@Days Do you think I should highlight the parts where I explain the meanings of words and the rituals used? I seen it in a lot of stories.
That sounds brilliant - it will help the reader out a lot
Thanks!
HEY!!
Iâve JUST published a new story about Greek Gods and Goddesses!
HEREâS THE INFO!!
Story Name: DEMIGODDESS
Author Name: Giselle Crescent
Genre: Fantasy
Description: Being the daughter of Zeus isnât easy. Add responsibilities and your mother having cancer topped on with a forbidden temptation to a boy who can rock your world , literally. CC
Small Cover:
Large Cover:
LINK:
Hey guys, Iâll try get back on the reviewing wagon soon. I was going through some stuff but I am back again - I may take a while but I will make sure the reviews are coming. @paumarr - I am reviewing your story atm and will post the results asap
I would love you to check out my new story
Tales from a Russian muffin
A hilarious romp with Vlad, a cheesy, well-endowed Russian guy and his wing-man. Tell all the sexy ladies that the Italian Stallion and the Russian Muffin are on the prowl!http://episodeinteractive.com/s/5223230874189824
I will read yours as well
Hey. I would love for you to review my story.
Hereâs the details to my story in case you want to check it out.
Author: S_Unique
Title: The Four Horsemen
Genre: Fantasy
Style: Ink
Description: 4 Sins. 4 Angels fell. 4 Horsemen rose. A curse was casted. And the battle of good vs evil is about to begin. CC/ Choices matter
Link: http://episodeinteractive.com/s/5482099054608384
Review for @paumarr
âThe Nation D: Moon Eyesâ
Episode One:
- Love the splashes and the use of music!
- CC is a plus point for some readers!
- Be careful with zone panning for some scenes, itâs a nice technique but be careful because on one of the scenes I could see a black screen.
- HOLOGRAM
- Your story is very pretty - itâs a very nice story to look at.
- I know you mentioned English is not your first language, but I spotted a few grammatical issues - here are a few corrections :
âWhere is he?â
âYou have the right to remain silent.â
ââŠonly way to save him from deathâ - Loved the custom backgrounds and loved the concept regarding the colour change of his eyes.
- Advanced directing is done nicely and brilliantly done - speech bubbles (positioning).
Episode Two:
- Amazing use of music and sound in the story!
- Love the dystopian YA element to this story.
- The plot is very unique and love the twists & turns in the story!
- Found the overall plot very interesting so far, it was pretty intriguing
- I spotted minor spelling and grammar, like âcommon, donât be that stupid to believe you know himâ but I would recommend "Come on, are you stupid enough to believe you know him?"
- Loved the banter between Oliver and Heather
- With the spot directing, Iâd recommend you make Heather walk to the same spot but in a different zone when she walks off - to clarify:
@HEATHER spot 0.222 654 789 in zone 1 when she was talking to Oliver
When she walks off do @HEATHER walks to spot 0.222 654 789 in zone 2 - Loved the directing and backgrounds
Episode Three:
- I really liked how you provided multiple perspectives giving us an idea of what goes through the other charactersâ minds.
- Also, loved how this episode is an opportunity to get to know Grant a bit more too!
- Loved the details in the story like about the chemical that makes you forget
- Very interesting episode and was enjoyable to read!
General Comments:
I love the aesthetic of the story - it is so beautiful and I love the plot as well as the mixture of genres. Muy bien!
Sorry guys I have been AWOL - life can be a jerk and I have been active in forums but I could not bring myself to use my energy to review stories.
Thanks for your patience @paumarr - much love to you and the others who are waiting too I give you my love!
Thank you so much for this!
Send me a fanmail once you read my story .
Title of the story : Trail Of Tears
Name of the author : Cindy
Story genre : Drama/Romance
Description : A girl who goes through a lot in her life. Some days are good and some days are bad she wants to just be a normal girl that does not have to run away from her problems. CC
Link : http://episodeinteractive.com/s/5548954080247808
Style : Ink
Episodes : 16
Can you please PM me the review.
Hi! It would be amazing if you could review my story!
Name: Girl of Deception
Number of episodes: 7 episodes
Author: IDONTKNOW
Genre: Adventure
Description: Aria Lamar has is all. Sheâs rich, beautiful and smart. But sheâs a selfish arrogant jerk. Little does she know thatâs all about to change.CC in episode 6 choices matter
Iâd love some feedback, if youâre still reviewing stories!
