@alexwoods here¨s your review!
I love your covers! They are so cute and really beautiful!!
I love the animations, and all the different backgrounds you use to introduce the reader into the story!
Okay, so the first episode was kinda short, I get the concept of it, I’m still a bit confused, it’s build up more like a mystery. Anyway, the first episode does get you interested in the story, some parts are a bit … “dry” and I don’t mean the humor in it, that¨s quite good, I always love stories that give me a good laugh!
I decided o read the 2nd episode too, since I found the 1st one too short to actually write much about it, ah, the only thing I hope is, that it won’t get too confusing with the changing of the characters that we (the readers) play as.
There are some grammatical mistakes, but it’s nothing serious, it’s those little mistakes everyone makes while fast-writing. There is some missing punctuation too.
Ice cream animations -best idea I’ve heard yet!
Sooo… The spot placements of your characters could be better, like their size and things, Don’t forget that the further away someone stands the smaller they are and not the other way around! (I see mistakes like that a lot actually, but it’s an easy fix)
So uh, yeah, I guess that’s all I have to say. :relaxed
P.S. you have some great endings, and I’ll keep on reading your story
Here is my story
Title : Paradise
Author : Maggy
Genre : Fantasy
Style : Limelight
Number of episodes : 10 (more episodes coming soon)
Instagram : maggy.episode
Description : A young adult called Fidelia is about to become a Goddess, she has to follow the prophecy. Fidelia is strong and independent, fun, and a crazy party girl. Will she accept her faith?
Link : http://episodeinteractive.com/s/4807228412788736
hi! I would love some feedback
You, Me And The Beat by Anna
hope you will enjoy
Hey @RIAwriter - i would definitely check the mistakes and try to correct them! Thankyou so much for the review and compliments.
@OhhGlam26 I’ve got your review!
The template for customizing the mc is not up to date (I don’t know if you use the updated ones in episode 3, but I’ll just leave this here), I’ll give you a link where you can find new templates but you have to give CREDIT if you use them!!
Multiple Character Customization Templates (INK & Limelight)
I said it once before that I’m more into choosing from 3 outfits, otherwise, I get bored, but that’s just my opinion.
I’ve got nothing else to complain about … Actually, I’m interested in how the story will unfold… Y’all have to stop sending me those good ass stories to review, I don’t have enough passes
Hahahahaha thanks! That’s a really great review! And I’ll take your advice thanks so much!!
Last week I launched my story:
Loveaholic, The man of my dreams
My author name is:
-> In your dreams you will meet your true love. You would do anything to make your dream come true. Does he really exist?
Title: DD: Dancing Hearts
Short Description: When Baby heads to NYC after graduation, she’s brought to an alleyway where people gather at night to dance. Baby’s finally having fun, so what’s the problem? Well, Baby’s strict and controlling parents have quite the bad habit of pushing her too hard. So hard, she falls right into the arms of Johnny. But maybe that’s all the two of them need in order to break free from the cages they’ve been trapped in, and just dance.
Other Info: This is my first ever Episode contest entry. It’s only three chapters and it’s completed. You can customize Baby and Johnny. Your choices matter.
Here’s the cover:
Also, thanks for allowing me to share my story here @RIAwriter !
Tittle: Search for love.
Author Name: Sigma.fr
Story Description :Your life turns upside down when you try to escape from a toxic situation! Can you find the love you are looking for trying to escape?
Link : http://episodeinteractive.com/s/5548786201264128
I’ll definitely check this out! I wanted to enter this contest too, but since it’s only for US and UK I couldn’t … But I’m still very excited for all the stories from this contest!
Aw man, that’s too bad. It sucks that not everyone can enter the contest… I really appreciate that though! If you do decide to read it, thank you very much and I hope you enjoy it!!! I’ll definitely be checking your story out as well!
Tales from a Russian muffin
A hilarious romp with Vlad, a cheesy, Russian guy and his wing-man. Tell all the sexy ladies that the Italian Stallion and the Russian Muffin are looking for love!Tales from a Russian muffin out now
Hey! Thanks for creating this thread! I’d love to get a feedback!
Story title: Let the demon inside
Genre: Supernatural romance
Description: You have to move back to Dimwood. What will you find there? Love, death or supernatural friends?
Number of episodes:5
Story style: Limelight
Of course, I’ll read it, what did ya think!? And yeah like, it’s kinda sad that not everyone can enter, but there are pretty big prizes involved in this contest too.
Thank you for creating this thread! Here’s my story Courageous!
Story title: Courageous
Description: In a world of men, courage is needed when there’s a death penalty ahead. Defy the laws and fight your home back.
Number of episodes: 5 and soon more!
Story style: Ink
I hope you enjoy the story! And as always, feedback is much appreciated
@pheebsnomenal I’ve got your review!
You should get a large cover. I just think that the cover of a story is the first, most important thing because that’s what the reader sees first, then comes the summary and then they decide if they’ll read it or not.
Okay, so spot directing. Uh … I’m gonna be honest (lol I always am but yeah ) I’m just gonna say, it doesn’t come good if a character is standing somewhere behind, but is still the same height as a tree. (That’s just an example, but it really, every time you are using spot placement your characters end up the wrong size.)
Use timing. Athena walks to the stranger really fast, and then she keeps on walking in place.
How to use timing:
@CHARACTER walks to x y z in zone & in t
x,y,z - position
& - the number of the zone you want the character to stand in
t - time in seconds
The scenes are going really fast, there is nothing smooth in the conversations. You should really take your time when writing and make the scenes long and smooth and just so that when you read it you don’t feel rushed.
I like that there are many choices included!
When you write your text in two lines, be sure to add animations to each one or it will look weird since the character will be talking, but there won’t be any animation.
You’ve really got a problem with coding, the best thing you can do is play it again and again in the app and try to fix the issues until it’s how you want it.
Since this is a short story I expected longer episodes. Or is only the first one that short?
There is missing punctuation too and that quiet many times.
Since your story is a “short story” I would recommend you too read A dare, a crime, a near-miss, it’s an even shorter story (3 episodes), and from an experienced author, but I think it could really help you to understand what I mean, and maybe even learn something, since you’re a new author.
I hope I didn’t come off too harsh, I just don’t think that I can help you improve yourself and the story if I compliment everything, or if I just ignore the issues and errors in your script (your biggest issue is coding, anyway). But don’t worry, hard work and some time can fix anything, you’ll get more skilled and as long as you don’t lose your passion for writing everything will be fine!
Hello we could do a read for read if you want ?
But first: For a guaranteed feedback fill in the form
Link below :
Here is the description of my story
Title : Jungle Fever
Author : Maggy
Genre : Romance/Drama
Style : Ink
Number of episodes : 3 (more episodes coming soon)
Instagram : maggy.episode
Description : A bad boy Prince with a lot of ego and a womanizer, gets lost in the middle of the Jungle and meets a fierce African Princess called Maya. Will he handle the change of environment.
Link : http://episodeinteractive.com/s/5221523745800192
Just a read would be appreciated
Story: Autumn Falls.
Description: As Autumn falls in love for the first time, her life begins to fall apart. As a web of dirty secrets & lies unravel, a dangerous connection between their families is discovered.