Review: Plan B
I love your use of music! It really drives the theme of the scene. Good spot placement, and very nice directing! You made great use of zooms, and this really helped to illustrate your story. The characters are good, original, and you let their personalities shine through.
There’s a couple of spelling errors that I noticed that I just wanted to draw your attention to: “under arrested” (beginning of episode 1, said by the cop) should be changed to “under arrest”, “and here we’re” should be changed to “here we are” (narrator bubble in scene with phoenix and bella), “any opinions on out biology…” change “out” to “our” (jax in forest scene)
the zoom on the forest scene with jax and bella (after asher and penny have their exchange) is a little off and I can’t see Jax that well.
The!! Use!! Of!! Mannequins!! To!! Pick!! An!! Outfit!!!
I loved this so much! I’m a very visual person, and it made the outfit choice so much more fun for me!
I really loved the car chase!
“She’s us…” change to “she’s uh…” (father, beginning of episode with maria), “Don’t play dump Bella” change dump to dumb (father and maria, after gaia goes to bed), “where arr you” change to “where are you” (emma on the phone with bella before bar scene)
at the end of the episode, Bella uses the cup for her prop. Maybe use talk_hold_drink? I understand why you would use the other animation, but just wanted to make sure you knew this was an option
“did I heard you correctly?” change to “hear” (bella and skylar first meet scene)
I loved the elevator scene so much! This was very well executed.
I didn’t run into any issues with customization, and I loved how you allow your readers to customize every character to their liking!
I really enjoyed reading your story and getting to know your characters! Thank you for sharing this with me. All of my suggestions in this review are just that! Suggestions. I don’t want you to feel like you have to change everything or anything that I pointed out. I loved it! Beautiful job.