Link: http://episodeinteractive.com/s/5040097505705984 1
Story: BLACK BETTY
Genre: Comedy
Plot: Betty is a small town girl with big dreams of becoming a rock star. Navigating stardom, relationships, fans, and partiesâŠWill she make it or break it? CC
Review for @JannahJackson
âStay Strong, Sistersâ
Note for everyone as well as @JannahJackson
OMG I cringed at how long ago you requested a review - nearly a month ago! (I am so sorry for being off time with all these reviews, I have been going through the process of completely revamping my story which has been pretty time-consuming as well).
Episode One:
- Loved the beginning of the episode - it was very cute and reminded me of sitcom intros haha
- The diversity of the characters is very good and I am glad to see that there is a lot of information about the culture as well as being given the choice to be informed about the culture.
- Great use of music and sound effects as well!
- I really liked how you captured Singaporean life and what an interesting country to write about!
Episode Two:
- For some parts of dialogue, theyâre in a foreign language so you can perhaps use a readerMessage translating what is said as the foreign languages does take up quite a bit of dialogue.
- I love how youâve captured the difficulties of each of the girls as well
- Not sure, but with the spot directing, perhaps the girls should be a bit taller - they look quite small in comparison to other characters so perhaps make them a bit bigger?
- Loved the humour in the story as well!
- Iâd recommend breaking up some dialogue into smaller pieces - generally the length of dialogue for each piece is fine but there are some pieces that could be broken into smaller chunks
- When Diya Lavanya goes to her room and gets changed, I spotted that when she leaves then comes back her size changes - to amend this maybe do:
@DIYA LAVNANYA enters from left to screen center
WHEN SHE GETS CHANGED
@DIYA LAVANYA enters from right to screen center
- Loved the reveal, and actually, Iâd recommend using varied zooms as well! However, your directing is generally pretty good.
- Great cliffhanger at the end haha
Episode Three:
- Wow, what an action-packed episode!
- Lol Diya got tricked!!
- When Diya talks about knowing the bank details, she is off-screen so you may have to do @cut to zone 3
- Overall, a very emotional and sweet episode.
- Again, Iâd recommend adding some zooms as it would help with the overall mood of the story as it does have quite a sitcom/slice of life vibe to it
- This is more of a general note, but maybe have some splashes and a cover to help clean the episodes up and helps it look more professional.
General comments:
Great plot, very informative about Islam as well as Singaporean customs and great use of humour as well as sound. Well done
@gisellec Hey, I noticed that your story got fully published and the way I am doing the reviews are in the chronological order of the thread. Youâd kindly notified me that your story was published at a later date, so I may provide your review later. All the best and loved your previous story so cannot wait to check this one out!
[DEMON GOD]
Author: E.Z.
Genre: Fantasy
Style: Ink
Chapters: 8 (on going)
Instagram: @e.z.episode
Description: He starved himself for three hundred years in order to abide by a womanâs promise. Everyone in Devildom is waiting for him to die.
Link: http://episodeinteractive.com/s/4678673313693696
Thank you so much!!
Review for @Madalynn
âPlan Bâ
Episode One:
- I have to say this! Your covers are absolutely gorgeous and I wouldnât be shocked if they attract you quite a lot of reads.
- Loved how well the overlaysâ direction was done and the range of them from the barf to the car haha
- Itâs pretty evident a lot of effort has been put into this story and it shines through your story!
- In some points of the story, I found that some of the characters were popping on screen (Iâll give some examples to clarify) BUT the character popping thing didnât bother me that much because I was pretty into the story so it would help refine the storyâs quality.
- I recommend avoiding using âAndâ and âButâ at the beginning of sentences - Iâd recommend using synonyms.
- With the character popping I spotted it when Bella is getting driven to her university - so Iâd recommend doing:
@BELLA spot xxx.yyy.zzz
BELLA (talk_call_out)
[Insert dialogue here] - Overall plot is interesting with a dash of humour too.
Episode Two:
- Fantastic use of zooming and directing from the beginning again
- I was going to continue reviewing it but the app is acting up with the speechbubbles - donât worry, Iâll see if I can fix it soon.
thank youuâ:heart: