Riley's Constructive Criticism

I’m here to read the first chapter of your story along with feedback and screenshots. THIS IS NOT A R4R.


You could review mine if you would like!
Title: Because Of You (Limelight)
Genre: Drama (But it has Comedy, Romance, and Drama
Episodes: 5 Ongoing
Description: Alyssa’s dream has always been living alone in college and accomplishing all her dreams, but then when Alyssa achieves her dream someone gets in her perfect plan… Grey Jensen.
Choices: Some choices DO matter!
Style: Limelight


LMAO the first episode is bad but anyways you could read it!

Intro: Kind of began not so smoothly.

Middle: The transitions were kind of off but it was good!

End: I would recommend doing an outro or something

The plot got through to the reader? :heavy_check_mark:
The reader had customization? :heavy_check_mark:
Transitioned smoothly? :-1:
Storyline didn’t relapse? :heavy_check_mark:
Overall score 1-5
4 (◕દ◕)

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Tysm, lol those transitions I made were probably unnecessary!

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You can review my story if you want :slight_smile:
COVER DRAWN BY: Pyronayniadraws on Tumblr.
TITLE: Your Woman
Genre: Romance
Story Description: Her eyes are always in books or her studies; never caught by someone else. After being told to tutor Hazel, a stubborn hot-head, she finds something more intriguing.
INSTAGRAM: @wesley.episode



Hey! There is my story :blush:

Title- Avatar ENG

Small Cover- 5983456f1bb12bf6321201db31bb2af0801daa29_2_1380x816

Large Cover-Avatar_ENG_posterThumb_Zg6mjPbhYE

Short description of your story - Theodore Malone. A teenager who inherited the Avatar’s power. He will face tough challenges, reconciliation of being Avatar and Theo, getting to know his powers, keeping order in his life and keeping secret who he is. Last year at school, exams and friends who start to think that something is wrong.He will have a lot of fights, defeats, problems …

**Link to your story-**

Author - Episode_Polska

My story: © Tribe of Malapinchi
Author: Jannah Jackson
Genre: Thriller/Mystery/Horror/Fantasy/Adventure
Description: Toss into a land of the sun, magic, lies and dark secrets in Asia. Can you survive, solve the havoc and save everyone before it’s too late? CharacterCustomization
Episodes: 5/6


I will read yours now!

I would love it if you could give feedback for my story :))
Story - Ghost of Mona
Genre - Mystery
Description - Jenny thought that she was a normal girl but one night she found out that she could…
Style - Ink
Link -

Intro: Loved it! I like how you gave character to the mc.

Middle: The transitions were great!

End: It was overall great!

The plot got through to the reader? :heavy_check_mark:
The reader had customization? :-1: :
Transitioned smoothly? :heavy_check_mark: :
Storyline didn’t relapse? :heavy_check_mark:
Overall score 1-5
5 (◕દ◕)

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Wow, your cover it’s beautiful, do you made it?

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I will read yours next

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Intro: Loved it! I like the little intros you gave to all the friends

Middle: The transitions were great! So were the overlays

End: It was super good!

The plot got through to the reader? :heavy_check_mark:
The reader had customization? :heavy_check_mark: :
Transitioned smoothly? :heavy_check_mark: :
Storyline didn’t relapse? :heavy_check_mark:
Overall score 1-5
4 1/2 (◕દ◕)

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Thank you! and no, I commissioned my friend to make it for me :smiley:

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Thank you so much!! <3

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Could you please read my story and tell my what you think also if you can help with some directing tips then please do.
-Maggie M.
Genre: Thriller/horror
description: a normal family discovers a unexpected dangerous force, will they survive?
Episodes: 3 so far


I would love for you to read mine.
Title. Beyond repair
Plot. After a tragic accident Lola moves out of her hometown hoping to find herself again, but she finds someone else instead. Is Lola capable of love or is she broken beyond repair?
Plot. Romance
Author. Giana.
Episodes. 4
Link. 3

Story: The perfect crime
Genre: Mystery
Author: Steph
Description: The perfect crime does not exist… RIGHT?!
Find the clues, solve the case, and find the killer … before he kills YOU!
choices matter in this story!
Cover: image

here’s mine. U can try it if u want.
It’s called " Black Hearts, Golden Desires"

  • Story Description: Nand,a princess of Solataria,is trained to protect her family and kingdom. What will happen if an old enemy arises for revenge?Will Nand be able to handle the storm coming her way?
  • Link:
  • genre: Fantasy
  • Story Status: Ongoing
  • Chapters : 8

Hi, this isn’t a story review necessarily so if you don’t want to answer this no problem, but I’m trying to give my character a smooth, short and sharp quick-hitting way of saying “I’m no longer Christian!” This character is very angry and talking to her mother.