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Sure! 
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Thank you for requesting! 
Hereâs your review:
Short Summary
Your story was really impressive! From the idea to the directing, I was really struggling to find any major flaws in your story! I really loved it and will probably continue to read it! Even if this was kind of a sequel, the storyline and plot were pretty clear to understand even without reading the first part! Overall, I think this story was really good!
In Depth Review
First of all, the concept of your story and the plots are just amazing! This story was actually very intriguing to read! I was genuinely curious about what happens in the episode next and I think this story deserves a lot more reads than it already does!
I also really liked your directing and attention to detail in the story! Everything felt well balanced and well thought out. I also really liked your character development! After a few chapters you really start getting a feel for your MC. Your directing is also great! Especially the way you used see-through characters, like Ryder! It really gives a nice effect!
Another thing I absolutely loved about your story was the balance between the two love interests. There are a lot of stories out there, including a couple featured ones! 
) that canât balance the story and choices if there are two love interests. It feels as if one LI is more favored over the other and you really donât see much of the second LI. However, your story included several choices that determine points with both love interests and I really liked that! This might just be because I didnât read the prequel story before this one, but I wish there would have been some time where you really get to know the love interests and maybe a little bit of their back stories, before having to choose several choices that use point systems!
A thing Iâd like to point out is that in the first few chapters, there is a lot of dialogue and backstory explained through speech bubbles. I kind of get that you might have just added it in for people like me who didnât read the prequel and donât know who these guys are. But (in especially the âgirlâs night outâ scene) there was an overwhelming amount of information given to us at once. This might be a really small thing, but I would have loved to see more visuals than speech bubbles. Maybe thatâs just me tho, and I register things slower in general 
This is another personal preference, but maybe adding in a few more choices that affect the future that arenât choices about the Love interests would be good! So far, Iâm on chapter 5, and the only choices Iâve really made feel like they were just to do with point systems and love interests. Iâd like to see more general choices! Maybe even a couple of useless ones like dressing games! Youâre really on the right path and I love what youâre doing so far as far as choices go, but even small choices make the reader feel more attached to the character and really make you think that youâre choosing your own path!
I donât know if you could tell, but I did really have a hard time coming up with valid criticism for your story! Your story had all the factors to a good story and you really exceeded my expectations!
Final Rating
9/10 As you can tell by the rating, your story is as good as 10/10! I really did try to come up with more points about where you could improve, or parts that I didnât like about your story, but your story was actually really good! Youâre definitely going in the right path and overall, if I really liked your story!
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Aww, this made my day! Thank you so much! 
Iâm actually considering adding more choices that arenât related to the love interests. Iâm actually making this huge minigame for my next episode. ;-;
The thing I hate about dressing games is how much effort they take to not really have an impact. I recently added choices that builds the MCâs personality more bc itâs a surviving kind of story.
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Youâre welcome!
And Iâm glad to see that youâre considering adding more choices! (Also, excited to see the minigame! Iâm sure itâll be great! 
)
Thank you so much for requesting! Hereâs your review:
Short Summary
The concept and mysterious feel to your story is astounding! I really liked the kinda âMurder Mysteryâ type of vibe it had and overall I think this is a really good idea and has a lot of potential to be a truly amazing story! As far as directing goes, I think you did a good job, but thereâs a lot more that could have happened and a few bugs/glitches that I found. Overall, your story and plot is thrilling!
In Depth Review
Like I said in the summary, I really did enjoy reading your story! There was a good plot, a mysterious storyline and a little sense of humor, which I absolutely loved! I really like how the story is going so far, and would love to see where it goes! However, (this is solely based on the first four chapters) it did feel a bit cliche, with the whole, âOne close friend group, and then suddenly one of them goes missing!â Of course, this is just based on the first four chapters and I would love to see what plot twists you add to really make your story stand out within probably hundreds that follow the same kind of storyline in the beginning.
I did also feel that as far as overlays and directing goes, it was a bit glitchy. Like the hand overlay used in chapter 2 when weâre waking up one of our friends from the pool table, it didnât exactly match the skin tone I chose. Also the car overlay, (pretty sure in the same chapter, a little bit later) which was used kinda âfadedâ into the scene, rather than already being there. I think your story could me so much more with the use of more advanced directing and the small bug fixes!
There were also a few unnecessary details that I felt werenât needed in the script, or could have been done better. Like in chapter 1, how you mentioned that you made the intro art for your story. I would have understood giving credit if someone else made it, but I donât think it was quite necessary to put that in if you were the one who made it! In the introductions, I wouldâve also preferred if rather than explaining it, the personalities of the characters could have been more reflected through the way they speak, or their actions. But thatâs just a personal preference!
I liked that you included choices that matter into your story! I also liked how it isnât too obvious of which one is the âcorrectâ option! This is a small pet peeve that I have in stories, but I liked how you did it!
And also, like I mentioned in the summary, I liked the small bits of humor you added into the story! I especially liked the main characterâs sassy/sarcastic remarks and how everyone has their own personality.
Final Rating
7/10 I think your story was really good! It was lacking in a few areas, but overall I really liked the concept and idea! Of course, no story is perfect, but with a few changes or more attention to future chapters I really think your story can be successful!
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Ok thank you
Story Title: Accidentally Engaged
Authorâs Name (Your Name): jasmine & rifka
Story Synopsis (Short Summary/Description): Youâre just a regular girl until a chance encounter with a hot, famous and egotistical billionaire who turns you into his fiancĂ©e. {Full CC} Art Scenes.
