Can someone help me improve the coding of this scene:
EXT. FLOWER GARDEN - DAY
@SOPHIA stands screen center AND SOPHIA faces left
@EMMA stands screen left AND EMMA faces right
&EMMA is idle_happy
SOPHIA (talk_greet)
Hey!
SOPHIA (talk_gossip)
No worries, it’s all good!
EMMA (talk_sheepish)
How are things at home?
SOPHIA (talk_unsure)
Well… I think mom’s depressed.
EMMA (talk_awkward)
Why do you think that?
SOPHIA (talk_unsure)
Well…
SOPHIA (talk_sad)
I went to ask her for something last night, and saw Marco comforting her while she cried.
EMMA (talk_sad)
Anything else?
SOPHIA (talk_unsure)
She said she’s a bad mom.
EMMA (arms_crossed)
(Well, she’s not wrong.)
SOPHIA (talk_sad_timid)
And I just see her with a sad look sometimes, like she isn’t truly happy.
EMMA (talk_sad)
Oh…
EMMA (talk_sheepish)
Well, what should we do, Soph?
SOPHIA (talk_sad_clutch)
I’m not sure.
EMMA (talk_exhausted)
Well, we should do something.
SOPHIA (talk_unsure)
I know.
EMMA (talk_shrug)
What if you took her out for a day of fun?
SOPHIA (talk_sad)
I think she wants to mend her relationship with YOU.
EMMA (talk_sad_clutch)
I’m not ready for that yet, Soph.
EMMA (talk_sad_timid)
I can’t.
SOPHIA (talk_angry)
It’s not that you can’t, it’s that you WON’T.
EMMA (talk_sad)
No, I can’t
EMMA (talk_sad)
The stress would be too much for the twins.
EMMA (talk_sad_timid)
I love them so much already.
EMMA (talk_sad)
I don't wanna risk losing them.
EMMA (talk_angry)
And I won't risk losing them for a mother who doen't care!
EMMA (talk_arms_crossed_angry)
And I'll be better than that!
&SOPHIA is deepbreath
NARRATOR (SOPHIA)
She was saying that out loud, trying to convince herself.
NARRATOR (SOPHIA)
That’s why she said everything out loud and looked at the sky and ground. Anywhere but another person’s gaze.
NARRATOR (SOPHIA)
And I know what mom did was wrong, but Em should forgive her.
NARRATOR (SOPHIA)
Maybe noy now, but some time.
EMMA (talk_sad)
She doesn’t even wanna be in their lives, Soph…
SOPHIA (talk_sad_timid)
That… you don’t know that…
EMMA (talk_sad_clutch)
She told me that before I moved out.
EMMA (arms_crossed_angry)
(So what?! You’re on her side now!?)
EMMA (talk_angry)
So what!?
EMMA (talk_angry)
You’re on her side now?
EMMA (talk_angry_accuse)
Instead of the twin you made miserable even when she was depressed?
SOPHIA (talk_angry)
That’s not what I said!
SOPHIA (talk_angry)
I’m trying to fix our broken family!
SOPHIA (talk_angry)
And I understand that it’s hard for you!
SOPHIA (talk_angry)
It’s hard for me too!
SOPHIA (talk_angry)
But it’s not impossible, and you won’t even TRY after you give birth?!
SOPHIA (talk_angry)
That’ not fair!
SOPHIA (talk_angry)
To her or your children!
EMMA (talk_arms_crossed)
I’m only thinking about my girls.
EMMA (talk_angry)
Not their grandma who doesn’t care!
SOPHIA (talk_angry)
You don’t know that!
EMMA (talk_angry)
YES I DO!
EMMA (talk_angry)
SHE KICKED ME OUT AT THE BEGINNING OF MY PREGNANCY!
SOPHIA (talk_angry)
THAT DOESN’T MEAN SHE HASN’T CHANGED HER MIND!
@EMMA is idle_wounded
EMMA
(Owe!)
EMMA
I-
EMMA
I think my water just broke!
SOPHIA (talk_startled)
Okay!
SOPHIA (talk_sheepish)
Let’s get into the car, and I’ll call Felix!
EMMA
O-Okay…
@EMMA is deepbreath
@EMMA is deepbreath
@EMMA is deepbreath
@EMMA is deepbreath
SOPHIA (talk_unsure)
Maybe I should help you!
EMMA (idle_wounded)
You think!
SOPHIA (talk_sheepish)
Come on, sis.
@SOPHIA exits left AND EMMA exits left AND EMMA is walk_exhausted
@transition fade out black
P.S. I had someone helping me improve all the scenes, but she’s hardly ever available anymore