not much to say here other than good job!. (10/10)
Dialogue : Very realistic (I think, going off my very limited knowledge of what U.S kids talk like). Sometimes funny, sometimes serious, sometimes really powerful. (10/10)
Plot : I will admit, the plot is a bit of a cliche. We’ve seen the “trapped teens” scenario a lot. However, I do hope you’re able to twist this cliche around in upcoming chapters. My screenwriting teacher once told me “every story has already been told, the difference is how you decide to tell it.” (9/10)
Continuity : No errors. (10/10)
Pacing : Really good! It’s hard to make a story move along when it mainly only settles on one location, but (through ways I cannot explain here because it would spoil the story) you still managed to keep it moving and make the reader feel like every second counts, and every action progresses the story.
Characters: I won’t say anything about character development, since there’s not really much of that in the beginning of any story. Most of the characters are likeable, but I do hope you can do something to change the “mean girl” cliche. When I first saw her come up, I won’t lie, I cringed hard. Not because she’s mean, but because she feels like the same character we’ve seen over and over again.
I like what you did with the MC’s crush; give him an actual personality. That’s sometjing most episode stories seem to skim by. He actually became one of my favorite characters simply because he seemed human. Not to say the others don’t, it’s just because this usually isn’t the case with episode stories.
I also liked what you did with the “bAD Boi”. When the MC talked about how he had to do stuff for his girlfriend and he shut down her bullshit, I felt that. It’s good to see he isn’t just the “bad boy there so the MC falls in love with him and has to fight the mean girl for his attention.” He’s his own person. And just because he’s a “bAd BoI” doesn’t mean he’s a jackass. (9/10)
Direction : Amazing. Simply amazing. The scene walking around the MC’s house? Das good, man. Das real good 10/10
Choices : There was a large variety of choices. However, I couldn’t help but feel like the choices were basically the same, only with different words. Like choice 1 would be “let’s go” and the other would be “It’s-a me! Mario! Let’s-a go!” Same outcome (going somewhere) but with a different dialogue. I also found that the choices were only dialogue-based. I’m not sure if the dialogue affected character points but, if they did, it would be good to know. I would love to see some action-based choices in the future. (8/10)
**Final Score **: (the way I do this is by adding all the points and then dividing by the number of categories reviewed): (8,5/10)
I couldn’t recommend this story even more. If you like a good mystery, or simply to see some bomb-ass directing, def check this one out!