Sensitive Topics Warning (Any topics that you have included in your story that might be sensitive to the reader): no
Story Link: can I send the link privately please
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Tysm for your words!
Iâll adress some things youâve mentionedâŠ
Firstly⊠I have no idea what hand overlay youâre talking about, because I have not used any hand overlays in my story. I havenât even put up one for approval, so Iâm kinda lost there.
Second, the car overlay was intended to fade into the scene. Iâve seen it in a lot of stories, and I personally like it, but I understand different readers prefer different things.
Also, thank you so much for your words again, glad to hear them!
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Story Title: R&R: Risk in Love
Authorâs Name (Your Name): Whitney Erekson
Story Synopsis (Short Summary/Description): You have the perfect life, you have your friends and family, but when work calls you away you leave it all. Can you really start over or are you doomed?
Sensitive Topics Warning (Any topics that you have included in your story that might be sensitive to the reader): I have none
Story Link: http://episodeinteractive.com/s/5478184239431680
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Hi @sim_epi 
I would like a review too.
Password simreadsstories
Title: I married my troublemaker (limelight)
Author name: Miss Deepika
Style: Limelight
Episode: 23 so far
Description: Fixed marriage with a person who brings trouble in your life, will this marriage turned out to be a success or big misery in your life.
{Art scenes}
Genre: comedy
Ig: @orangeweedie.episode
English is not my first language so kindly bear my small mistakes 
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Thank you for this thread!
Story Title: Cupidâs Curse
Authorâs Name (Your Name): Rachh
Story Synopsis (Short Summary/Description): Renee secretly lives a double life as the famous singer, Renee Miller, and the god of love, Cupid. What happens when she meets a stranger who starts to complicate things?
Sensitive Topics Warning (Any topics that you have included in your story that might be sensitive to the reader): N/A
Story Link: http://episodeinteractive.com/s/6511960248221696
Password: simreadsstories
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Thanks for the thread @sim_epi !!
My story is currently published and I would really appreciate it some constructive criticism
Story Title: This Is Me
Authorâs Name (Your Name): evie
Story Synopsis (Short Summary/Description): A light hearted story about a girl trying to discover herself whilst also falling in love for the first time.
Sensitive Topics Warning (Any topics that you have included in your story that might be sensitive to the reader): none
Story Link: http://episodeinteractive.com/s/5247954509299712
Password: simreadsstories
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@Jazz5 @whitney99 @orangeweedie @rachel.epii @evie.evie Thank you so much for requesting! Iâll add you all to the waiting list!
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Iâm so so sorry! Idk what I saw then! Maybe it was a glitch in the animation? Iâm really sorry about that!
And I see what you were trying to do with the car now! Thanks for clarifying!
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Love this shop! Definitely bookmarking!
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Aw thank you!
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Thank you for Requesting! Hereâs your review: btw Iâm really sorry it took a little longer! I was a bit caught up in school stuff 
Short Summary
Your story (so far) was amazing! I loved the concept and directing! There really werenât that many issues with your story at all and I really like what youâve written so far! I also love the use of art scenes and impactful choices!
In Depth Review
Like i said in the summary, your storyline is really fascinating! At first, it might feel like a classic clichĂ© of how a normal girl meets this famous billionaire, but itâs really so much more! I also really appreciate you directing and find it impressive! From every little detail like a raining effect behind the window or tappable overlays, itâs small details like this that make the story interactive and I love how youâve used them!
I also really liked that youâve used choices that matter or at least determine the characterâs personality. But youâve also included timed choices at the beginning, which can be good/bad depending on the reader! Some people feel pressured, but some people like having timed choices as itâs technically more realistic. Itâs not really a huge issue, but I just wanted to point out that it could be annoying to some readers.
I wouldâve also liked to see a bit more of the MC as after all, we are playing as her. But I understand how you might have done that because the readerâs need to understand the backstory. While it adds a more âinteractive featureâ to your story, in the scene where we have to google about Adelineâs life/ Foster Parents. Weâre basically just playing as another character there. So I would have liked to see a bit more of the MCâs life.
I think Character Development is pretty important in stories. Because itâs only been 3 chapters, you canât really do much to get the characters really attached to your MC. But I do like what youâve done so far! We got a peek into the MCâs feelings and I really liked the way you described them! Although, I personally would have preferred a few flashback scenes that serve no real purpose, but are just there to show the MCâs feelings or just so the readerâs can really start feeling some sort of emotion for the MC. Like when the MC found out that sheâs Adalineâs twin and that she does have a family after all, maybe a few scenes from back at the orphanage showing how the MC wishes she still had her sister, or the MC being sad would have helped a little more! But all in all, I think you did a good job!
Final Rating
9/10 Your story is just incredible! I liked the concept, plot and directing! I think youâre doing a really good job! I also couldnât find any major flaws in your story at all, which is why it has such a high rating! I love what youâre doing and donât think that your story needs any major changes at all!
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Thank you for doing this, Iâd absolutely love a review!
Story Title: FT: Seven Wishes
Authorâs Name (Your Name): Nahla
Story Synopsis (Short Summary/Description): An archaeologist discovers an ancient artefact which could not only advance her career, but offers her 7 wishes to enhance her love life. Ready for a tale worth 1000 and 1 nights?
Sensitive Topics Warning (Any topics that you have included in your story that might be sensitive to the reader): N/A
Story Link: http://episodeinteractive.com/s/5425549718257664
Password: simreadsstories
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